My name is Beverly and I've been wandering through the forums since the beginning of January 2016 and I finally decided to make an account.
I have been thinking about creating my very first visual novel which is based on Hans Christian Anderson's The Snow Queen.
I am a big fan of fairy tale stories and my next VN might be based on a fairy tale story too xD
Summary
An evil witch has made a magic mirror that distorts the appearance of everything it reflects. It fails to reflect the good and beautiful aspects of people and things, while magnifying their bad and ugly aspects. The evil witch takes the mirror and his minions throughout the world, delighting in using it to distort everyone and everything; the mirror makes the loveliest landscapes look like "boiled spinach."They try to carry the mirror into heaven with the idea of making fools of the angels and God, but the higher they lift it, the more the mirror shakes with their laughter, and it slips from their grasp and falls back to earth, shattering into billions of pieces, some no larger than a grain of sand.
These splinters are blown by the wind all over the Earth and got into people's hearts and eyes, freezing their hearts like blocks of ice and making their eyes like the troll-mirror itself, seeing only the bad and ugly in people and things. To cure this, many people went on a journey to search the Winter Prince to thaw their frozen heart. But nobody ever comes back alive.
On a pleasant summer day, splinters of the mirror get into Kai's heart and eyes while he and his brother Landis are looking at a picture book in their window-box garden. Kai's heart becomes cruel and heartless, and he no longer cares about Landis, since everything now appear bad and ugly to him. The only beautiful and perfect things to him now are the tiny snowflakes that he sees through a magnifying glass.
The following winter, Kai goes out on a journey to find the Winter Prince. Kai arrived at the Ice Castle and the Prince then reveals himself to Kai and kisses him twice: once to numb him from the cold, and a second time to make him forget about Landis and his family. Kai agreed to live with the King and be his man servant, not knowing that the third kiss would kill him.
Characters
Kai Reynard (Male)
Age : 17
Background : Kai was originally an orphan. He was sent to the orphanage when he was 7 months old and was adopted by the noble family at the age of 4. Kai never knew of his natural birth parents, and he was not interested to know who.
Personality : This warm hearted, shy and sensitive 17 years old boy loves to spend his time in the library, reading books about dragons, mermaids and lost kingdoms. Kai is a very imaginative person and loves adventures. But due to some reasons, he was not allowed to step outside the manor until he is 18 years old. But he managed to make a few playmates which is Charlotte, the farmer’s daughter and Charley, the gardener’s youngest son. Aside from reading books and playing with his playmates, Kai also loves to spend his time with his favorite brother, Landis.
The Winter Prince (Male)
Syres Torvill
Age : 29 years old
Background : Syres was once a prince of a small and poor kingdom called Penderlaith. The kingdom was so poor and the King had no other choice but to make an agreement with an evil sorceress named Milicent. Blinded by the luxury the sorceress offered, the King made a mistake by letting his own heir cursed with the power of Winter. Milicent then took Syres to her place, but Syres ran away and built his own castle at the distant North, where the winter is eternal.
Personality : Syres is a gentle, soft-spoken and loving person. He spent years of isolation in his cold and lonely ice castle. Sometimes, he would travel around in other lands by winter, because he didn’t want to bring a snow storm in the middle of summer. He finds mortals who interest him and he takes them back to his palace to entertain him and keep him company. Hunters, who glory in the challenge of the deep snows; princes, who set out on quests to the distant north; sorcerers and scholars, who marvel at the beauty and power of Winter. It never works out. Some try and escape, try to steal his magic or his treasures, and he casts them out into the snowy wastes of the far north. Few survive to reach human civilization again.
Landis Reynard (Male)
Age : 20 years old
Background : Landis is the oldest Count Reynard’s son and Kai’s favorite sibling. Was raised by an only father because his mother died when she gave birth to him, but due to his father doing most things for him, he became a tad bit lazy. He was affected by his father’s demeanor to help other people and always helps people in need.
Personality : Due to his father had given him a lot of responsibilities placed on him when he was very young, Landis is a disciplined, mature and sometimes impatient person. Landis mostly spent his free time outside, helping the villagers or playing with his brother along with his other playmates. All those years of growing up together with Kai, he secretly developed a crush on him. When Kai ran away from home, Landis was determined to find him, confess his feelings and bring him home.
Kai Reynard (Male)
Age : 17
Background : Kai was originally an orphan. He was sent to the orphanage when he was 7 months old and was adopted by the noble family at the age of 4. Kai never knew of his natural birth parents, and he was not interested to know who.
Personality : This warm hearted, shy and sensitive 17 years old boy loves to spend his time in the library, reading books about dragons, mermaids and lost kingdoms. Kai is a very imaginative person and loves adventures. But due to some reasons, he was not allowed to step outside the manor until he is 18 years old. But he managed to make a few playmates which is Charlotte, the farmer’s daughter and Charley, the gardener’s youngest son. Aside from reading books and playing with his playmates, Kai also loves to spend his time with his favorite brother, Landis.
