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PostPosted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 9:22 am 
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Well, I've done it. I've finally completed a VN.

十手黎明 ~ Jitteh Dawn

Premise: You are Hogi Hasekura, an eager student who wants to find out a secret about the once-glorious Ippongi family.

Yes, I know that the proper spelling is "jitte," but I wanted to make it easier to pronounce for those who aren't familiar with Japanese pronunciation.

Here are some screenshots, as well as the program itself.

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UPDATE: Mac OS X version now up.

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UPDATE: Linux version now up, at the request of Barz. Should have done this sooner, but the other two just took so long to upload that I didn't even bother.

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PostPosted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 10:04 am 
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Congratulations! It's a nice surprise :D

Being able to complete a VN without talking about it first... you have my utmost respect.


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PostPosted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 10:20 am 
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Thanks, DaFool. I figured that there was no point in announcing a project that I wasn't even sure I could complete. Then there's the issue of anticipation..."stealth projects" are the way to go, if you ask me.

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PostPosted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 2:37 pm 
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Hey there! I just finished the game, and I really enjoyed it.

My favorite aspect was the story-line. It was a fascinating mystery. Only one gripe:

I really wish the mystery would have been related to the half-demon thing. The explanation you gave was interesting, but a more mythical approach using the half-demon reference in the beginning would have been even more interesting.


Overall, this game was really good! Great writing, an original idea, and an overall great VN! :3

Congratulations!


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PostPosted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 3:00 pm 
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So, PrettySammy09, you got the best ending on the first go? Well that's good to hear. :)

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PostPosted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 3:15 pm 
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Heh, I got one of the
police ones
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Good writing... you got the pseudo-Japan feel really nice.
Coffee saves your life? WTF. :shock:


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PostPosted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 3:59 pm 
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Overall fun game... would have reached best ending first try except that I intentionally saved and ran the other way expecting to hit an ending that way faster first. :)

My main criticism with this is that the tone/seriousness of it was sort of uneven... we started out with this mythology bit, then very very real-world normal stuff, then suddenly a gigantic pile of slightly unbelievable plot happenings (getting that lost, abandoned houses, being found when you weren't even anywhere in particular, her being a relative, the general impression that death by starvation happens within a couple of hours...) and then finally the explanation of the family secret, which raised a whole lot more questions than it answered, especially about the gameworld. So my final response was more 'Huh?' and a desire to jump in and argue with the characters.


Anyway, it was entertaining and an interesting break from chasing girls. ;)

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PostPosted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 4:50 pm 
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Ivlivs wrote:
So, PrettySammy09, you got the best ending on the first go? Well that's good to hear. :)


Oh no! I did all the endings in order -1,2,3,4! XD I just played nonstop to get them all!! That's how much fun it was!

(Pfft....me? Get the best ending on the first try? Yeah right. Talk to chromulnaire about Elven Relations... I'm the worst ending-getter on this forum!)


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PostPosted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 5:23 pm 
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I wrote this thing with no outline whatsoever.

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PostPosted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 5:37 pm 
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Hm, played it and enjoyed it, even if the timeline feels a bit compressed in places.

Are all the resources original?

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PostPosted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 5:41 pm 
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No - quite the opposite, in fact. Almost all of the art is free - the places I got it from are right there on the title screen.

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PostPosted: Fri Jul 13, 2007 5:46 am 
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Very interesting, congratulations :D -
I got Ending 5 first en route to 4 then I got 3, 2 and 1 in that order. For me, Endings 1 and 2 were much better done and were more credible and intriguing than 3 and 4. I'll wait a while before doing the full review, to see if you're able to find a character artist.

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PostPosted: Fri Jul 13, 2007 8:44 am 
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While I have seen the art before (i.e. in Japanese pieces), this is the first time seeing them in an OELVN. So you have at least that lockdown on first-exposure.

Art is like music, you always remember the first time you encountered them (e.g. you hear a tune while driving through a cornfield, the next time you hear the song you are reminded of cornfields).

I must say the use of the art was very effective, they do not seem alien to this project.


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PostPosted: Fri Jul 13, 2007 9:16 am 
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This story was fascinating, and it worked just fine on OS X. I liked the characterization -- no bizarre stereotypes. I especially liked the "alternate modern Earth" setting. As far as I could tell, it was the equivalent of 1993 or earlier, since the hero had heard rumors of computer networks, but had never experienced a BBS.

I was still thinking about the story afterward, trying to figure out the way in which the events were related. Let's see...

1. At one time, there was some feudal lord who married a half demon. This practice was apparently shunned. 2. Their relationship is apparently not well-documented in history books. 3. There is a family, including a teacher and a boyfriend, with which the protagonist and his sister interact, which is said to trace back to the dishonored lord. 4. This family is immune to at least one lethal modern disease. 5. The current emperor, who has political power, is out to get them.

From those five facts, I concluded that the family, including the teacher and the boyfriend, were all (secretly) descended from the half-demon. Is that a logical conclusion?


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PostPosted: Sat Jul 14, 2007 5:55 am 
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I have a question, since I wanted to play this game, but then I saw that thread asking for assistance in replacing the graphics... is this game "complete"? Or are you still working on it? I'm asking because if it was complete, we'd like to mirror it on the RAA (http://www.renai.us) - if you give us permission.


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