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Lotus
PostPosted: Tue Apr 19, 2011 2:00 pm 
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I'm starting a new VN that will most likely be completed since I'm not on a deadline and it's about one of my favorite subjects:Slenderman! <3

Anyway, I would really appreciate some feedback on the backgrounds I've made so far. I'm going for a stylistic approach but I'm not sure how much I like it :s


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YonYonYon
PostPosted: Tue Apr 19, 2011 2:05 pm 
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umm...where are branches?

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Lotus
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Lol, there aren't any xD
I guess that means I should add some?

The story is told from a young girl's point of view so I tried to keep the style simplistic, but I'll add some branches and change those trees some.

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Does that look better? I'm fixing the other ones now.


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Edited the abandoned park picture a lot. I plan on adding some swings.


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I love how soft and... kind of peaceful the pictures look, but I feel like a darker meaning is itching to show itself :)

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LateWhiteRabbit
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You need to be careful with your perspective - the hop-scotch court in the bottom picture is not in proper perspective, nor are the numbers or lines on it.
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Yeah, other than the perspective thing I think you definitely nailed down the look/feel. Good job.

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PostPosted: Tue Apr 19, 2011 11:01 pm 
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Snowflower wrote:
I love how soft and... kind of peaceful the pictures look, but I feel like a darker meaning is itching to show itself :)

That's what I was going for :D
The story will either be really cute or scary depending on the player's choices.

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You need to be careful with your perspective - the hop-scotch court in the bottom picture is not in proper perspective, nor are the numbers or lines on it.

I wasn't really paying attention to the perspective, I'll fix that now. ^^;

dstarsboy wrote:
Yeah, other than the perspective thing I think you definitely nailed down the look/feel. Good job.

Thanks! :)

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Fixed the perspective of the hopscotch court, though I'm having some trouble with the perspective of the chalk :s
Probably doesn't help that I added some chalk doodles.

I was already working on this when I checked the thread, that's how I got it fixed so fast xD;


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I think it's looks much better :D

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I love the mood the charcoal-like texture gives off.
A bit sad, a little dark, mysterious. Wistful.

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YonYonYon wrote:
I think it's looks much better :D


Thanks for pointing out my lack of branches, that definitely helped :)

choklitchan wrote:
I love the mood the charcoal-like texture gives off.
A bit sad, a little dark, mysterious. Wistful.


Glad you like it :D

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Did another background. I tried to make the overall feel different from the previous backgrounds.
The thing on the right is supposed to be a curio cabinet, I'll work on that some more after lunch.


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Mmmm some slendy stuff >A>

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I'm addicted to Slenderman stuff >u>;

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