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Playtime: ~1-2 hrs
Length: ~30,000 words
Game type: NVL-type visual novel
Themes: Fantasy, steampunk, philosophy, religion
Endings: 3
Pairings: none
Protagonist: Male or female, player's choice
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Plot: An episodic tale about a journey through the world, though not our world. The tale isn't told by the one who travels, a child named Astelli, but by the people Astelli meets during that journey. Yet why is it that these people remember Astelli so vividly? Only the end of the story will explain that.

Unlike many of my previous games, this one has no early "game over"-endings. Each playthrough will lead you through the entire story.

Have fun, and please bear with me. I don't do NVL stories often. This one came out more like an interactive picture book than your typical VN.

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WAIT!! NO romance?! ( that's sad...

And that is ALL there is to say about the story?

THAT is sad.

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Scriptwriter and director of Daemonophilia
Scriptwriter of Zenith Chronicles
Writer for Pet Project II: Heavy Petting
More about me in my blog

If you were expecting a romance, then you're obviously looking in the wrong place. When you're busy philosophizing and pondering over religion, there's usually very little time for dating.

That said, I downloaded the game and started playing through Chapter 1. Very interesting so far, but I think I found a few missing words here or there. Did you have a couple proofreaders look through the script before the release?

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Actually, one, my artist/musician, DaFool, read the whole thing. There shouldn't be many typos left, though; I don't think they'll be overly distracting.

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Scriptwriter and director of Daemonophilia
Scriptwriter of Zenith Chronicles
Writer for Pet Project II: Heavy Petting
More about me in my blog

It looks like this will be interesting ^^ I'll give it a go tomorrow!!

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All right, these are my impressions on my first playthrough:

-If this is a stranger that our MC has never seen before, let alone knows the gender of, how do we know that their name is Astelli? Even though I assume that this entire story is retrospective, it kept bugging me throughout the intro.

-Ah, every chapter follows a new person. This really is like Kino's Journey.

-So everyone knows Astelli's name even when she hasn't introduced herself properly to them. That is interesting.



-I liked that every person's response to Astelli determined how much she was able to help them.



-So every decision you make ripples back in on later events in subtle ways. I know that's not something I should be surprised at in a VN, but I don't think I've ever seen it implemented this way before.



All in all, very nice. I was drawn in by the episodic fables and stayed to see how everything would culminate. Every perspective felt tangibly different, which was nice.

I'll probably play through again to see the other endings later, but it was a pretty epic game to play through just once. I genuinely enjoyed reading this. Good job!

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EVEN IF THE TENDONS OF MY THUMBS TEAR INTO NOTHINGNESS, EVEN IF I GO NEARSIGHTED FROM STARING TOO HARD AT THE SCREEN, EVEN IF MY BODY IS CLOSE TO COLLAPSE FROM THE 72 HOURS I HAVE GONE WITHOUT FOOD! I WILL DEFEAT YOU!

I like philosophical stories, though I haven't written one myself. I played this one. The story was not bad, but there were some grammatical errors and typos. It was scary as well as a little funny.
But, I don't understand those people who are expecting romance in a philosophical story.
I also don't understand that when I played the game the first time, Astelli was a girl. But, when I played it again, he was a boy.

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It's not that hard to understand. It's the first sign that people can change Astelli with what they do.

I hope it makes sense in retrospect. After everybody knows who Astelli is, people talk about what happened to them during the thirteenth year.

You can consider that one of the main themes of the entire story.

I'm curious... what was the name of chapter 13 on your first playthrough?

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Scriptwriter and director of Daemonophilia
Scriptwriter of Zenith Chronicles
Writer for Pet Project II: Heavy Petting
More about me in my blog

The name of Chapter 13 for me was "From Above".

EDIT:

Also, a small piece of fanart.

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Forever Alone: Nerds the Gathering - A brotome game. (Still editing/rewriting things! 4/2)
Night at the Hospital - Maiden voyage of Team Snugglebunny
Skylessia: Tale of the Boon - Epic fantasy whatsit, currently on hiatus.
Viking Pipsqueak Productions Blog (under construction)

I occasionally frequently draw other people's characters. Now offering delinquentization, medievalization, and cyborgification. Hit me up in PM if you want sprites for your KN or non-ren'ai VN.

EVEN IF THE TENDONS OF MY THUMBS TEAR INTO NOTHINGNESS, EVEN IF I GO NEARSIGHTED FROM STARING TOO HARD AT THE SCREEN, EVEN IF MY BODY IS CLOSE TO COLLAPSE FROM THE 72 HOURS I HAVE GONE WITHOUT FOOD! I WILL DEFEAT YOU!

Ah yes. Interesting. Thought that wouldn't happen that often during a first playthrough. But maybe it's just you

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Scriptwriter and producer of Metropolitan Blues
Scriptwriter and director of Daemonophilia
Scriptwriter of Zenith Chronicles
Writer for Pet Project II: Heavy Petting
More about me in my blog

When Astelli was born, he/she was born as a girl or as a boy. But, how can the actions of other people change his/her gender. That's what I meant.
And, that's only what I don't understand. The rest of the story is okay. Whether Astelli will destroy the world or not, that will obviously depend on the people's actions. But they can't change someone's gender with their simple actions, can they?

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He who doesn't care about the environment doesn't care about his grandchildren.

Okay, I need to spoiler this out:

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Scriptwriter and producer of Metropolitan Blues
Scriptwriter and director of Daemonophilia
Scriptwriter of Zenith Chronicles
Writer for Pet Project II: Heavy Petting
More about me in my blog

I've got her to be the approaching darkness. Bohooohoo... But alas, it's a nice work! Without a good art, but you keep me still reading it. You've made good timings with little pics you have, and that result in a nice flow of story.
Well I knew about this already, but you're a good writer!! Hope you succeed on your other projects too!!!

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That was an intriguing piece of work, although I can't say I understood most of it. It provided some interesting insights that I have never thought of before, and it was fun watching Astelli develop as a character. The way in which the story was told was also refreshing and suited the atmosphere of the story very well, and the storybook setting really made it feel like a journey (spiritual and physical).

I have only managed to obtain 2 of the endings so far and that last one is one stubborn little creature. So now I'm off to struggle with it some more!!