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PostPosted: Fri Jan 06, 2012 9:53 am 
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I promised myself that I will fall for the right person at the right time, but ever since that fateful day we met, the promise of falling in love at the right time shatters...
My twin brother died just before I met you, I wanted to punch myself for falling in love at such a wrong time, but whenever I see your smiling face, my anger drowns in my ridiculous feelings for you... However, little did I know that behind that charming smile, lies a deadly demon.
Whoever knew I'd break my promise of falling for the right person as well?

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You play as a girl named Alexandra "Alex" Forbes, a simple and ordinary girl with a twin brother whose name is Alexander "Zander" Forbes. Both of them grew up with a mom who was a former piano prodigy, so both of them grew up as great piano players. Alex's twin brother became the keyboardist of a famous band, Midnight Havoc, while Alex ended up studying in college. Misfortune came to the twins because Zander ended up dead in his sleep, the band's manager, Gregory Parker, was the first one to discover Zander's death, he asked his uncle to give Zander a very private and unknown funeral and he decided to keep it as a secret to avoid controversies and mishaps, he told the other band members that Zander went on a sudden vacation to visit his twin's funeral.

Gregory thought that "Alex" Forbes was a boy and he decides to visit their house, tell them about Zander's sudden death, and ask "Alex" to replace Zander as the band's keyboardist. He then visited the Forbes family and he was surprised to see that "Alex" was actually a twin sister, not a twin brother. However, he still decided to ask her to dress up as a boy and replace her brother. At first Alex didn't want to agree and refused. The manager leaves dismayed, but he still told her that he'll be back, and see if Alex will change her mind. Alex told him that she will not, but a certain dream did.

Zander visited Alex in her sleep and told her; "I did not die out of purely natural causes, sis. I died because I was murdered." Zander told Alex that he didn't know who did it because he just woke up and drank some water and then after a few minutes he started to have difficulty breathing and the next thing he knew, he had stopped. Alex woke up minutes later, even if it was all a dream, she believed what her brother told her, and decided to accept Gregory's offer in order to find out who murdered him.

She suspected four people the other band members and Gregory. All of them are obtainable and as she tries to pursue them she'll discover a very big secret and one of them is actually the murderer, the one who holds the secret of death.

Will Alex be able to find out who the murderer is, will she be able to find out the one who holds the worst secret of all while finding love in the way? Or will she fall in love to her brother's killer without even knowing it?
It's all in your hands. :)

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Alexandra "Alex" Forbes
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Hi! My name is Alex Forbes. A lot of people think I'm dead, but in reality its Zander that's dead not me. I was only asked to dress up as a guy and cover for him. I know you're asking me why I did such a crazy thing... Well, here is the reason; I don't know how or why, but Zander visited me in my sleep and told me that someone murdered him, and for some really insane, unexplainable reason I believed him! And now here I am trying to find the murderer.
Oh, and if you're wondering how I'm pulling it off, Acting like my brother is the easiest thing to do, the wig is very itchy though. (I decided to wear a wig, even if Greg strongly disapproves it, because there is no way in hell that I'm going to cut my long hair, it took me a lot of years to be this long and beautiful so I'm sticking with wigs.)
Anyway, here are the suspects.

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The band's guitarist and Rey's girlfriend.
She's overly friendly with me, causing me to fear Rey even more, he told me that ever since I came back from my "twin sister's funeral" she started being like that.
Maybe she knows I'm actually a girl? Nah I don't think so, I'm really good, and Greg always helps me with covering-up.

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The band members seem to like calling him Greg, so lets stick to calling him that.
The only thing I find suspicious about him is, that he was the first to discover Zander's body and I wonder why did he keep it a secret? Besides the reason "to avoid controversy". And most of all why did he tell mom and dad that Zander died in his sleep?
Anyway if you want me to describe him, Greg is the most annoying man on earth! Other people think he is oh so serious but in reality, he is not, he likes teasing me with such embarrassing things!

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He is the lead singer and the band's bassist.
He looks and acts happy all the time, it's that thing about him that makes me suspicious. He seems to know a lot more than he lets on.
Anyway, he is a real nice guy he likes to smile for no apparent reason and he loves to cook for us, (But for some reason, the guys hate his cooking) He likes to ask a lot of questions too.

