In any case, any thoughts are welcome -- the recording, the singing, the composition, the lyrics, its place (or lack of place) in a VN, anything that comes to mind.
Vocals with a medium reverb added:
https://docs.google.com/file/d/0B9oiISk ... sp=sharing
Vocals with reverb + a distorting effect on it:
https://docs.google.com/file/d/0B9oiISk ... sp=sharing
For critique purposes, the vocals only with no effects or reverb:
https://docs.google.com/file/d/0B9oiISk ... usp=sharin
And these are the lyrics (spoiler-tagged if you want to listen first to critique enunciation):
i'm alone here, shadowed mirror
eyes and mouth dark, coma gray
my life's lone here, torn away
i can't see you
i can't hear you
i can't taste you
i can't touch you
allocate the agony
turning numb(er), binary
i can't read you
tear away the last feeling