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Black Lotus(BxB,Thriller,Horror,Drama,Fantasy)

#1 Post by pocoscon »

Got this out to the Works in Progress thread, http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewto ... 43&t=28588. Really need the feedback and please support us =).




An-A new fantasy game I wanted to do. This has been in my mind for a while. It's a horror story, but goes more with the themes of love, friendship, and forgiveness. I'm actually thinking of making this somewhat mature as well. Don't know though :) . So, please give your thoughts, and tell me what you think of the characters. Thanks again :mrgreen:


Plot- After surviving a near suicide attempt and dealing with his inner demons, Yasu Yamada finds a ray of hope years later when doctors declare him mentally stable. With a father whose is dead, and no one else to care for him, he has no choice but to go back to his old hometown Nasae and live with his distant cousin. When arriving, he suddenly feels deep nostalgia and happiness because his youth was always in the town. Enter Takeda Moji, Yasu's childhood friend, who never learned the reason for why he left. Upon meeting again, the pair strike up their friendship quickly, and slowly, Yasu feels like his old life is coming back. However, even with himself feeling at home, Yasu quickly feels trapped and begins to think that his life is under someone's control. When getting a warning from Mariko Usagi, a girl know for her strange ways, about how the town isn't as happy as it seems, Yasu slowly remembers the events that took place before his departure from Nasae and how a single mistake caused the town to become infected by creatures known as the Tainted. But as he helps Mariko fend off these creatures, Yasu will learn that his enemy might actually be someone very close to him, and he himself might be the true threat.

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Yasu Yamada-Our protagonist. A full human with the special power of being able to see the Tainted. Yasu is a calm and collected guy, who doesn't have much trust in others because of how badly he was bullied for being pudgy. Though still looking basically the same, Yasu has come to care very little of what others think of him, and prefers to focus on his water coloring. When meeting his best friend again, Yasu's solitude is quickly gone, and he finds himself meeting old faces from his past. Though most see him as being cold and a loner, Yasu can actually be very friendly, especially to those who he cares about. Due to his suicide attempt though, he often keeps secrets about his past, and lies to everyone that he just left because of family problems. Yasu also has a love for chocolate which is close to being an obsession, and is afraid of anything sharp.

Takeda Moji-A Tengu who was Yasu's best friend before leaving. When learning of his return though, Takeda does everything in his power to fix the friendship they lost after Yasu left. During his childhood, Takeda was always bullied along with Yasu because of their status of being the 'trash' of the town. Takeda though, was always kind of knight in shinning armor for his best, and protected him from the bullies that always attacked them. When Yasu left though, he was strangely calm about his departure, and spent most of his time with Yoshiro. However, when his mother married Yoshiro's dad, Takeda changed his image into something that society would accept. Now older, Takeda has become a suave, charmer who is always being surrounded by girls. Funny thing is he doesn't actually date any of the girls that go after, but isn't afraid to flirt with them either. His hobbies range from training his Tengu power, to going to the library and reading. Because of his friendly and outgoing nature, many in Nasae have come to trust him completely, and even Yasu is taken in by his positive aura. However, Takeda has never been able to fully forgive Yasu for leaving him alone, and secretly has a very bad taste for human flesh.


Yoshiro Moji- Another one of Yasu's childhood friends, and Takeda's stepbrother. Like Yasu, Yoshiro is a human, but has the special ability of being able to heal any wounds with great speed. However, the downside to this is that every time he uses his power, he loses a small portion of his life. As a child, Yoshiro was always confide to his room due to his father's fear for his life. However, upon sneaking out one day, he met Yuya and Takeda, and quickly became good friends with them. Since that meeting, Yoshiro was always snuck out by the pair, and was shown many of the beautiful places Nasae had to offer. However, Yoshiro's life became difficult when Yasu just went up and left, and lost a part of himself, with Takeda being the only one who could keep him happy. Now older, Yoshiro is still confined to his room, but relishes in the music he creates during his free time. Personality wise, Yoshiro is timid, and very shy of people, often becoming scared when around too many unfamiliar faces. He highly looks up to Takeda however, and becomes happy when seeing Yasu again. Still, despite being sickly, Yoshiro still hold a good heart, and is always trying to find way to help others. However, like Yasu, Yoshiro holds a secret, and might not actually be the pure person people have come to know him by.