The Winter Prince (Male)
Syres Torvill
Age : 29 years old
Background : Syres was once a prince of a small and poor kingdom called Penderlaith. The kingdom was so poor and the King had no other choice but to make an agreement with an evil sorceress named Milicent. Blinded by the luxury the sorceress offered, the King made a mistake by letting his own heir cursed with the power of Winter. Milicent then took Syres to her place, but Syres ran away and built his own castle at the distant North, where the winter is eternal.
Personality : Syres is a gentle, soft-spoken and loving person. He spent years of isolation in his cold and lonely ice castle. Sometimes, he would travel around in other lands by winter, because he didn’t want to bring a snow storm in the middle of summer. He finds mortals who interest him and he takes them back to his palace to entertain him and keep him company. Hunters, who glory in the challenge of the deep snows; princes, who set out on quests to the distant north; sorcerers and scholars, who marvel at the beauty and power of Winter. It never works out. Some try and escape, try to steal his magic or his treasures, and he casts them out into the snowy wastes of the far north. Few survive to reach human civilization again.
Landis Reynard (Male)
Age : 20 years old
Background : Landis is the oldest Count Reynard’s son and Kai’s favorite sibling. Was raised by an only father because his mother died when she gave birth to him, but due to his father doing most things for him, he became a tad bit lazy. He was affected by his father’s demeanor to help other people and always helps people in need.
Personality : Due to his father had given him a lot of responsibilities placed on him when he was very young, Landis is a disciplined, mature and sometimes impatient person. Landis mostly spent his free time outside, helping the villagers or playing with his brother along with his other playmates. All those years of growing up together with Kai, he secretly developed a crush on him. When Kai ran away from home, Landis was determined to find him, confess his feelings and bring him home.
Charlotte Swan (Female)
Age : 20 years old
Background : She was born in a lower class family and his father works as a farmer in the Reynard’s family manor. She often stumbled onto Kai when she was helping the maids to clean the library. Once, she tried to striked a conversation with him, but Kai was very shy back then. She didn’t gave up and kept on teasing and talking to him. Since then, she befriended Kai and introduced Charley to Kai. They became best friends ever since.
Personality : Bubbly. That could be one way to describe Charlotte. She can very happy and she is almost always wearing a smile on her face. She can be very curious and will stop at nothing until her curiosity is sated. She can have quite an attitude and will not hesitate to tell you what she thinks of someone. She can also be very sarcastic and cheeky. She tends annoy people with her cheerful attitude and blunt behavior but she is a really kind and easy-going person. Nothing seems to bother her but if it does she covers it will smiles. She is hyper on occasion and she can get jealous quite easily. She is also very intelligent. She has a big fear of heights and she is not very good at cooking, sewing, or painting things.
Age : 20 years old
Background : She was born in a lower class family and his father works as a farmer in the Reynard’s family manor. She often stumbled onto Kai when she was helping the maids to clean the library. Once, she tried to striked a conversation with him, but Kai was very shy back then. She didn’t gave up and kept on teasing and talking to him. Since then, she befriended Kai and introduced Charley to Kai. They became best friends ever since.
Personality : Bubbly. That could be one way to describe Charlotte. She can very happy and she is almost always wearing a smile on her face. She can be very curious and will stop at nothing until her curiosity is sated. She can have quite an attitude and will not hesitate to tell you what she thinks of someone. She can also be very sarcastic and cheeky. She tends annoy people with her cheerful attitude and blunt behavior but she is a really kind and easy-going person. Nothing seems to bother her but if it does she covers it will smiles. She is hyper on occasion and she can get jealous quite easily. She is also very intelligent. She has a big fear of heights and she is not very good at cooking, sewing, or painting things.
Features
- Three love interests, you may only choose one
- 5-8 endings. 3 will be a sad ending while other will be a happy ending √
- Changeable character name
- What is your opinion on the plot? Do you have any suggestions to make it better?
- Do you like the characters and how do you feel about them based on the little information you have?
Do you think I should've just make this game BxB or GxB? Or both?- Should I implement the changeable protagonist's name feature?
- Should I include character death?
- Writing : 67%
- Character profiles : 25%
- Art : 20%
- GUIs : 10%
- Programming : 14%
- The plot was inspired from the original fairytale, but I will be adding more plot twists and maybe a few heartbreaking moments.
- I'm going to make this as a BxB storyline after a few positive feedbacks on the comment thread and PM
- English is not my first language, so please if you see a grammar error, inform me and I'll fix it ^^
- Currently adding character flaws~
