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I have finally reached my goal in my VN and because of this I can now post up information about it and start recruiting!

Synopsis:
Based on the Brother's Grimm Fairytale Snow White and Rose Red, this is a visual novel that allows you to play as either Snow White or her fraternal twin sister Rose Red. The two girls live with their widow Mother in a cottage in the middle of a forest in the Borderlands. Both girls and their Mother carry "gifts" which is rare, but cherished in the country of Teifer (one of the countries that the Borderlands are apart of). Snow White has the gift of Communication which allows her to speak to all things and all languages. Rose Red carries the gift of Wildness, which means that animals are naturally attracted to her and she herself can resort to animalistic behaviors for survival. Their Mother has the gift of Understanding which allows her to know the true being and intentions of someone.

One winter night there is a knock at the door and the girls answer the door to find a bear outside asking to come in. Though first frightened, the girls come to love the bear, especially Snow White. Soon, however, Rose Red feels Snow White pulling away from her and towards the Bear, and never having competition before for her sister's attention reacts badly. Spring then comes and the Bear tells Snow White that he must leave to go guard his treasures from an evil goblin. She starts crying for she will miss the Bear and Rose Red witnesses them hugging closely and breaks down herself, running into the woods blindly and wildly. In the woods Rose Red encounters a Wolf and wrestles it in her emotional state, before breaking down and crying herself. She returns home and finds that the Bear had left before saying goodbye and blames Snow White for it. Thus they begin at odds with each other: Snow White oblivious to the fact that she had hurt Rose Red and hurt that Rose Red is suddenly pulling from her; Rose Red angry and hurt that her sister would do such a thing and not try and fix it.

The two girls are then sent out into the woods where they encounter a strange man with long white hair stuck in a tree he was trying to cut down. They help him out by cutting off his hair and he curses and yells at them before running off.

At this point the gameplay becomes open. Will you restore your relationship with your sister? Which of the three boys will you try and learn more about? Will you come to love them?

Update:
7/24/11
Picked this up again to work on more. Updated the Demo Progress Bar accordingly. Also updated the character pics with their new sprites 8D.

Demo Progress (Updated 8/1/11)
Overall: ~68% Complete

Sprites: 85%
Backgrounds: 100%
Event Graphics: 3%

Script: 100%
Coding: 50%

Main Characters:

Snow White
Snow White is the gentler of the two sisters. She is quiet and passive. During the Summer she stays inside most often, helping their Mother take care of the house. She does not do well with confrontation and often relies on her sister to be more outgoing.

She holds the gift of Communication.


Rose Red
Rose Red is the wilder of the two sisters. She is outgoing and agressive. During the Summer she stays ouside most often, running through the woods is her favourite pastime. She tends to get angry very easily and relies on her sister to keep level headed.

She holds the gift of Wildness.

Side Character:

Mother
The Mother of the two girls. Though she is sad for the lose of her husband when the girls were young, she hides it and puts on a cheeful face. Because of her gift, the girls often cannot get away with many things and she always knows if someone means ill will towards her family.

She holds the gift of Understanding.

Obtainable Characters:

Bear
A weary traveller whom stays the winter with the family. He is teasing and an overall jovial personality. He needs to guard his treasures from a goblin, but the girls don't know why.


Wolf
A mysterious wolf who the girls have never seen in this part of the forest before. He seems pretty serious and not very trusting. Why did he come to their forest?


Donovan
A Goblin who has come to the forest. He seems to have a penchant for getting in trouble, but he is always ungrateful when the girls help him out. His greatest vanity is his hair (which he has grown incredibly long and loathes people cutting it).

He is grouchy and possibly evil for he seems to have an ulterior motive for hanging around the forest.

Gameplay: The first part of this game is a skippable (after viewing the first time) static novel consisting of a prologue and the first two chapters. Chapters 3 and 4 deal with the MC choosing a place to go once a day which will have one of the obtainable characters or your sister there. When you visit this person you will gain an affection point. Affection points will trigger events when you get a certain amount. There are also timeline events that on certain days the MC will be forced to go on to continue the main plot. Each chapter lasts about 30-40 days (I need help figuring out what won't feel rushed or lagging). Chapter 5 is the final chapter and it consists of a final timeline event and then the ending. After the credit there will be an "epilogue" which will then tell you what ending you got.

Stats:

2 Main Characters
3 Obtainable Characters
28 Different Endings (14 for each girl)
50+ Unique Events

Screenshots:



Staffs:
Once I get to a point where I feel comfortable showing it off I will start asking for editors if Happy Backwards is too busy with RR

Writer: Starling
Programming: Starling, Aleema
Sprite Artist: Starling
Event Artist: Starling
Background Artist: Kaorien
Editors: None
[b]Contributors: Doggy Nino, DragoonHP

Okay I think that's it lol. If you've read all of that BRAVO! The synopsis is a rushed version of the plot (the sister's relationship deteriorating makes more sense in the plotline than it does up there...). Donovan and Mother are only sketches, but the rest are finished Sprites(RR and SW have been slightly editted since the current picture though).