Eren-A wolf who has been labeled as jungle boy because of his love for always going into the forest. As a child, Eren lost his parents in a tragic accident, and become an orphan, hiding out in caves that the forest had. During one of his many escapades of protecting his animal kin, he came across the trio and struck a very quick friendship with the three. For Eren, it was a happy time as he had no family to call his own. He was especially close with Yasu, and saw him as an older brother figure. However, upon Yasu's departure, Eren slowly began to hate the specious that weren't animals because of how they treated him, and hurt the forest. Eventually, Eren frayed away from society, and forgot about the relationship he had with the trio, only seeing the animals as his true friends. Now, Eren spends most of his time protecting the forest, and killing anyone who threatens it or the animals. Many in Nasae have become afraid of him, and his violent nature. The only non-animal person he tolerates is Noir, due to how she cares for him, and his friends. Upon learning of Yasu's return, Eren struggles with whether he should trust him, or kill him for the mistake he caused before he left. Despite seemingly being violent, Eren is still caring to those he loves, and secretly wants a family.

Mariko Usagi-A girl who shows up at the oddest moments. Mariko was never an outgoing girl during her younger days, and always had a way of making people disliking her because of her being a know it all. Yasu was one of the few though who could tolerate her, though the pair rarely got along. Now most of her days are spent at the shrine with her master Noir, trying to find out what these strange creatures are. When realizing Yasu's return though, Mariko becomes wary of him, and believes he's the reason for all the trouble the town is having. Personality wise, Mariko is still a know it all, and also noisy when it comes to the lives of others. She is also a bit proud, never wanting to admit that she's wrong, much to her master dismay. Still, she longs to fix Nasae, and protect the people from the threat that's infesting it

Keith- A 'snake' who is known as the trouble maker of the town. Even as a child, Keith loved to cause misfortune for others, and mischief. His greatest enemy though was Takeda due to how he always lost fights to the Tengu whenever he attacked Yasu or Yoshiro. Now older, Keith spends most of his time getting with girls, causing trouble, and using his demon powers to hurt other people. However, due to his high status, no one can touch him unless his father allows it. Keith is also a bit of a sadist, to the point that he 'gets off' at others pain. He still sees Takeda as his greatest enemy, and vows to destroy everything he cares for, especially if it's Yasu. However, even with being a rather insane and rash guy, Keith is very emotional, and has a hard understanding of love and friendship. So, in a way, Yasu has become a bit of an obsession for him in that he believes he holds that answers to those two words.

Ardalain Milest- A skilled witch who is always good at making others uncomfortable. Since a child, Ardalain has been spoiled rotten, and doesn't know the meaning of no. She often picked on Yasu and Mariko because of their 'creepy' looks, and enjoyed the attention her classmates gave her. Now older, she is basically the same, except for being the 'idol' of the town. Unlike the others, she doesn't care for Yasu's reappearance in town, but does care for the fact that her 'future husband' Takeda is spending so much time with him. Selfish, childish, and rude, one has to wonder how Ardalain is so 'liked' in town. It's probably because of her witch powers though. Is also a tad oblivious to others feelings for her, greatest example being Keith.

Sub Characters
Tainted- Unseeable creatures that infest the hearts of any living thing, making the host become irrational, violent, and unstable. Though weak by themselves, if they manage to take over the heart of a powerful being, it could be very destructive for the town. Luckily there are those who can see them, and completely vanquish them from life. However, Yasu and Noir are the only known ones who are able to do so in Nasae.

