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uselessp
PostPosted: Sun Jul 01, 2012 7:14 am 
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Joined: Thu Jun 28, 2012 4:24 am
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Location: indonesia
Completed: The way I live
Projects: Requiem of time, change and chase
Eh... This is my first release. It's still a simple game, though. But at least this can means something. (Personal opinions.)

Actually, this is still at the approval testing stage. SO I'm not quite sure if I should post this game.
Oh, well. At least this game is still safe in age ratings. (Not like I know how to create adult game :wink: )

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Slice of life Kinetic Novel
Including Win32, mac, linux version.

Links: My websites: http://nvup.wordpress.com

Please tell me if the links in there are working. Also, tell me your opinion about the game.
I need to hone my skills even further.

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Coreyrn
PostPosted: Sun Jul 01, 2012 8:04 am 
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Joined: Sun Jul 01, 2012 6:56 am
Posts: 12
Completed: Submerged (Demo), The meadow
I can assure you the links are working, because I just played your game.
It is nice, not out of the ordinary, though it is a bit strange seeing just the background but no character art.

The problem is the language itself, you have to work on your English skills.
There are no spelling errors, but many obvious grammatical errors and the sentences are kind of clipped.
It makes it a bit hard to read, because there is no "flow" when you are reading.


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natsumijam~
PostPosted: Sun Jul 01, 2012 1:41 pm 
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Joined: Mon Jun 11, 2012 1:50 pm
Posts: 16
Location: Somewhere Out there
Projects: I'm thinking of a title...
downloading it now:)

i will put my review here after I finish it playing^^
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uselessp
PostPosted: Mon Jul 09, 2012 7:28 am 
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Location: indonesia
Completed: The way I live
Projects: Requiem of time, change and chase
Coreyrn wrote:
I can assure you the links are working, because I just played your game.
It is nice, not out of the ordinary, though it is a bit strange seeing just the background but no character art.

The problem is the language itself, you have to work on your English skills.
There are no spelling errors, but many obvious grammatical errors and the sentences are kind of clipped.
It makes it a bit hard to read, because there is no "flow" when you are reading.


Hm... After some serious reviews, you are right. I'm sorry for bringing inconvenience even to the forums and your entertainment. I guess I need to improve my English skills further (Sadly, I'm a pure Indonesian.... :( ). Thanks for posting my mistakes. Now I can improve my level again. :wink:

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ngareci
PostPosted: Tue Jul 24, 2012 11:27 pm 
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Joined: Tue May 22, 2012 12:53 am
Posts: 157
Location: Indonesia
Completed: Grinning Heart: the meeting, Nacira
Projects: Grinning Heart: the voyage
Another indonesian VN!
I'm downloading it now.. :)

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Ragtag
PostPosted: Thu Jul 26, 2012 7:06 am 
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Joined: Sat Apr 28, 2012 5:10 am
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I'm going to take a look at this. Will let you know my impression later :)
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Taleweaver
PostPosted: Thu Jul 26, 2012 7:16 am 
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Joined: Tue Nov 11, 2003 8:51 am
Posts: 2054
Location: Germany
Completed: Metropolitan Blues, The Loyal Kinsman, Daemonophilia, The Dreaming, The Thirteenth Year, Adrift, Bionic Heart 2
Projects: The Pilgrim's Path, Elspeth's Garden, Secret Adventure Game!
Organization: Tall Tales Productions
Can you put up a few screenshots of your game, so that we can see the visual aspects of your kineno?

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tiya_nofurita
PostPosted: Thu Jul 26, 2012 9:33 am 
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Joined: Fri Jun 22, 2012 7:23 pm
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Location: Yogyakarta, Indonesia
Completed: Pharmacy Quiz, Physical Pharmacy, Tour de Pharmacy
Projects: The Devil, ERASER
Organization: NSAID
Looks like I'm familiar with the title, maybe on renai.us ? forget lol
Oh, are you Indonesian too ? Nice to meet you ><

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