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Finally! My first Kinetic Novel has released~!

This is a simple short Kinetic Comedy Novel about a vampire and a lost traveller.
It's about how they're in love each other No, I won't make it that cliche. It's about how's vampire tricked the lost traveller.
The story begins with a bored Vampire who stayed in the castle over thousands years, and he wants something new in his life.
And Suddenly, a traveller with unexpected circumstance, come to his life.
The traveller true self was a famous handsome-man hunter, person who go around the world to take handsome-man's photographs. And the vampire is her next prey.
While she was acting cool, she didn't know that the Vampire can read her mind.

Characters

Traveller



She keep unnamed untill the end of the game. She was a hot-blooded naive woman that travel around the world to fullfill her desire: to collect handsome-man photographs as much as she can. Even she always being rejected to take their pictures, she won't give up and will do whatever it takes to do her ambition, as long as it won't hurt her pride. She was a happy-go-lucky type of person anyway.


Vampire



He also keep unnamed untill the end of the game. He was a cool and tricky person. An immortal that lives for thousand of years. And cannot leave the castle because of a reason. He spend his eternity in boredom, untill the traveller come to save his life.

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I just love simple visual novel, and comedy one, that can make me laugh, and can make people laugh. And free~ because free is fun! That's why I create this one.
I made this for around 10 days, and I'm so happy after it was finished.
It's a very simple KN, around 5-10 minutes playtime, just like a sweet snack



Rating : 13+
Genre : Kinetic novel, Fantasy, Comedy
Estimate Playtime : 5-10 minutes

English Version
The game contains 269 screens of dialogue.
These screens contain a total of 1,378 words,
for an average of 5.1 words per screen.
The game contains 0 menus.

Bahasa Indonesia Version
The game contains 269 screens of dialogue.
These screens contain a total of 1,239 words,
for an average of 4.6 words per screen.
The game contains 0 menus.

Deutsche Version
The game contains 269 screens of dialogue.
These screens contain a total of 1,462 words,
for an average of 5.4 words per screen.
The game contains 0 menus.

Spanish Version
The game contains 269 screens of dialogue.
These screens contain a total of 1,340 words,
for an average of 5.0 words per screen.
The game contains 0 menus.

Credits
Story writer, Artist & Coder : Ngareci
Music : Jonathon Roberts (jmtr.com)
Proof reader (English version) : TheTourist
German Translation : Marcel Weyers


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ENGLISH VERSION
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BAHASA INDONESIA VERSION
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DEUTSCHE VERSION
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SPANISH VERSION
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Updated 11/8/2012
- TheTourist has updated the English version above due some of grammar mistakes.
- Marcel Weyers translate it in Deutsche ( Thank you! ) So, here's the deutsche version~!
- It has been 203 downloads!! Thank you!!

Updated 10/9/2012
This game got Uncle Mugen's Stamp of Approval!! This is awesome!! XD XD

Updated 25/10/2012
- Iuliana translate it in Spanish! (thank you!~). Here's Spanish version!
(I've made a little mistake for copy the linux version of this, so I dont insert it here unless someone ask privately)



Read on Youtube by Kero Hime in Germany

Part 1 : http://youtu.be/J7u6rdEmrFA
Part 2 : http://youtu.be/EKlA-V0UrCc
Part 3 : http://youtu.be/cYjkDmILzEA

(You guys have to know how much I loooove the dubbing! And how I laugh so hard in joy for it. Thank you very much!!)


Here's some words about Grinning Heart:

-From Uncle Mugen




-From Ran

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-From Kuroi Shiro

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-From Nastar Hitam (in Bahasa Indonesia)

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-From OtakuQueenFoxy

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Hahaha, this made me giggle! You did this in 10 days? Great job!

The little thought chibis are adorable

Thank you for the giggle, haha..
Yes, I was really enjoyed it when I made these chibis

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Ah, it's really a funny game. Adorable chibis and nice backgrounds~ ^_^ Although you might want to get more proofreaders
to check before releasing

... And it was too short TT^TT I wish there will be a continuation of this~

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JESUS CHRIST, GOOGLING HOW TO UNRAR STUFF IS EASIER THAN WAITING FOR 1000 DAYS FOR A REPLY. SRSLY.