Also this is based off of the fairytale Snow White and Rose Red, as stated before, meaning one of the biggest spoilers might already be known by anyone whose read it.

Anyway~

If you have any questions, just ask!

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Wolf. I choose the wolf. I'm sorry. Wrestling with a wolf sounds so freakin' awesome, too. I like how you make Goblins more than hobbly little green creatures, too. (And good decision to make it a goblin, rather than a dwarf.) In fact, I like everything about your idea. It's so novel and refreshing ... Just like living in a fairy tale, which is what I assume you're going for. =P And 32 endings?!?! Wow. Just so you know, I'm probably not going to get all of them. :3

I'm available for coding help. If you have any questions about scripting and whatnot, I'm your gal. And I think a handdrawn interface would be perfect for this game, what are you talking about? Totally do it yourself! It'll look great!

I would think, since I had to look up the fairytale to see if I knew it (I didn't), it might be best to take out the spoiler tags for the Bear/Wolf completely. While it's obvious there's something there, I'd rather not be told up front, you know?

Anyway! I'm so glad that you're getting your project out and running. Your art is just as beautiful as I expected it to be.

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He might just be my favourite *loves his paths* but I do love Don as well (poor Bear is just not my type). And thank you about Don, when I decided to make him obtainable, being an old dwarf was just well.. not so good anymore XDXD.

I don't think I would either DX *says that now but is a collector so probably would to get even just all the Event CGs* I was blown away by how many it ended up being and I am scared that it might be the biggest downfall because I'm not sure how many would have that kind of patience...

I absolutely adore fairytales redone (Goose Girl by Shannon Hale is one of my favourites, but of course there's Ella Enchanted as well) and this is my favourite one, I've been meaning to redo it for a while.



I will keep that in mind if I end up having to code it. I do have the ability to... I just didn't want to take on the entire project by myself, told myself I would at least try for help first LOL.

And I might... I tried to design one a couple weeks ago and I wasn't happy with it, but when more of it comes together I might try again....



All right, I think I'll do that then.... it's just so confusing how to handle that part, being cryptic is not my strong suit >_> XD

And~ >//<~ Thank you, I spent hours upon hours on both @_@ Hoping that this project will make me faster at drawing with this method.

*Ends post with a random dance of tiredhappy*

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Rapunzel -- Fairy Tale Kinetic Novel
http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewtopic.php?f=11&t=9804

WIPs:

http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewtopic.php?f=16&t=7529&start=0

Rock Robin -- Open Play Mode
http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewtopic.php?f=37&t=6984

That sounds pretty nice. The logo art looks really pretty.

But how are you seriously going to pull off 32 endings? Are they just going to be very minor variations, like "Happily ever after, carried away by a pumpkin carriage" vs. "Happily ever after, flying away on a magic carpet?" Or is the base story going to be pretty much the same, but will the computer read through all the choices you made through the story and then give you an ending from a list of 32 outcomes at the very end?

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I'll have to agree with Samu-kun, since the obtainables aren't many.
But the great side is, I really love you art! Good job! I'm going to stalk this!

By the way, your VN looks very similar with this, in the concept side though...

http://www.play-asia.com/paOS-13-71-ie-49-kr-86-1-70-3qf5-18-1.html

I just stumbled across this and your game at the very same day :3
Maybe a reference?

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Ah, I adore this story! Since you said there are 16 endings for each girl, do we have to choose between playable characters or is the narration split into two different chapters? I was just thinking if

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This game sounds very interesting C:
I remember reading the fairy tale when I was a kid, but I don't remember how it ends, so I guess I'm spoiler-free right now, haha x'D;

I always loved how snow white here was blonde instead of the usual dark--haired one, and I think you did a good job on portraying her and Rose Red. There is one thing that bothers me in their portraits, though: the lines marking their noses and lips are thicker than the rest of the linework. Maybe you could make them thinner?

Like everybody else I'm concerned about the 32 endings. I'd suggest going for a smaller number of endings at first (the more important/obvious ones) and then work on the rest. I'd also recommend that, if making SW's and RR's side proves too much work, just focus on making one side, release it, and THEN work on the other side and release it as an expansion of the first.
I'm pretty sure your audience will be happy to play either side, and having one game (one side) completed and released will be a good milestone and motivator to finish the other side, rather than having a big game to work on and eventually burning out.

My two cents

In any case, I'll keep an eye on this, because I love Fairy Tales! And, like Aleema, I think I'll go for the Wolf xD

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Sayuri is indeed on the right track to why there are so many endings.

There are four factors to an ending, I can't say two of them because they are spoilers but the other two is who you marry and what your sister does. She is actually technically obtainable as well because you can choose to stay with her. When I added the sister's affection points to give the story some depth that's when the endings exploded. Depending on your experience she can stay with you (which will affect who she marries), you can choose to only want to be with her, or you can hate each other so she'll choose the opposite of whatever you do and usually that ending is a bad one.

The other factors grew out of being able to make Donovan an obtainable.


