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Currently, I am planning a short demo of a VN about a guy who meets a girl at a bar, but the two are later antagonized by the giant or a man. It carries two routes that takes the two in either a park or a cafe. and I plan for two ending each. It will also be probably under 4,000 words.

These two in the attachments are the main heros, Emilio the rather sincere guy who gets into a bar with a fake ID trying to meet friends. And then there's Ashleigh, the shy woman who isn't afraid of having two guys duke it out for her. (Is that even normal?)

So this is a basic idea on how they might look. Think of them as test sketches. Emilio is actually a character in an old comic about how he befriends these kids when he was 16, and even though he was the odd man out, he began teaching them a lil something.

Emilio- my personal critique is that even if I filled in his hair color, he would still looks like Zack Efron, I want to work on the hair.

Ashleigh- She looks a bit slutty cause of both eyes and hair.

So I want you to give out suggestion, what would you like changed what would you like to stay, ect.

To me they look fine, though if you think your char will look like Efron just make the bangs go down or something... To me your guys remind me of Danny Phantom, how do you feel now?

The girl on the right looks too much like shego. lol But thanks for your response!

I don't think the dude looks too Zac-ish. And the girl definitely gives me a Kim Possible vibe. I like her design a little bit more; I think his eyes are just a pica too large for my taste. But they definitely look like interesting characters.

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Except from a couple of anatomical errors, they look good to me :3

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I think they look cute. I can't wait to see them inked/colored, I think you'll have a nice little VN on your hands.

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hey this is some practice sketches I've done to figure out the poses and heights.

....um? I don't see how a headshot can "look slutty".

That aside, the version on the right does look more polished, but the one on the left has more personality; I like her "say wut?" expression.

Emilio looks fine to me. I don't see anything particularly Efronian, aside from the haircut, which is really pretty normal these days. I enjoy his sticky-out ears

Yeah I did not really worded that out, I just meant to say that the combination of the face plus the body made her look sensual, which is part of her character but I actually changed it to the latest version because I want the reader to feel that she's not as innocent as she looks.

I'm glad you like Emilio's ears. originally the hair is suppose to be simpler. and I didn't want him to have that handsome, flawless trait that most main character's have so that's why I gave a certain roundness to his face, and ears like that.

Hey I just realized that if they were tooney animals like looney toons, Emilio might have been a monkey cause of the ears. lol

Ah, that makes more sense. Yeah, I can see that -- also, the right-hand version looks younger.

Haha, yes. Perhaps an easter egg is in order. >:)

maybe. but first, I have to stop struggling at getting Bruno's anatomy right! Fuck it, I'm a beginner, if it looks alright I'll just post it as is...

Update on the artwork! Please Critique!

Yaranaika?

...seriously?

The first thing that came into my mind when seeing the portrait of the antagonist:

"Everybody who has Lupin III as an antagonist is up for major trouble...."

Aside from that minor gripe, the revamp has certainly helped making the artwork more attractive. There's still a lot to be done in terms of body symmetry and proportion to make the art look good, but I like the general style.

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