Hey! Don't insult the proofreading!

(Though, playing through it now, I totally missed a few errors. That is completely and utterly my fault, not the creator's, for which I apologize. Again, any mistakes in grammar and spelling are my fault, not Ngareci's.)

Anyway, I definitely enjoyed the vibrant and amusing tale here, even if I'm still trying to figure out how a girl gets into the profession of stalking men and taking their picture.

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Thank you!
Aha, I was happy with TheTourist proofread, and it's not a problem for me for some errors, eventhough, I'm sorry if it makes a little bit uncomfortable for readers..
And yes, I'm planning to make grinning heart the series, still short and nice piece, wish me luck~!




Don't worry bigbro~! Some errors won't hurt..
And, in this fast growing world, don't be suprise if someday, professional handsome-man hunter profession will exist..

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Just played this game! =D
Although it was a short plot, it managed to make me laugh and get the humour revolving around the characters' personalities across so well done. It's pretty good for a first.

I really loved how we were able to read what the characters were thinking as the story progressed and the chibi bubbles? XD
If there is any constructive criticism I could offer.. it would be that in my opinion (some may disagree especially as I'm kind of new to this and may not completely understand the concept of a kinetic novel) the story relied heavily on dialogue and the character's thoughts. I would personally like to read more descriptions that would entice the reader and stimulate further imagination besides the pictures being presented eg. description of castle, third person narration.

But that's just a suggestion, either way I enjoyed it and congratulate you on it! =D

Thank you! And you're right, I can dig some descriptive narration more on the script. I'll make sure the next series will be like that. Thank you for the suggestion!!

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C-Can I laugh now? =))
Well it is very, very short indeed, but it's great for first VN! Can't help to contain more laughter from the traveller's thoughts and about the fake the end--okay, there's more but I think it is not okay to blabber too much.

What I can say is add more description/narration throughout so the situation looks more intense. Oh, and I was hoping more CGs, but that's okay. [Notes: Repair your EYD more xD]

Yes, and thank you~!
And indeed, my EYD is bad, I just used my feelings and my everyday bahasa when I'm make the bahasa version. But that's will be my lesson in the sequel..

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This was a very enjoyable game! The music made everything dramatic even if everything was supposed to be comedy, haha. I was smiling throughout the game play.

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I've played it ! This is sure a comedy KN ^_^

May I give you some suggestion ? IMO The character name color's is almost indistinguishable (or it's just my eyes ?)
Next time you can try to pick very "clear" different colors (i.e : blue with red)

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ATL can do many things !
ERASER [Slice of Life][Sci-fi] : My Next Project Visual Novel

DOODLE COMPILATION

"All things are poison, and nothing is without poison; only the dose permits something not to be poisonous" (Paracelsus, The Father of Toxicology)
So Visual Novel overdose = POISON XD

"Let us learn to DREAM, then we may perhaps find the truth" (August Kekule, the benzene structure inventor)
so let me sleep at least 8 hours per day !

Thank you! I'm very glad you enjoy it!!



Yes, I'm having a problem with the color. I just copy-paste the exist one and change the number a little bit because I'm afraid change it too much will break the entire code..
May I ask you how to pick the clear color?
And thank you for playing!!

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Haha! Why didn't I play this sooner? This was a very nice, entertaining little KN. Thank you for sharing it!

I love your art too! I do have to say that the last scene was probably my favorite. XD And the continued ending. Haha. Any criticisms I would have look like they've been said already. (Like a little more description)
I look forward to your future works! Good luck with them!

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A Rose By Any Other Name (Short Fantasy KN) (WIP)

Haha, thank you for playing!!
I'm glad you like the last scene! (And yes, it also makes me laugh for several days while making it)
And I'll try my best for my future works, good luck to you too!!
Thank you~!

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