[WIP] Untold Myth 1st Tale

[Dunceney]

Untold Myth 1st Tale -Earthbreaking Flight-

Hiya everyone!!

I'm working (actually, slacking) on my first VN, its kinda late to post it here since its almost nearing completion. I appreciate any feedback, suggestions, opinions, help, cup noodle, or glass of milk. And I'm sorry if my english is messed up, since english is not my first language.

Now a little summary about the setting of this story:
The world in Untold Myth consists of various places from different mythologies around the world merged together. The characters in this story are personified (or anthropomorphic) mythological creatures.

STORY
The Lycia region, surrounded by massive, impenetrable mountains. This place was isolated from the world outside. The mountains were too high for most flying creatures to be able to cross them. And below the mountains are filled with adamantine, the hardest mineral in the world, making it almost impossible to get in or out via underground.

Belle, a Chimera living on Lycia region was enjoying her usual peaceful life. Until one day, she met a Harpy from outside of Lycia. The harpy asked Belle to help her to find the source of unnatural earthquakes that affected the world outside. Little did Belle know that this meeting was going to change her peaceful life into a chaotic one.

CHARACTERS

Belle
A young Chimera. Being isolated inside Lycia made her know almost nothing about the world. A cheerful creature that is full of curiosity.


Aello
A Harpy from the world outside, she came to Lycia to stop the unnatural earthquakes that happened lately. She hides many secrets behind her elegant behavior.


Arges
A nomad Cyclops that finally found her perfect place for her "permanent home". She was unaware that all those earthquakes is happening very close to her home.

PROGRESS (UPDATED):
Story 100%
Art 100%
Sound 100%
Coding 100%

and lastly... a screenshot:

I KNOW YOU STOLE MY PANTS!!



time to call the police...

[Silvere]

I somehow get reminded of Touhou, mainly because of Aello. :/
Was this done on purpose or am I seeing things here?

But..., well, just because of that.. I will wait for it. ._.
I´m so easily manipulated -.-

[Nellie]

I somehow get reminded of Touhou, mainly because of Aello. :/
Was this done on purpose or am I seeing things here?

But..., well, just because of that.. I will wait for it. ._.
I´m so easily manipulated -.-

Same here! Aello really reminded me of Yukari! XD And that caught my interest as well! =D

[azureXtwilight]

Must not stare... at the text box... It's so pretty O_O

[KomiTsuku]

So bright and colorful! ^_^ I must admit it has drawn my interest.

[Snow Blossom]

Wow this looks really cute! Love the art!

Just curious, is one of Arges' eyes closed because she's a cyclops?

[Aleema]

Oh my god. Is that Comic Sans? Please say no.

[redcat]

^
what's with comis sans?

[Riviera]

It's just usually used in ways that people who are actually interested in fonts consider to be outside of the purpose it was made for.

I'm not very bothered by what font people use for what purpose, but people who do will probably flame you for using comic sans.

[redcat]

^
Oh gosh.. I didn't know if there are rules about using fonts. I surely need more info about this. Any good links for me to start digging? Or perhaps someone could fill me in?

Sorry for OOT.

[Dunceney]

I somehow get reminded of Touhou, mainly because of Aello. :/
Was this done on purpose or am I seeing things here?

But..., well, just because of that.. I will wait for it. ._.
I´m so easily manipulated -.-

Same here! Aello really reminded me of Yukari! XD And that caught my interest as well! =D

No you weren't mistaken, I designed the chars when I was played lot of touhou doujins, I admit I got affected lol. Gonna redesign the characters for the 2nd tale later =w=

Must not stare... at the text box... It's so pretty O_O

It is? I thought it was very simple XDD

Wow this looks really cute! Love the art!

Just curious, is one of Arges' eyes closed because she's a cyclops?

Its the opposite, because she's a cyclops one of her eye could never open (but when I flipped her sprite... *facepalm*)

Oh my god. Is that Comic Sans? Please say no.

It's just usually used in ways that people who are actually interested in fonts consider to be outside of the purpose it was made for.

I'm not very bothered by what font people use for what purpose, but people who do will probably flame you for using comic sans.

whoa I didn't know people hate that font very much XDD

I wanted to use rounded edge font so I chose comic sans since its the most common font, I guess I'll look for another font if people don't like it

[Aleema]

I don't hate the font (and I don't flame people who just use it), but it's a joke to point it out whenever you see it. Comic Sans awareness is a good thing. Personally, I think it's horrible for your layout. It does not mesh at all with the font that you've used for their name and the logo, and I would prefer that font in the text box. Consistency or compatibility. If you want rounded edges, then be consistent with both of your fonts. Comic Sans has a reputation for being the "retarded" font, and hipsters will love to tell you all about it, but I just think it's totally unprofessional for your professional-heading layout and the feel of your game. Everything looks fine until I read the dialogue, and then I'm just ... bleh. But I'm a GUI nut, so ignore me.

@redcat: Comic Sans is just the butt of many jokes. There aren't any font rules that I'm aware of. But some people do take typography way too seriously.

[stellacisem]

haha, you tole my pants! XD anyway, I think the story has the potential. Not many are based on chimeras you know I'm waiting for the release then. oh and by the way, if you need any help or some beta-reader I can help!

[Lumen_Astrum]

The font blends badly with the textbox... >_> Can you just use something like Garamond instead?

Anyway, nice looking game (and textbox! )

[Dunceney]

Weeeee~ I almost finished with this project, I planned to release it on June 1st

Now I wanna ask about moving WIP into completed project, but I don't know what I should ask XDD Anyone willing to explain it to me in details?





P.S. I already changed the font lol