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The drummer, he has a lot of fangirls but he already has a girlfriend, our band's guitarist.
He really is hot-headed and he scares me a bit, I don't know how Jennica manages to endure him.
We used to be so close.... I just don't know what made him change.


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My Younger Twin Brother, even if I was the one who came out first, he likes to think that I'm actually the younger sibling.
He's generally sweet, a little annoying, but really cool. I don't understand how someone could just... kill him.

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Writer/Programmer: Me
Sprite: machinist
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Thanks to Camille for giving that awesome and fitting band name!


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Please feel free to ask your questions, and please don't hesitate to give any suggestions that will improve this game. ^_^

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PostPosted: Fri Jan 06, 2012 3:51 pm 
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So it's like a Trap, only with reversed genders xD. Unless Trap is a hentai-only genre...o.O

Oh, and in the paragraph covering the dream you said "...and the next thing he knew, he had stopped." That last bit confused me a little. Did you mean to say that his heart had stopped?

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This looks very good. I can't wait to play it! :D Good job!

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Looking forward to this as well! :)

On a side note: the mother's pose doesn't really fit her dialog... It's only her face that looks angry... :l

And I'm not sure if it's just a personal preference, but i find it weird that the side image is at the right side. Maybe I'm just used to seeing it on the left.

Good luck! :)

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PostPosted: Sat Jan 07, 2012 1:08 am 
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Kindred87 wrote:
So it's like a Trap, only with reversed genders xD. Unless Trap is a hentai-only genre...o.O

Oh, and in the paragraph covering the dream you said "...and the next thing he knew, he had stopped." That last bit confused me a little. Did you mean to say that his heart had stopped?

It means he had stopped breathing. "He had difficulty breathing, and the next thing he knew, he had stopped."
I find it weird and redundant to add the word breathing at the end. I'm so sorry for the confusion it caused. ^_^;

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This looks very good. I can't wait to play it! :D Good job!

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Looking forward to this as well! :)

On a side note: the mother's pose doesn't really fit her dialog... It's only her face that looks angry... :l

And I'm not sure if it's just a personal preference, but i find it weird that the side image is at the right side. Maybe I'm just used to seeing it on the left.

Good luck! :)


I'm thinking of having another artist re-do the sprites of the "sort of" side characters, someone who'll be able to match it with the main ones, so I guess it can be considered as a placeholder for now.

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For the title screen, the menu options that drop with blood are a bit distracting from the text itself, and the white Gaussian blur behind the title options makes it a bit more difficult to read as well. Perhaps play with alpha levels for those overlays? A Gaussian blur with a transparency would illustrate which option you selected without impairing one's ability to read the text as easily.

I do like the title screen, with the title being negative space. I would recommend that for the main menu options as well, but I think it would be too difficult to read if that were the case. Still, murder mysteries are fun, so I'm looking forward to seeing what you create!


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For the title screen, the menu options that drop with blood are a bit distracting from the text itself, and the white Gaussian blur behind the title options makes it a bit more difficult to read as well. Perhaps play with alpha levels for those overlays? A Gaussian blur with a transparency would illustrate which option you selected without impairing one's ability to read the text as easily.

I do like the title screen, with the title being negative space. I would recommend that for the main menu options as well, but I think it would be too difficult to read if that were the case. Still, murder mysteries are fun, so I'm looking forward to seeing what you create!


Ehehehe. To be honest, I was only messing around with Photoshop when I made that blood thingy, and since no one found it iffy or complained about it, I decided to just stick with it.
Thank you for the advice though, I'll make sure to take note of that one, when I'm redoing the GUI.

As for the title logo, I didn't make it myself, so I don't know how to do that to the main menu options. (I tried, but my attempts turned it into a pile of unreadable letters. Yeah, I know. Epic fail. ;__;)

And thank you so much!

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Anyway, I have a few questions that I actually need answers to. (This is directed to everyone, not just MoPark. )
1.) What do you think of the plot? Does it really look too ambitious? (And I know the synopsis is filled with too many errors, and I'll fix that once I have the time.)

2.) What do you think of the characters? Are they interesting? Are they too stereotypical or not? If you still don't get someone's attitude or personality then, please, by all means, feel free to ask me.

