Dreams of perfection [Horror,Romance,Urban Fantasy,Sci-fi]
Posted: Mon Apr 21, 2014 12:38 am
Dreams of perfection
My first visual novel ! Although is not my first time writing novels I had the feeling that this was a good story for a vn.
Plot!
In a place not too far away, Jade Calici lives a quiet life writing all alone. With a strange gift of seeing dead people and demons everywhere, tries avoiding socializing and even get out her house, her family is unknown, they abandoned her when she was 6 in the street. Traumatized, she lives under the protection of her books, that no one would read (What she says)
One day, she seems obligated to go outside because of lack of food. And her surprise is when she founds a demon, that offers her the irresistible contract of making her dreams come true. What are Jade's dreams? Write a book, but not any book, The Perfect Book.
The Perfect Book is an urban legend, and Jade is certain that is true. The demon, whose name is Daiji, says that he can make that true with a condition.Make jade write the book, get her five minutes of fame, and then go into the depths of hell with him...
Characters!
Jade Calici
"One obtains perfection with facades"
An obsessive writer that prefers to keep her works for herself, because her fear of people rejecting her and her inferiority complex. She hates people and she only gets out of her house if is necessary. She loves rainy days, because it's a wonderful excuse to stay home. She hates ghosts, the reason is that they are too noisy for her, and the fact they can't stop whining.
Daiji
"I'm the most powerful demon of the world! World! World! World!"
An energetic demon that posses the strange habit of repeating substantives in her phrases. He often talks about himself as someone powerful, but he shows that his real personality is a powerless demon with an inferiority complex. He loves Jade, because he is impressed by her strong will and the fact she is not like other humans, stupid and lustful. He hates vehicles, the reason is that he doesn't know how they work and every time he sees one he screams "Another macabre construction of God! Save me!"
Secondary characters of The Perfect Book
They are many, and I only wanted to present the main characters. One day i'm putting a little description of each one.
What I want to do!
SPOILER?
The main idea is to put Jade in the book she will write. If she successfully survives in each of the chapter she will be able to publish it.
Jade's destiny is doomed from the very start, so I try my best for not making her a sympathic character for the player. The stories on The Perfect Book are a creepy version of Romeo and Juliet (Now I think it's in the game is more like "Romeo and Romeo"), The Little Mermaid (With robots!) , Hansel and Gretel (With more people and a modern version), And a whole arc specially for knowing more about Jade's past and Daiji's obsession with Jade.
Questions!
1- Something you want to tell me about the plot?
2- The format "A story inside another story" is too cliche?
3- Something else i should modify?
4- Add a thing you consider important here
Progress!
Sprites : 0%
Writing : 75%
Scripting : 10%
Bg's : 100%
Team!
Writer: Me!
Coder: Me! *Forever Alone*
Music: Garoad
Proofreader: dreamy
Artist: Washu_Ira
What i expect getting from this!
I expect getting some feedback and critiques. Also i wanted to share my project and put a bit more details on the story.
My first visual novel ! Although is not my first time writing novels I had the feeling that this was a good story for a vn.
Plot!
In a place not too far away, Jade Calici lives a quiet life writing all alone. With a strange gift of seeing dead people and demons everywhere, tries avoiding socializing and even get out her house, her family is unknown, they abandoned her when she was 6 in the street. Traumatized, she lives under the protection of her books, that no one would read (What she says)
One day, she seems obligated to go outside because of lack of food. And her surprise is when she founds a demon, that offers her the irresistible contract of making her dreams come true. What are Jade's dreams? Write a book, but not any book, The Perfect Book.
The Perfect Book is an urban legend, and Jade is certain that is true. The demon, whose name is Daiji, says that he can make that true with a condition.Make jade write the book, get her five minutes of fame, and then go into the depths of hell with him...
Characters!
Jade Calici
"One obtains perfection with facades"
An obsessive writer that prefers to keep her works for herself, because her fear of people rejecting her and her inferiority complex. She hates people and she only gets out of her house if is necessary. She loves rainy days, because it's a wonderful excuse to stay home. She hates ghosts, the reason is that they are too noisy for her, and the fact they can't stop whining.
Daiji
"I'm the most powerful demon of the world! World! World! World!"
An energetic demon that posses the strange habit of repeating substantives in her phrases. He often talks about himself as someone powerful, but he shows that his real personality is a powerless demon with an inferiority complex. He loves Jade, because he is impressed by her strong will and the fact she is not like other humans, stupid and lustful. He hates vehicles, the reason is that he doesn't know how they work and every time he sees one he screams "Another macabre construction of God! Save me!"
Secondary characters of The Perfect Book
They are many, and I only wanted to present the main characters. One day i'm putting a little description of each one.
What I want to do!
SPOILER?
The main idea is to put Jade in the book she will write. If she successfully survives in each of the chapter she will be able to publish it.
Jade's destiny is doomed from the very start, so I try my best for not making her a sympathic character for the player. The stories on The Perfect Book are a creepy version of Romeo and Juliet (Now I think it's in the game is more like "Romeo and Romeo"), The Little Mermaid (With robots!) , Hansel and Gretel (With more people and a modern version), And a whole arc specially for knowing more about Jade's past and Daiji's obsession with Jade.
Questions!
1- Something you want to tell me about the plot?
2- The format "A story inside another story" is too cliche?
3- Something else i should modify?
4- Add a thing you consider important here
Progress!
Sprites : 0%
Writing : 75%
Scripting : 10%
Bg's : 100%
Team!
Writer: Me!
Coder: Me! *Forever Alone*
Music: Garoad
Proofreader: dreamy
Artist: Washu_Ira
What i expect getting from this!
I expect getting some feedback and critiques. Also i wanted to share my project and put a bit more details on the story.