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by noremedy
Wed Feb 24, 2010 1:36 pm
Forum: Ideas
Topic: [WIP] Errant Heart
Replies: 39
Views: 4686

Re: [WIP] Errant Heart - Now with demo! For a limited time!

Ehhh, I don't want to say it's the third person perspective I take issue with. I think the first-person is primarily adopted to increase immersion, but lots of literature is third-person. I just think the writing isn't that good. The narration is much too heavy and intrusive for a book, and with a v...
by noremedy
Wed Feb 24, 2010 12:14 pm
Forum: Ideas
Topic: [WIP] Errant Heart
Replies: 39
Views: 4686

Re: [WIP] Errant Heart - Now with demo! For a limited time!

I didn't get very far into the demo but the writing is a little off, particularly for the VN genre. There's numerous descriptions of the doctor while we have a picture of him right in front of us. In general, I think there's a lot of narration dedicated to what should be conveyed in the dialogue or ...
by noremedy
Wed May 06, 2009 7:49 am
Forum: Ideas
Topic: Cause for a Remedy
Replies: 6
Views: 1006

Re: Cause for a Remedy

Thanks for the replies and motivation, guys. Talesweaver, you've been PM'd. Oh, and for the record, any images or music in the game is not supposed to be permanent, that's just me experimenting with the engine.
by noremedy
Tue May 05, 2009 10:45 am
Forum: Ideas
Topic: Cause for a Remedy
Replies: 6
Views: 1006

Re: Cause for a Remedy

Here is a four-page pdf outlining the characters/setting/etc that I am currently working with.
by noremedy
Tue May 05, 2009 10:44 am
Forum: Ideas
Topic: Cause for a Remedy
Replies: 6
Views: 1006

Re: Cause for a Remedy

Thanks for the feedback. I wholeheartedly agree. I was not entirely sober while typing that last night, post-exam celebration. Okay, that's my bad. The problem is I see lots of introductory first posts that look something like: Name: Age: Birthday: Likes: --- Name: Age: . . You get the point. Which ...
by noremedy
Mon May 04, 2009 11:59 pm
Forum: Ideas
Topic: Cause for a Remedy
Replies: 6
Views: 1006

Cause for a Remedy

Hey everyone, I think this is like my third post or something, but I've lurked for awhile. Anyway, I completed my master's degree this morning, after going back to school last year. I liked it so much I'm going to stick around for the next level, but that gives me this summer mostly free. I plan to ...
by noremedy
Mon Feb 23, 2009 11:19 am
Forum: Ideas
Topic: [WIP] Shock Cocoon: Gascoyne
Replies: 45
Views: 8969

Re: Kanetsuki no Monogatari

Holy, that background looks familiar, which is particularly disturbing since I live in a New York city home to a state university. I'm just really posting to offer moral support, since I can only write, and that poorly. I hope you finish it, I left university with my degree and had to get a real job...
by noremedy
Fri Nov 28, 2008 9:48 am
Forum: Ideas
Topic: Proofreading/editing needed again for my new game
Replies: 4
Views: 876

Re: Proofreading/editing needed again for my new game

Hey, sounds like a worthy way to pass some time. Feel free to send it along if you're still looking for help.