3.) And lastly, are you okay with the length of this game? The demo is already around 40,000 words and I'm sure it's gonna triple once the whole game is completed. (I'm thinking of adding a few features to make it more interesting (Quiz-type mini-games, turn it into a dating sim...), if you have a suggestion, then please tell me.)

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The Answers to your Questions:

1. I freakin LOVE the plot synopsis, not too ambitious at all, it sounds really interesting!
2. The characters seem cool, no one really raises any real suspicion yet except for Louie, he seems a little sketchy but I love it!
3. The length is totally fine, don't worry about that! I love games that are sorta long, so I can always come back to it whenever I feel like it. When games are too short they're just done and that's it. Like "That Cheap And Sacred Thing"? Absolutely loved the story, but I was sad that it was so short. So, like I said, don't worry about the length! :)

Now I have a question: If there is a demo, where can I download it and is it a zip. file? Thanks!
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Oooh this looks good, definitely something I'd wanna play~

Answers to your questions...
1. I think the plot sounds really interesting c: I don't think it's too ambitious at all!
2. I like the sound of the characters! I'm kinda suspicious of Greg the most as he wanted to cover up the death and he found him first etc etc, but I guess that would be too straight forward to pin the blame on him right? But it would be interesting to know why he was so obsessed with keeping Zander's death a secret. Oh and Rey and Louie look haaaaaawt~
3. I love lengthy games! Nothing is worse than when you really get into a game and then it just... stops. So I definitely think the length of it will be fine :3

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The Answers to your Questions:

1. I freakin LOVE the plot synopsis, not too ambitious at all, it sounds really interesting!
2. The characters seem cool, no one really raises any real suspicion yet except for Louie, he seems a little sketchy but I love it!
3. The length is totally fine, don't worry about that! I love games that are sorta long, so I can always come back to it whenever I feel like it. When games are too short they're just done and that's it. Like "That Cheap And Sacred Thing"? Absolutely loved the story, but I was sad that it was so short. So, like I said, don't worry about the length! :)

Now I have a question: If there is a demo, where can I download it and is it a zip. file? Thanks!
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Thanks for the er... feedback?

Oh, really? Why would you think Louie's sketchy? So far... I think Louie has been getting the most suspicions.

And no, there isn't any demo yet. It's all written, but the art isn't complete yet.

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Oooh this looks good, definitely something I'd wanna play~

Answers to your questions...
1. I think the plot sounds really interesting c: I don't think it's too ambitious at all!
2. I like the sound of the characters! I'm kinda suspicious of Greg the most as he wanted to cover up the death and he found him first etc etc, but I guess that would be too straight forward to pin the blame on him right? But it would be interesting to know why he was so obsessed with keeping Zander's death a secret. Oh and Rey and Louie look haaaaaawt~
3. I love lengthy games! Nothing is worse than when you really get into a game and then it just... stops. So I definitely think the length of it will be fine :3


Thank you!
Ohoho, you find Greg the most suspicious then? That's interesting! Haha!
And, yes I agree with you, Rey does look hot. XD

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I mean Louie the synopsis says he's happy all the time, I would be suspicious of anyone who was too damn happy lol I mean you never know.

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So it's like a Trap, only with reversed genders xD. Unless Trap is a hentai-only genre...o.O

Nah, don't think so; even if it is, it doesn't have to be used that way.

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Yay, a murder mystery. I love (fictional) murder case stories :lol: I'm also making one myself :p
I already have some suspects lol, cannot wait to play it to prove me wrong :p

Will it be a reading only game? Or do you also have think and find clues etc like for example Phoenix Wright.


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Yay, a murder mystery. I love (fictional) murder case stories :lol: I'm also making one myself :p
I already have some suspects lol, cannot wait to play it to prove me wrong :p

Will it be a reading only game? Or do you also have think and find clues etc like for example Phoenix Wright.


Me too! I'll be looking forward to that.

It's not really read-only... I've been trying to mess around with codes and see if I can actually make a mini-game for band practices, but I only end up failing miserably so... :|
But, yeah, you can gather clues and stuff... Zander would be the most excellent info gatherer and clue keeper for you. ^_^

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This looks great! I feel sad that the her twin died though. I hope that he is not actually dead somehow. xD He is so cute looking.


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