sake-bento wrote:
I'll be honest: I'm feeling a little bit defensive, but I'll take it with a grain of salt. I don't doubt I made mistakes. In fact, I do see one in the demo as we speak, but I like to think my grammar and spelling are at a decent level. I even had other people with college level educations look over it multiple times, since I know that it's always difficult for the original writer to see the typos. So how many mistakes did we miss to make it "waaaay too many?" I'd hate to think that our combined efforts still make us look like a thirteen-year-old who has just discovered the YouTube comment system.
That being said, I am grateful for the review. It was well organized, and the cons don't really seem nearly as heavy as the pros, so it's still positive, despite not actually recommending the game. XD
I was a bit too harsh in my review, I think, as the grammar issues were mostly just typos. The story was written well, it just had some issues that broke the flow of the reading. I'm truly sorry; I did make it sound as though the game was written by a thirteen year old Youtuber, which wasn't the case. xD I'm going to replay the demo today and try to find all of the typos I saw the first time; if it really wasn't that many, I'll write up a full apology. Again, I'm really sorry for making the review so harsh!
Deji: Ah, thank you! I was very nervous as I typed up this review. ;-; And it's okay; the pixels didn't ruin the game or anything, it's just something that caught my eye. :)
Edit: I'm really sorry if I pissed any of you off (which I probably did, knowing me)! The game was very well made, and out of all the OELVNs I've played, it was by far the best in art quality, writing, and presentation. Hands down, it
is one of the best english visual novels on the web. I just feel that it isn't quite commercial game quality - though honestly, it's close. I did like this game a lot, and I wish you guys the best in the development of future games! I'm looking forward to them. :)