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Introduction
I announce "Nevermore", a fully voiced, moderately short kinetic novel about insomnia. You can watch a short video preview demonstrating the art used in this project. For the sake of completeness, you can view the development thread.

Screenshot


Downloads

• Windows installer (31.24 MB): http://www.mediafire.com/?grmyztjz3nz
• Macintosh app (35.08 MB): http://www.mediafire.com/?41qlmq4ofti
• Linux x86 archive (31.43 MB): http://www.mediafire.com/?nlmzyyikioe
• Windows/Macintosh/Linux combined archive (40.4 MB): http://www.mediafire.com/?2eiewwezmya

Credits

• Art: BCS
• Story/Production: Kazuki Mishima
• Music: Kevin MacLeod
• Voice cast (by appearance): Kazuki Mishima, sake-bento, Usagi Tsukino, Flamzeron
• Ren'Py visual novel engine: PyTom

Yossha! I played this with headphones for full sound effect. Totally worth it. XD In an attempt to be a more useful contributor, I am actually leaving more than just a few comments this time. Let's see how well that goes.

Plot
The story was simple and unadorned, but presented well. There wasn't much exposition, but you still explained what was going on, and I think the way the mystery is revealed is very nicely done. It's also very nice how you took the premade graphics and managed to weave a coherent story around them. I actually was pretty cool with not knowing the test results, but having them at the end does open the door for a lot more now. I always find your stories to be interesting and a nice break from the norm. I'd love to see you work on a longer story with a more developed plot.

SFX, Music
I think the music you chose was spot on. It gave a lot of atmosphere, and the final piece was especially well-suited. SFX were good for the most part, but I feel like the knocking on the door was a little heavier than I imagined a "rapping" to be. Small nitpick, there.

Voices
-Kazuki: You have a nice, clear voice, but you sound a little bit bored. The quality of your lines feels as if you a reading aloud rather than acting. This is most evident during the narration at the beginning. I think you got more comfortable with your character later on, especially in the quieter scenes. Major props to you for voicing your character.

-Usagi: Your voice is very mature and fitting for both your characters, but watch your enunciation. The nurse, especially, needs a much clearer voice. I also feel as if you brought a little bit of "anime dub" to her when she should sound more realistic due to the nature of the story. I like the voice you chose for the doctor much more. Very straightforward and matter of fact. For some of the lines, they could probably have sounded more authoritative, since she is a doctor, after all. Good job differentiating two characters with similar voices.

-Flamezeron: I like your voice, and the delivery is pretty solid for the most part. The first few lines had a nice tone to them, but I think when he's talking about his wife, he shouldn't be so matter of fact. This is the woman he loves, and she's gone now. I think the father would struggle a bit with his emotions when talking about her, especially since he thinks his son is now suffering the same thing.

Thank you very much for the in-depth review, sake-bento.

Between the voice acting and the animation, this felt more like an short anime than a written story. Kudos for that. Both the art and the voice acting felt amateurish, but that didn't really bother me.

What bothered me was the ending.

Wintermoon: I'm glad you liked the story in general. I can see why you find the ending frustrating.

Peace,
Kazuki Mishima

I decided to give this one a try. Here's my impression:

Voice acting: most of the characters sounded rather bored. Because of that I started skipping it early, simply because I felt that I was getting more out of it imagining them myself. ^^'

Plot: I thought it was interesting but it feels rather choppy. A lot of parts felt 'cut-off' and could benefit from being longer. A lot of times I wanted to hear more, but the story simply moved on to the next scene. I feel like it has a lot of potential but doesn't make full use of it.