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tuna_sushi
PostPosted: Sat Mar 03, 2012 2:04 pm 
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This VN sounds interesting... :)
Keeping an eye on this ^_^

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Asterisk
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Just wanna say, LOVE the art style x_x

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omg I love love love love your art style!! : D It's very unique and personal, which I really like!
It seems like a really interesting story, even though I can't play the demo, probably because I'm on a mac computer. OTL

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Nebty
PostPosted: Sat Mar 17, 2012 7:49 pm 
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Played the demo. The story has an interesting premise and the art is lovely, however there are a lot of spelling/grammatical errors as well as some weird phrasing. There's nothing that can't be fixed by a good editor though, and I'm excited to see where this goes. You might want to have your editor look into the story's pacing as well, I found it started off a bit slow.
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distorsion
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Love the game so far, though I learned very quickly not to play it right before bed. *shudders remembering the nightmares*
As for favorit characters, so far it's Elsa and maybe The Wall (I think you called him Canaan?)

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clua
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Hehe I finished my Nano s project at last...Now I can go back to THW! XD

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awwww okay good luck on that!
Fighting! <3

Thank you so much!! We indeed fight a lot during march XD Like everyone else who was on Nano

tuna_sushi wrote:
This VN sounds interesting... :)
Keeping an eye on this ^_^


Thank you so much for the support! Hope to not dissapoint

Asterisk wrote:
Just wanna say, LOVE the art style x_x


Thank you! Its the result of many years of training!(Lol and I cant draw limbs propertly orz)

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omg I love love love love your art style!! : D It's very unique and personal, which I really like!
It seems like a really interesting story, even though I can't play the demo, probably because I'm on a mac computer. OTL

;_; Well Im planning to launch another demo But I will ask first to Mink to check the grammar...So it wont be annoying to read
Will have a mac version then!

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Played the demo. The story has an interesting premise and the art is lovely, however there are a lot of spelling/grammatical errors as well as some weird phrasing. There's nothing that can't be fixed by a good editor though, and I'm excited to see where this goes. You might want to have your editor look into the story's pacing as well, I found it started off a bit slow.

Yes! Totally..After working with Anarchy on TKOT, The Hurtfull wall now looks too wordy for me...Too much clicks also...Right now It lacks of dynamism...I have to fix that...About the weird phrasing ;_;..Please, could you give me an example of that?Or what part had weird phrasing?

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Love the game so far, though I learned very quickly not to play it right before bed. *shudders remembering the nightmares*
As for favorit characters, so far it's Elsa and maybe The Wall (I think you called him Canaan?)

XDD sorry about that! Also that Elsa haha...Unluckly she would have one more appearance on the game and thats it ;_;
Cannan just started appearing on the story ehehe

Well Im still working on chapter 4! We would have a demo till this chapter...And the next release might be the whole game but of course I would love to hear your opinion

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PostPosted: Thu Apr 05, 2012 12:26 pm 
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Okay, your post sounds REALLY interesting, especially with the picture with "End". Who's that guy.
Can't say much now, as I am in the process of downloading the demo, but I have a question:
Is this going to be a commercial game?
Because, well, this sounds too interesting and if you're going to sell them, I guess I will forever live curious.

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Egressus wrote:
Okay, your post sounds REALLY interesting, especially with the picture with "End". Who's that guy.
Can't say much now, as I am in the process of downloading the demo, but I have a question:
Is this going to be a commercial game?
Because, well, this sounds too interesting and if you're going to sell them, I guess I will forever live curious.


xD Nope I dont think It has the art quality to be comercial...I might be messing with Renpy for a while..I want to make something comercial in the future but I dont feel pro enough yet(TKOT show me that haha...GUI I will master you some day..)

So It will be free XD, hope you like the demo!....Although It has a lot of grammar errors..orz

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Egressus
PostPosted: Thu Apr 05, 2012 1:43 pm 
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I think I could help if it's just grammar errors. I've seen them way too often, sometimes it feels like I'm decoding the morse or something. I could check the English if you want.

HURRAH Thank you! It looks gorgeous, by the way. Your art style is such a unique thing. /jealous

Can Canaan somehow let go of his hatred and get a body and somehow runs off with Lois?

I wanna know who's on that endiiinnggg /dies

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Sochie
PostPosted: Thu Apr 05, 2012 7:46 pm 
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The plot & artwork so unique! Love it : ) ♥
Definitely looking forward to this ^^
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clua
PostPosted: Mon Apr 09, 2012 7:25 pm 
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Hey Guys! sorry for the lateness on my responses!
Im lurking on the forum hehe but right now there are big changes on my house and we are trying to arrange and throw to the garbage things.
(And since Im kind of horder orz...I have the drawings when I was on high school...)


Egressus wrote:
I think I could help if it's just grammar errors. I've seen them way too often, sometimes it feels like I'm decoding the morse or something. I could check the English if you want.

HURRAH Thank you! It looks gorgeous, by the way. Your art style is such a unique thing. /jealous

Can Canaan somehow let go of his hatred and get a body and somehow runs off with Lois?

I wanna know who's on that endiiinnggg /dies


;_; You are so kind! But I will have to decline because Mink is already helping me with it! Im sorry orz
Btw I saw your VN project, your drawings are very nice I wish you success with it ;D!!

Canaan welp ...I want to spoil everything hahaha---But I must resist
(I just wondered if anybody already saw that...I had spoiled his appearance already..lol)

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The plot & artwork so unique! Love it : ) ♥
Definitely looking forward to this ^^


Thank you so much!! I hope I manage to finish the script soon orz

Well I will post a preview here, also dont forget to check my sadfrog development blog...I post preview images there also
(Just check it on time to time its not worth to follow because I like to spam a lot of music I like..lol)


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It's okay, I'm just overly enthusiastic *A*

Canaan really piques my interest. I thought he'd be more abusive and horror-ish, but I'm glad he's not spewing blood through the ceiling.
And the final picture on Chapter 1's end really surprised me. I actually yelped.

Thank you c:

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Egressus wrote:
It's okay, I'm just overly enthusiastic *A*

Canaan really piques my interest. I thought he'd be more abusive and horror-ish, but I'm glad he's not spewing blood through the ceiling.
And the final picture on Chapter 1's end really surprised me. I actually yelped.

Thank you c:


Nooo this is a simple mystery VN! I couldnt write a decent horror VN...orz
Thank you for your enthusiasm! Im very glad!

welp. Im working on GUI since Im kind of angry that I cant pull anything decent
It looks like there s no great improvement...D_:


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Egressus
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Nooo this is a simple mystery VN! I couldnt write a decent horror VN...orz
Thank you for your enthusiasm! Im very glad!

welp. Im working on GUI since Im kind of angry that I cant pull anything decent
It looks like there s no great improvement...D_:

No problem!

Improvement comes in little trickles, I think! But it's looking good-- not to complicated but not that simple either.

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clua wrote:
Nooo this is a simple mystery VN! I couldnt write a decent horror VN...orz
Thank you for your enthusiasm! Im very glad!

welp. Im working on GUI since Im kind of angry that I cant pull anything decent
It looks like there s no great improvement...D_:

No problem!

Improvement comes in little trickles, I think! But it's looking good-- not to complicated but not that simple either.

You are right!...Someday...someday!

Im ashamed to say I do not have anything to show right now...orz

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