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So here is the visual novel I'm working on, the first demo is done and wanted to know what people though of it, also I want to make it clear that since this is a solo project (I mean, I had a proofreader but he seems to have been kiddnaped by aliens as I haven't head from him in months) I decided to focus on the story rather than the artwork, but I also didn't want it to suck too much so I took artwork from here and there for the backgrounds and used a game called 3D custom girl to make the heroines. So yeah, most of the artwork in the game wasn't made by me.

You can download the demo here:
http://www.mediafire.com/?33azbkb53uabzt2

I also wanted to tell you that even though it doesn't have any h-scenes in the demo there WILL be some h-scenes in the complete game. I put the r-18 tag just to be safe for now.

Anyways here's some backstory:

In the year 3012 occurred an event that changed the world forever, the War of Apocalypse. It was a war waged between the two worlds of the demons and the angels for total domination and it was so massive that it nearly destroyed all of existence. It was only thanks to the rulers of both heaven and hell after realizing the mistake they had made that total annihilation was prevented. They both sacrificed their lives to fuse their realms together with the human world, in an attempt to save what was left from their broken worlds. At first there was some tension between the three races, but after some time they came to accept one another and they even started breeding between them. having a half child between different races was very difficult, as it required a high level of compatibility between the couple, but it was certainly not impossible. Now 200 years later problems such as discrimination are not so common anymore but they are still present and because of this, a special school was created specifically for people with mixed blood, in order to help the three races come to terms with one another.

and a some screenshots





also I wanted to make this thread here just for the sake of testing, so if you guys happen to find some bugs and errors in the game I'd appreciate if you'd let me know, your oppinions and critisism on the game are appreciated too. Since this is a thread just for the sake of testing I won't be posting more details on the story and characters in here, but if you are interested in them you can go to the official thread on hong fire:
http://www.hongfire.com/forum/showthread.php/406680-Visual-Novel-New-Terra-official-thread?highlight=

You should get a proofreader, there were numerous punctuation errors. I didn't see any program errors (I played both paths). It was a bit hard to see Seth's name, since you use red for the font. Otherwise I had no difficulty reading the text.
I find it odd that the file size was so big for such a short demo. I didn't see any full motion scenes, so I suspect the file formats you used for the images and the background music might be the cause.

Since you didn't compose and perform the music yourself, give credit to the source. Be careful about using copyrighted music, even in a free game (Kevin MacLeod at http://incompetech.com/m/c/royalty-free/ has free music for use in games, all he requests is that you give him credit).

I hope you finish the VN and have fun while doing it.

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Poorly done hand drawn art is still poorly done art. Be a Poser (or better yet, use DAZ Studio 3D) - dare to be different.

If you're committed to making an adult game, then your topic should probably be placed in the adult section of the forum.



Your story sounds fairly similar to Shuffle, but generations after the dimension-merging event. There's nothing wrong with this premise. But think about it for a while. Consider what sort of world the people live in, and what specific things they have experienced as they grew up. Show us some details that will make your story distinct.

@fleet: Yeah, I guess a proofreadr would probably help, and I'll consider changing seth's name to a more visible color, also the filesize was a bit bigger than it should have been because I added some art that I didn't use yet in the demo but forgot to take before building the distributions. I didn't credit the sources in the demo because I didn't want it to feel like a completed game, with such a short demo but with credits roll already, I was planning to include all the credits in the completed game though. I had hoped the disclaimer screen would take care of that while the game is finished, but maybe you're right.

@gekiganwing: I am not sure if I should post the demo on the adult section of the forum yet (I also didn't know the forum had an adult section) because it doesn't have any h-scenes yet, so instead of posting it there I think a simple warning will be enough for that, although if more people think it should be moved then I will move it. I didn't know shuffle had a dimention-merging event, did it happen at the end of the first game or is there a second part? I guess it does seem alike from that perspective...but the characters are still going to be different from them (at least from the ones I know) also it's not just going to be demons and gods only as they have different races (just like in the way we have different races like chinese, american, french, etc). The angels and devils also have different general traits that they did in shuffle!. I did not add all the details of the game in the description because I think it's better to talk about them in the game but there's a little more background in the official thread at HF, if you are interested please check it out.

Liked the demo- any progress?

oops sorry!! been a while since I came into the forum. I could have sworn it was dead by now.....but thanks for asking dude!! to prevent this from happening again you can check the forum in hf on the link I puy up on the first post, I always make sure it is updated. the second demo is up to 53% complete(just an estimate) and the dialogue programming is 100% complete too. Also I'm recruiting proofreaders if anyone's interested just pm me on hong fire and i'll tell you the details.

After all this time I'm finally about to finish the second demo! I'll probably upload it some time next weekend so look forward to it!

OK guys the second demo is up! you can go to the official thread and download it or you can get from here:

second demo here:

http://www.mediafire.com/?dpya3bp5ylz1fjf

just remember that I update the official thread more often than this one and that it's also got way more info on the project

Wow, at first i though how could you make the art like that? It's just so 3D like from some games i played in the past.

And then i read your description lol. Anyway, nice work =).

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hey guys, they took down the link I had previously for some reason so here is the new link, sorry about that

http://www.mediafire.com/?feuefgbrmydy1wt