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TITLE: mister average
CATEGORY: Lovecraftian Horror, Slice of Life, Kinetic Short Story

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WARNING: MAY CONTAIN DISTURBING OR GRAPHIC CONTENT
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SUMMARY
A story about Daniel, a schoolboy in the New England town of Arkham who just wants
to be average and fit in with everybody else—but in a calculatingly manipulative way.
How things fit is very important to him.

And things that are out of place bother him. A lot.

Unfortunately, this is Arkham, where the unusual is the norm ...

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STATS
The game contains 737 dialogue blocks, containing 8,180 words and 44,925
characters, for an average of 11.1 words and 61 characters per block.
The game contains 8 menus, 52 images, and 15 screens.

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UPDATES
7/18/13: need to redo some images. gamma/contrast issues.
7/18/13: any comments, mistakes, etc. much appreciated.

Oh wow this seems really interesting and unique!
I'll make sure to play it when I have some free time!

(Congratz on the release!!~)

It looks interesting design. I'm going to download it and drop my feedback later

thank you. hope it's okay.
i'll limit my replies. i don't want to self-bump too much.

Wow, you did a pretty good job on this one. The main character was great, and I did not see that ending coming. Overall, this was a nice read. Can't wait for your next game!

I love how you used minimalistic graphics to build the atmosphere. And the ending was surprising and yet it really fit. Honestly, just that emotional punch in the gut was enough to make this one of my top 10 favorite VNs.

Creeeeepy! I loved the visuals; they really helped you feel the character's other-ness.
You did a good job of giving us just enough information to form a story without it feeling like an infodump or being too concrete; the uncertainty fuels the horror.

thanks for playing!

heh, i'm just the writer. i am not responsible for the behaviors and actions of my characters. sometimes they can be such naughty, unruly children. o_O

srsly tho, i wrote three endings - good, bad, neutral.
(edit2: doh! shoulda put spoiler tag on this part *facepalm*) (edit1: hmm, you make a good point. i'm not sure how to implement a warning without giving anything away. in horror, one expects to encounter unpleasant, disturbing things. perhaps a general warning along the lines of "WARNING: MAY CONTAIN DISTURBING OR GRAPHIC CONTENT"?

i guess i've become somewhat jaded to what's on the internet, so my mental/moral threshold level for awful things is out of whack. QQ)

Ohh, that's why you had choices! I was confused because there were lots of choices to make, but I could only get one ending... in a way, that underscores the point even more about the inescapability of it all.

I think the warning you put in is just fine, thanks.

Ah ah ah, and here I was trying to reach the alternative endings.

I enjoyed reading this, visuals were great, style and tone were good at setting the mood.
Reminds me a little of Higanbana, but you managed to keep your own style.
The opening menu was impressive The only regret is for the end to be this abrupt (it states "the end", without a forced pause).
But it's very minor, I only bring it up for the sake of constructive criticism.

Thanks for creating this (weird ) KN !

ah, thank you for the criticism! i really appreciate it!

i'll have to look over the story again. some stories are easy to write, others are hard. i remember struggling with this one, so i probably made a lot of mistakes.

i also need to clean up the images, but i'm trying to finish three stories right now. and there are some typos i need to fix on some old projects. and ... QQ

anyway, i'm glad you enjoyed the story! =)

Oh yeah, one bug I thought I'd mention - if you click on "Help" from the main menu screen before you start the game, the help text is not erased and so the main text starts going off the bottom. Maybe a missing "nvl clear" at the end of the help section? Other than that it was bug- and typo-free.

augh! *facedesk* might have made the mistake converting from adv to nvl. i think i originally wrote it as adv. can't remember.

thanks! i probably would have kept repeating that mistake/bug if you hadn't told me.