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briannavon
PostPosted: Sat Jun 16, 2012 2:54 pm 
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A lot has changed since the first demo. Trust me, the next demo will be way better! :D


Do you know when you will release it ? I'm looking forward to this ^^


I'm not sure when it will be done, but I will say that it won't be very long now! :D

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briannavon wrote:
Cinnamoon wrote:
briannavon wrote:
A lot has changed since the first demo. Trust me, the next demo will be way better! :D


Do you know when you will release it ? I'm looking forward to this ^^


I'm not sure when it will be done, but I will say that it won't be very long now! :D


Good luck on this one :) I'm waiting for it ^^
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PostPosted: Thu Jun 21, 2012 8:10 am 
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Hello there !

First, I have to say I looooooove your textbox <3 It is so cute !

I tried the demo, and I think it was all going too fast. We don't know much about Amy, and saying "she's a nerd" is good, but I don't understand HOW she is a nerd. There are a lot of statement like this ; but we don't really get to know the setting and the characters.
The art is cute <3 I'd love to see the others sprites.

Good luck on your VN, I'll be waiting for the entire game :)

(and please forget my bad english >.<)


Thanks for the compliment about the text box and the art. This is the third text box I made since the old text boxes didn't fit the game well . And I'm recoloring + redrawing some characters right now T.T. I'll try my best on the Cgs.

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PostPosted: Sat Jun 23, 2012 10:12 pm 
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Ow! Your art has improved a lot!!!

Gosh, I love her eyes, the way you colored it's just OAO *sparkle*

Now I'm definitely stalking this game xDD~

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Ow! Your art has improved a lot!!!

Gosh, I love her eyes, the way you colored it's just OAO *sparkle*

Now I'm definitely stalk this game xDD~


Thank you :D (By the way, you suddenly make me want to remake all of the characters T.T)

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miaverana wrote:
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Ow! Your art has improved a lot!!!

Gosh, I love her eyes, the way you colored it's just OAO *sparkle*

Now I'm definitely stalk this game xDD~


Thank you :D (By the way, you suddenly make me want to remake all of the characters T.T)


You probably should because your art has improved a lot since then. Or else it would be two totally different styles if you put them together on the same screen. (Yay for us player, boo for the artist :lol: )

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Kyaaaa~ she is so cute ^^ I really love your art.

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miaverana wrote:
Michiyo6918 wrote:
Ow! Your art has improved a lot!!!

Gosh, I love her eyes, the way you colored it's just OAO *sparkle*

Now I'm definitely stalk this game xDD~


Thank you :D (By the way, you suddenly make me want to remake all of the characters T.T)


You probably should because your art has improved a lot since then. Or else it would be two totally different styles if you put them together on the same screen. (Yay for us player, boo for the artist :lol: )


I agree with Michiyo~ Your art has improved and you should redo all the sprites >.<
Good luck~
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I'm remaking them right now. Actually, I finished Amy's sketch and lineart of Amy's mom :D.

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Second demo is Up! Now tell us everything you like and don't like about it! :lol:

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First I would like to say "Congratulation on finishing your 2nd demo!" :D

Second... now I'm going to tell you my thoughts on this demo.

Positive:
- Cute text box!
- Varina is the cutest! (Well, she's the bad girl here but... _ __||)
- The demo was long enough for me to enjoy.

Negative:
- No music (While it's kind of a turn off but I know this is just demo version...)
- The character's name is small and hard to see (Maybe you should make it bigger?)
- The text is sometime hard to see because it's kind of the same color with the text box.
- Mom's sprite is too big (You're going to redo her right?)
- Loren's sprite's leg got cut off when you hide the text box.
- Justin's sprite gives me a feeling... like... he's too skinny (Did you stretch him out?)
- The plot was a little bit too fast and sometime confused me (Maybe you should slow it down by adding some more dialog?)
- And the most important thing is... maybe you shouldn't show each love interest's relationship point. You know, to make it harder for the player to follow the guys :lol:

That's all I want to say. (Sorry if the negative is way more than the positive. I just think you could improve some of the things I pointed out.)

The last thing, I'm waiting for your next update and good luck!

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PostPosted: Mon Jun 25, 2012 3:14 pm 
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Michiyo6918 wrote:
First I would like to say "Congratulation on finishing your 2nd demo!" :D

Second... now I'm going to tell you my thoughts on this demo.

Positive:
- Cute text box!
- Varina is the cutest! (Well, she's the bad girl here but... _ __||)
- The demo was long enough for me to enjoy.

Negative:
- No music (While it's kind of a turn off but I know this is just demo version...)
- The character's name is small and hard to see (Maybe you should make it bigger?)
- The text is sometime hard to see because it's kind of the same color with the text box.
- Mom's sprite is too big (You're going to redo her right?)
- Loren's sprite's leg got cut off when you hide the text box.
- Justin's sprite gives me a feeling... like... he's too skinny (Did you stretch him out?)
- The plot was a little bit too fast and sometime confused me (Maybe you should slow it down by adding some more dialog?)
- And the most important thing is... maybe you shouldn't show each love interest's relationship point. You know, to make it harder for the player to follow the guys :lol:

That's all I want to say. (Sorry if the negative is way more than the positive. I just think you could improve some of the things I pointed out.)

The last thing, I'm waiting for your next update and good luck!


Well, we have jut added one song to the game's lake scenes right now. Also, I will change the text color right away.

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PostPosted: Tue Jun 26, 2012 5:50 pm 
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Small update:

Me and Mia are adding a lot more to the beginning of the game. So for people who think the story is going too fast, we are fixing it.

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PostPosted: Thu Jun 28, 2012 11:06 am 
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WIP page update:

We have put the sketch of Amy's new design on the first post! :D

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