ERASER [Drama][Sci-fi] + Webcomic UPDATED!

[tiya_nofurita]

might as well to write my idea here before it's too late and I lost my motivation...

I want you to erase my memories...

Synopsis
It's Summer 2010. I was given an assignment for my "final project" to watch over Violanda Margaritifera, an ordinary 17-year old high school girl, who is participated on the pilot project/clinical trial of some kind of new substance on development. It is said that the substance has an effect on erasing some specific parts of someone's memories...Instead of having a standard procedures which require her to stay on the isolated facility during the treatment, she was given a freedom to lead a normal everyday life and attend school like she usually did. As the consequences, I have to watch her on her school and disguise my appearance as high-schoolers too. However, that girl is more troublesome than she looks...and many things is not going smoothly as I planned...

Characters
So far there are 2 main characters on this VN, maybe I'll add some minor characters as well on the future

Tito

The protagonist of this story. 20 years-old, calm and mature, rarely shows up any emotions. He was given an assignment to watch certain girl regarding some clinical trial. Graduated from university as Bachelor student at age 17, and now he is "hired" by some pharmaceutical company to conduct a research. He is strictly bound by the "contract" made by the company, so he is not allowed to make any mistakes and complaints on his job and tend to be so obedient with his superior. Not many has known about his background, as he himself seems can't remember his childhood too well. Never been on relationship for his entire life.

Violanda Margaritifera

A bright, lovely, and cheerful girl from her appearance, but who knows what's in her mind actually. Her background is complex. What is her real intention to be a volunteer on the uncertain clinical trial and bear a really big consequences for her life ? Only for the high incentives, or what ?

Planning
Will be a free VN, of course
1. Linear story (some choices will be available but none of them has any big consequences on the ending)
2. Short VN (less than 1 hour reading, I suppose ?)
3. Multi-sight system ? So you can see the story both from Vio's and Tito's perspective
4. TIPS (mini glossary) for layreaders, as you may encounter some weird, uh, scientifical terms on this VN (I'm going to make it as simple as possible)
5. Done on 2014

Progress ? Nope, just an idea. I'm planning this is as my single project though (I will be the scriptwriter, coder and illustrator/character designer), maybe I'll need one or two proofreader later.

CGs
But I do have some CGs done (just a concept, dunno if I'm gonna use this)

Promotional Video
I warn you, the contents is quite random. Made with Ren'py with some basic ATL. Rather jagged and not synchronize because of the video compressor. Blame the settings of my CamStudio
UPDATED 7/3/2013 : Remake Version
not many has changed, though. and still jagged

I'm Chemistry freak, but don't let it bother you~

*bumped* UPDATE [8-2-2013]
Cutscene
Unpolished and unfinished, but just enjoy it

So I am really grateful for any feedback ! Thank you~

[azureXtwilight]

Wah, nggak kapok bikin game tentang farmasi? Hihi.

By the way, I am interested with your premise, and nice art too! Keep up the good work!

[tiya_nofurita]

Wah, nggak kapok bikin game tentang farmasi? Hihi.

By the way, I am interested with your premise, and nice art too! Keep up the good work!

kapok bahasa inggrisnya apa ya ?
At least my knowledge will not be useless :p
You should make some kind of medical VN too Azure XD (but your Doppelganger VN already contain some of weird medical stuff I don't really understand :p)
Thank you !

[desulishor]

The premise is definitely interesting, there's room for so many bad endings and developments, and tons of drama. But Yea, could definitely use some proofreading/editing. (kind of volunteering myself, even if I I don't know about the schedule yet.)

[tiya_nofurita]

The premise is definitely interesting, there's room for so many bad endings and developments, and tons of drama. But Yea, could definitely use some proofreading/editing. (kind of volunteering myself, even if I I don't know about the schedule yet.)

1.Thanks
2.Do you think I should provide more than one ending instead of kinetic novel ?
3.I suppose so. I'm not a native speaker of English, so you may must notice many grammatical errors

[desulishor]

to answer 2, Yes. While this sort of a story might be hard for a writer, (I'm the type who shares all the feelings of his characters...) a choice or two could really make the reader think, what do the characters feel, why did they end up making the choices they do in the true course of the story. A chance to 'save' the story could also make the characters easier to appreciate, rather than just watching everything unfold while not having a choice.

[tiya_nofurita]

to answer 2, Yes. While this sort of a story might be hard for a writer, (I'm the type who shares all the feelings of his characters...) a choice or two could really make the reader think, what do the characters feel, why did they end up making the choices they do in the true course of the story. A chance to 'save' the story could also make the characters easier to appreciate, rather than just watching everything unfold while not having a choice.

Is that so ? Hmmm, I'll think about it

[zankizuna]

Cool
My VN Erasers has memory erasure too, but it was at the start of the story. meaning,
the main character had Amnesia. your story is different from mine, totally, don't worry

[Ran08]

Ahh, this seems interesting.
I kinda like VNs that play with memories. Well, will you have more characters soon?

[tiya_nofurita]

Cool
My VN Erasers has memory erasure too, but it was at the start of the story. meaning,
the main character had Amnesia. your story is different from mine, totally, don't worry

Yes, both of our concept is very different XD But I might change the concept as well in the middle of my work teheeheee

[tiya_nofurita]

Ahh, this seems interesting.
I kinda like VNs that play with memories. Well, will you have more characters soon?

Glad you like it. Unfortunately, due to my own reason IRL, I have to pending this project for a while, at least until October/November 2013. So there will be no development until that. Sorry to dissapoint you, but I'll try my best to continue this project. Haaaaa~ being a Sci-Tech Pharmacy student is hard, I feel like dig my own grave

[tiya_nofurita]

UPDATED ANOTHER VIDEO, PPL
while the story is going nowhere
This time we will see from Vio's perspective

[tiya_nofurita]

Alright, still no progress until this point. But I always think of the continuation of this project -..-
Here, have a screenshot

[azureXtwilight]

Wow, it's like an anime screenshot! Awesome! Will that be a CG for the game?

[tiya_nofurita]

Wow, it's like an anime screenshot! Awesome! Will that be a CG for the game?

Wooot, fake anime screenshoot success Glad you think like that ! Actually, I---I still don't know