Sakura- A hardworking police cat who is always trying to keep everyone in town safe. Serious, stout, and a bit impatient, she will do anything to catch the criminals, even if they are supernatural. When not doing her police duties, or solving a case, Sakura can be found training with her gun. Many wonder if she knows how to relax.

Vaan- The quirky subordinate to Sakura, and good friend of Takeda. Unlike his boss, Vaan isn't really into the whole police thing, and just does it to impress girls, though he does work his hardest to keep the town safe. He greatly admires, and sometimes envies, Takeda because of how well he does with girls. Unlike his boss, Vaan does believe the town is infected with the Tainted, and helps out Mariko later in the story.
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#2 Post by Holland »

How old is the protagonist in this? It seems like a story that could benefit from having an older lead, but it looks like you're going for a school setting from the other character's descriptions :0 Having Yuya as the teacher and Harumi as the nurse instead of them all being classmates would make this super appealing to me.

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#3 Post by pocoscon »

BarabiSama wrote:How old is the protagonist in this? It seems like a story that could benefit from having an older lead, but it looks like you're going for a school setting from the other character's descriptions :0 Having Yuya as the teacher and Harumi as the nurse instead of them all being classmates would make this super appealing to me.

I was thinking on your comment, and you're right. At first I thought the only way this could go, but realized having them as young adults would let me branch out further. Also, since it's mature, I think it would be better to have them at least in their twenties. Yuya can still live with a cousin because of how unstable he is . Only thing is, I'm not sure if Harumi can be a nurse because he father would never allow that. But I really like your ideas. I will quote you once I get more things done :mrgreen:
Black Lotus(A work in progress)- (BxB,Horror,Thriller,Fantasy) Tells the story of a boy who must save his home and friends from dangerous creatures known as the Tainted. http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewto ... 43&t=28588


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pocoscon wrote:I was thinking on your comment, and you're right. At first I thought the only way this could go, but realized having them as young adults would let me branch out further. Also, since it's mature, I think it would be better to have them at least in their twenties. Yuya can still live with a cousin because of how unstable he is . Only thing is, I'm not sure if Harumi can be a nurse because he father would never allow that. But I really like your ideas. I will quote you once I get more things done :mrgreen:
Thank you for taking it into consideration! I'll keep an eye on the thread and look out for your progress~

It's always nice to see writers step outside the box a bit, especially when it comes to VN's with school settings, but be sure to trust yourself and do whatever you think is best in the end for the story :3 (After all, I don't know just how far you've developed everyone already and such!)

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BarabiSama wrote:
pocoscon wrote:I was thinking on your comment, and you're right. At first I thought the only way this could go, but realized having them as young adults would let me branch out further. Also, since it's mature, I think it would be better to have them at least in their twenties. Yuya can still live with a cousin because of how unstable he is . Only thing is, I'm not sure if Harumi can be a nurse because he father would never allow that. But I really like your ideas. I will quote you once I get more things done :mrgreen:
Thank you for taking it into consideration! I'll keep an eye on the thread and look out for your progress~

It's always nice to see writers step outside the box a bit, especially when it comes to VN's with school settings, but be sure to trust yourself and do whatever you think is best in the end for the story :3 (After all, I don't know just how far you've developed everyone already and such!)

Np, and thank you for all the advice :mrgreen: . I know that seeing school plots can be tiring. I kind of realized that through the years I've played vn's, but I still can't help but enjoy them. Long as they have good characters, and plot, I'll play it. But you're right in that I have to branch out. I think it'll be more interesting in going in this direction :)
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Got this out to the Works in Progress thread, http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewto ... 43&t=28588. Really need the feedback and please support us =).
Black Lotus(A work in progress)- (BxB,Horror,Thriller,Fantasy) Tells the story of a boy who must save his home and friends from dangerous creatures known as the Tainted. http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewto ... 43&t=28588


Catching the Sun(A work in progress)- (GxG,Slice of Life,Friendship,Drama)

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