Congrats on finishing the VN.
now, grammar mistakes are common but otherwise, liking it very much, man. TOP STUFF.
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- Sat Jun 04, 2011 12:06 pm
- Forum: Completed Games
- Topic: Untold Myth 1st Tale -Earthbreaking Flight-
- Replies: 17
- Views: 36595
- Thu Jan 20, 2011 1:40 am
- Forum: Skill Development
- Topic: Critique my writing, please.
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1138
Re: Critique my writing, please.
yes, yes I see. This is something I need to work on. Thank you
- Wed Jan 19, 2011 9:56 am
- Forum: Skill Development
- Topic: Critique my writing, please.
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1138
Re: Critique my writing, please.
I see. Hmm, I was intending for Ismail to be the sort of evil man who is formal most of the time, much like intelligent villains.
So, do you think I should give them a longer introduction or some sort?
So, do you think I should give them a longer introduction or some sort?
- Tue Jan 18, 2011 3:51 pm
- Forum: Skill Development
- Topic: Critique my writing, please.
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1138
Re: Critique my writing, please.
It was a cold night in the desert. The freezing breeze was like needles piercing bones through skin. The gibbous moon gazed coldly down to the barren field of sand below, where only the strong survived. The Kulu Desert. It is beautiful, exotic, charming, but like all deserts, danger hides under its...
- Tue Jan 18, 2011 3:50 pm
- Forum: Skill Development
- Topic: Critique my writing, please.
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1138
Critique my writing, please.
Well, I'm still a newbie around here, but I've had some experience in writing. This is one of my old scripts, which I find to be a good example of my skill. Can you please take a look and give me an opinion on it? Here's the characters. Name: Ismail Bin Yusuf Age: Unknown (looks 17) Occupation: Ange...
- Fri Sep 10, 2010 5:04 pm
- Forum: Completed Games
- Topic: 1 Billion Rupiah Girl
- Replies: 16
- Views: 9896
Re: 1 Billion Rupiah Girl
thank you for all your posts. whether it is critique or positive encouragement. My name is shuten, and I am the storywriter for the next project it will be darker, as the concept story goes, and will be written in a better style, we promise. and will be longer indeed. in our defense, in the last con...