Jared [Mystery], [GxB]
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Re: Jared [Mystery-murder], [Romance/Otome], [Slice-of-life?
Hi!
To update everyone on the progress, here's a short excerpt of the prologue of Jared:
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It's dark in here. All I see is an endless vision of black. I don't remember a time where I felt more blind in my life...Without anything to see, I remain motionless in the small closet. I hope they won't find me...
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How long do I have I stayed like this? Maybe they're gone. Maybe I can leave! No! I can't move! I must stay still. I'll never know, they may come back.
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It's dark in here. And very, very... Quiet, peaceful... All I can hear is the sound of my own heartbeat and my heavy pants of breath echoing in the empty air. It seems so loud right now... I feel so cold...have I ever felt this cold before? Maybe I have... Will I be able to keep this up?What was that?
"Look over there! She must be here somewhere!"
Oh no! They're in here. I push myself against the back of this closet hoping that a hole would swallow me up. I cover my mouth, letting out pants of breath uncontrollably. Is this chase going to end? Will I die here? All I can do now is to clasp my hands and hope-
No!
I slowly release my hands from my mouth and open my eyes. Hope! Can I really rely on hope after all that has happened? No! Not now! Come on! I can here them coming closer! They will find me soon and once they do-
"She's here!"
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To update everyone on the progress, here's a short excerpt of the prologue of Jared:
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It's dark in here. All I see is an endless vision of black. I don't remember a time where I felt more blind in my life...Without anything to see, I remain motionless in the small closet. I hope they won't find me...
...
How long do I have I stayed like this? Maybe they're gone. Maybe I can leave! No! I can't move! I must stay still. I'll never know, they may come back.
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It's dark in here. And very, very... Quiet, peaceful... All I can hear is the sound of my own heartbeat and my heavy pants of breath echoing in the empty air. It seems so loud right now... I feel so cold...have I ever felt this cold before? Maybe I have... Will I be able to keep this up?What was that?
"Look over there! She must be here somewhere!"
Oh no! They're in here. I push myself against the back of this closet hoping that a hole would swallow me up. I cover my mouth, letting out pants of breath uncontrollably. Is this chase going to end? Will I die here? All I can do now is to clasp my hands and hope-
No!
I slowly release my hands from my mouth and open my eyes. Hope! Can I really rely on hope after all that has happened? No! Not now! Come on! I can here them coming closer! They will find me soon and once they do-
"She's here!"
End of Excerpt (hehehe)
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Re: Jared [Mystery-murder], [Romance/Otome], [Slice-of-life?
I like the idea, but there are a few things I'm not sure about.
Firstly, does it need to be an otome? It sounds like a darker plotline would suit it better. Unless you're going for serious yandere i guess.
Secondly, how does the protagonist do things? It seems like dragging yourself into a famous organisation when you're being hunted by government would just attract attention.
Firstly, does it need to be an otome? It sounds like a darker plotline would suit it better. Unless you're going for serious yandere i guess.
Secondly, how does the protagonist do things? It seems like dragging yourself into a famous organisation when you're being hunted by government would just attract attention.
Re: Jared [Mystery-murder], [Romance/Otome], [Slice-of-life?
1. I think the plot is fairly interesting because there's so much you can do with it!
2. I really love the idea but how would you make it believable, seeing that its a world which is created?
3. Nope, I think your characters have a personality which is different from each other's, which I like to find in games!
4. It has to be the main character Hope for me.
5. Yes, I can't wait to see how the characters look like if you ever decide to become serious with this game and develop it more
2. I really love the idea but how would you make it believable, seeing that its a world which is created?
3. Nope, I think your characters have a personality which is different from each other's, which I like to find in games!
4. It has to be the main character Hope for me.
5. Yes, I can't wait to see how the characters look like if you ever decide to become serious with this game and develop it more
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Re: Jared [Mystery-murder], [Romance/Otome], [Slice-of-life?
Hi!
@burnt offering:
@Lexi:
@burnt offering:
Well, I have a reason for making it otome, it plays a bit of a role in the whole story.I like the idea, but there are a few things I'm not sure about.
Firstly, does it need to be an otome? It sounds like a darker plotline would suit it better. Unless you're going for serious yandere i guess.
Oh yes I forgot to mention: the public will not be aware of the fact Hope is working there. However, I don't understand what you mean by "protagonist do things"Secondly, how does the protagonist do things? It seems like dragging yourself into a famous organisation when you're being hunted by government would just attract attention.
@Lexi:
Haha thanks I haven't really thought much on making the story believable, thanks for pointing it out! I'll work on that!1. I think the plot is fairly interesting because there's so much you can do with it!
2. I really love the idea but how would you make it believable, seeing that its a world which is created?
3. Nope, I think your characters have a personality which is different from each other's, which I like to find in games!
4. It has to be the main character Hope for me.
5. Yes, I can't wait to see how the characters look like if you ever decide to become serious with this game and develop it more
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Re: Jared [Mystery-murder], [Romance/Otome], [Slice-of-life?
Hi!
It's been a while since I've updated. Well, just to let everyone know that there is progress ongoing for Jared, it's just a bit slow...
Anywho...back to the main topic!
We've got a finalized logo done by the amazing Anne: There is a rough concept of Hope, done by Dalya! I'm planning to set up a website with more updates on this game (and also future projects if I ever plan to have any) but for now, I'll update this site regularly
More updates will be coming soon...
It's been a while since I've updated. Well, just to let everyone know that there is progress ongoing for Jared, it's just a bit slow...
Anywho...back to the main topic!
We've got a finalized logo done by the amazing Anne: There is a rough concept of Hope, done by Dalya! I'm planning to set up a website with more updates on this game (and also future projects if I ever plan to have any) but for now, I'll update this site regularly
More updates will be coming soon...
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Re: Jared [Mystery-murder], [Romance/Otome], [Slice-of-life?
Looking good ^^ keep up the great work, I'll be watching and waiting!
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Re: Jared [Mystery-murder], [Romance/Otome], [Slice-of-life?
Hi everybody!
Sorry for the lack of updates, I've been busy for a while. Just to announce that Hope's sprite has finally be finished, done by the awesome Dalya!
Also, we're in the middle of setting up and customizing our official site.
Stay tuned!
Sorry for the lack of updates, I've been busy for a while. Just to announce that Hope's sprite has finally be finished, done by the awesome Dalya!
Also, we're in the middle of setting up and customizing our official site.
Stay tuned!
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Re: Jared [Mystery], [GxB] [Update 23/6]
It's been way too long for an update, hasn't it?
The plot of the story had to go through some heavy revisions and the events in the story have slightly changed. Also, I'm not sure how long the game will be, there's currently an unedited 20K words in the script (which is about 3/4 the common route) so I'm predicting 1-3 hours gameplay per playthrough? (I'm not that good with estimation)
Sorry, I couldn't put too many art updates Dalya, the artist for this project, is busy with Hope and Scarlet's sprite sets at the moment and I may put up concepts of the other characters in the meantime. Hopefully, in the next post there will be more art-related news.
Look forward to our next (hopefully less bleak) update
The plot of the story had to go through some heavy revisions and the events in the story have slightly changed. Also, I'm not sure how long the game will be, there's currently an unedited 20K words in the script (which is about 3/4 the common route) so I'm predicting 1-3 hours gameplay per playthrough? (I'm not that good with estimation)
Sorry, I couldn't put too many art updates Dalya, the artist for this project, is busy with Hope and Scarlet's sprite sets at the moment and I may put up concepts of the other characters in the meantime. Hopefully, in the next post there will be more art-related news.
Look forward to our next (hopefully less bleak) update
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