Thank you about my art, and no I haven't seen this before but it looks adorable if only I could obtain it lol *is poor and it looks like it's out of print*


Thanks



Gah you caught it! XD >_>.... Yeah I noticed that was distracting after I finished Rose's and did Snow White's (I did her face differently so the nose and mouth are actually just lines and not thicker, I just added some to the nose to make them match) I was planning on redoing Rose's nose, I'm afraid about the mouth though because I want to redo it as well... and it's only this "normal-happy" sprite that has the thicker mouth... But I'm afraid I won't be able to redraw it, but I will try..



That's actually an idea I've been toying around with. Having a Version Red and a Version White (gotta catch them all, pokemon? XD). I'm afraid that people will only play the first one, however... or not... I did make it so you can't get the ENTIRE story without playing it all (you learn bits of information on every path about either the obtainable or the girls themselves).

How do other people feel about this? Because I wouldn't mind doing it, i'd probably release a version afterwards with both parts in it, but would splitting it up thus making it two '16 endings' games be an easier pill to swallow?

And YAY to fairytales~ And it's amusing because the Wolf is the only character not teeeechnically in the fairytale 8D

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Completed:
Rapunzel -- Fairy Tale Kinetic Novel
http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewtopic.php?f=11&t=9804

WIPs:

http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewtopic.php?f=16&t=7529&start=0

Rock Robin -- Open Play Mode
http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewtopic.php?f=37&t=6984

Oh, I loved these stories as a girl! (Now if only someone would do The Hobyahs.) If I weren't already on too many projects as it is I would certainly lend my writing talents. The art is pretty cute too. If you need a sort of post editor/beta tester I could certainly do that for you. Also, I have a large collection of royalty free sounds and am pretty decent at finding music as well. So if you need help in those areas feel free to pm me with requests.

I'm also a voice actress if you ever decide you want voices added in. I'm currently doing a pretty big part for hentaicook right now though so you'd have to cue up if you want them done super soon.

As to your question. If you did the two versions I would likely only play the one. I don't like rewatching the same movies much less reread a story that I've already gotten a satisfactory ending to.

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This sounds like a very promising project. I would like to be your editor, if you would like to work with me. I'm no Shakespeare, but I love to plot and plans stories. Just a warning, I can be a bit overly critical. Is that alright?

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I love fairy tales and different versions of it. They always have such a kind but frightening flare about them. And I have to comment: this sounds like it would be quite the story and your artwork is just adorable. Has the right innocent, but mischievous, look about them. Personally, from your present descriptions, I'd go for the wolf.

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Straight to point, I want to apply for the post of writer/editor for your story.

If you want to check out my writing style, check my profile on FanFiction.net or better, please read my new story for checking its compatability for turning into a Ren'Py game.

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I'm excited to hear about this project. Love the art work and the concept. I think Rose Red is gonna be my favorite character, probably 'cause she'll get into a lot of mischief.

Looks very promising. I love the Grimm fairy tales... and the chance to play either of the girls is awesome. So is the fact that your relationship with each other, and both of your relationships with the guys will influence the endings.

Wow, that sounds complicated, but so very cool.

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Back from Vacation so I can get my butt back in gear on this. And yay for offers to help write while I was gone!!!

In other news four of the endings might be cut (I'm going to ask my current editor and anyone who I get a the definite from about being an editor about this) as the might be considered superfluous. This would cut each girl down to 14 endings 28 overall which even though it's not much less does seem like a more manageable number. And another note, the two girls go through love completely differently so when you play a path with a different girl it's a different story for the most part.

Anyway.

Let's start these replies going backwards :3



Thank you I'm glad you like the choice between the girls. That is one of the big parts of this game.

Thank you! I love Rose Red, she was always my favourite in the story~ Though plotting out Snow White's part made me like her as well and you get a LOT more backstory in Snow's...


Straight to the point indeed . Go ahead and PM me if you're still interested and I'll talk with you more on my plan and send you the completed plotline (including backstories so that things make more sense and such) which you can look over and help me edit a bit if things are confusing and don't make sense. Then we can discuss where we'll go from there.

Lol! Thank you <3<3<3 That's what I love about fairytales as well.

I'm also really happy you think the style is good for the story, I don't have a set style really so I developed one mostly for this so YAY XD And nomnom wolf

I don't mind overly critical as long as you don't mind if I don't always take your advice. An editor is supposed to be critical anyway XD. So if you're still interested do the same thing I said above to DragoonHP and we'll get this ball rolling.

So I meant to reply to this BEFORE I left for vacation... but here it is now? LOL

Yayyyy~ And yes, work on your project one at a time, one at a time (certainly that's what I'm doing because believe me I have about 3 more ideas that I want to do but I don't have time for them ): )

I might take you up on the music and sounds once I get everything else finished. I also might take you up on being a beta tester/post editor so hopefully you'll keep that open ~

Thank you for your answer, that is what I'm most afraid of and why I would release them together, that way you can play one path with one girl and another with another girl or however you would want to do it.

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Completed:
Rapunzel -- Fairy Tale Kinetic Novel
http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewtopic.php?f=11&t=9804

WIPs:

http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewtopic.php?f=16&t=7529&start=0

Rock Robin -- Open Play Mode
http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewtopic.php?f=37&t=6984