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Hey guys. I'm Gee and I want to present to you guys my very first official game.
First of all, I've never never used this program and so it's not perfect. Plus all the characters were drawn by myself and so I know they're not the best of drawings. Also I did use certain characters from different games and anime as a outline. Backgrounds were taken from the internet and photoshopped and I do not own any of the background pictures. I know this practice is wrong but this was originally just a project and I didn't feel like searching for more pictures. Songs were taken from Dan-O from danosongs.com and from one song from origen. Program used was Novelty. So yeah, if you find anything that you believe belongs to you and that I've stolen it from you, if you can prove it to me that it's yours then I can take the game down. Otherwise, the game stays. All in all, it's a simple game with only a few choices and it'll only take a couple hours to finish. I hope you guys enjoy it and tell me what you think.

Download Link:

http://www.mediafire.com/?8cvb1zu6rp7pq8d

Story summary:
Your uncle has built a machine to enter fairy tales but he needs your help to make it possible. Upon entering the machine, you enter the world of Cinderella but the problem is, you're the prince and the royal ball is taking place in a week. Now you have to learn to become prince charming and make it in time to sweep Cinderella off her feet.

There are 3 possible endings plus 1 bad ending I guess.

Extra Details
The game took me all summer to build since I drew my own characters and had to learn novelty from scratch
I included a Direct X setup just in case you don't have it already.
This game is not for commercial sale and is strictly a free project.
Sadly enough, it's a non-hentai game so....
If you like the game then tell me what you think
If you want to contact me then my email is : [email protected]
I also have plans for a new game and if you're interested in helping then feel free to leave a message.

Known Issues:
When loading, the background turns black.
No skip button, hold ctrl or space to skip
When ending the game, it'll close but it'll give a stop responding message.

Welcome to the forum, Gee.

I don't know if you've been lurking on this forum, so you might have missed hearing about the indie VN Cinders. It doesn't have much in common with your story, but since both of them riff on Cinderella, comparisons will be inevitable...

I read a modest amount of "Retelling." There were a few small typos, but I was left with no major complaints. I don't recall if the story explained how it was possible to visit another dimension/reality that happened to be a fairy tale in real life... did I miss a line or two?

Also, keep in mind that some people on this forum don't like or search for adult content.

Screenshots would be nice.

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I would love to play it, but there is only a windows version. Perhaps you can make a Mac one.

I am writing this list of things I noticed while playing, so don't await too much structure.

-The title of the window is "Untitled", you should change that to your games name.

-One of the Uncles sprites has no eyes, is that intended?

-Eva's text is hard to read sometimes because of the color, especially on bright backgrounds.

-Veronicas text is hard to read too at some points because of the color.

-And Vivians text, too.

-The half transparent background of the text box and the changing colors of the background are the cause of this. Maybe you should use less transparency or other colors for your text.

So much for thing I noticed while playing.
The Story is nice and easy to read. The backgrounds are a bit distracting sometimes because there are artifacts from the filter applied to them and that makes them look like under a layer of transparent gel. The character graphics are nice and distinctive. The music is appropriate but nothing outstanding there.

All in all good entertainment, except for the few text problems.

Thanks for the replies so far guys.
I didn't want to get into details about how the machine works because I thought it'd be boring to the readers.
I don't have a mac version and I don't know how to make one :[ I could suggest an app called parrallel that allows mac users to run window apps.
And thanks for the comments about the text color. I didn't take that into consideration but I see what you mean now. I'll have to consider that next time.

The writing is good. I like the sprites and the effort you put into the different expressions.

Very, very well done for a first game! can't wait until your next one.

Watch me play the first 10 minutes: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wjaqSGCh3ks

Susan

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