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by joakkar
Tue Jul 04, 2017 9:33 pm
Forum: We are a Free Project looking for Partners
Topic: Looking for writer for yaoi game jam 2017 [18+ content]
Replies: 0
Views: 583

Looking for writer for yaoi game jam 2017 [18+ content]

As our current project for yaoi game jam 2017 , our team under the name of kuma entertainment are working on a 2D stealth game/ erotic visual novel hybrid developed with the unity engine. The game is set on a fictional world where our protagonist works as a secret agent who uses sex appeal and seduc...
by joakkar
Sun Jul 13, 2014 4:01 pm
Forum: Old Threads (– September 2014)
Topic: Needed extra writer/editor for otome game project[CLOSED]
Replies: 0
Views: 358

Needed extra writer/editor for otome game project[CLOSED]

Hi, me along with PrincesssGamer are beginning work on a stat-raising otome game and we're in need of an extra writer/editor to help advance the script. The one in charge of the art is me: Examples: http://fav.me/d7jwkt8 & http://fav.me/d6hgadm The beta designs for the four obtainable heroes are: ht...
by joakkar
Mon May 12, 2014 5:57 pm
Forum: Demos & Beta Testing
Topic: Biospectre [Suspense,thriller] [Currently seeking artists.]
Replies: 10
Views: 1815

Re: Biospectre [Suspense,thriller] [Currently seeking artist

I didn't download demo 0.1, so maybe that's why I think it's too short. Since you're releasing demo 0.3 soon, I'm going to just wait for that. So far, I can't tell anything what with the short amount of dialogues that I read, my fault for not downloading 0.1 demo though, lol. But I like your sprite...
by joakkar
Thu Apr 17, 2014 7:31 am
Forum: Old Threads (– September 2014)
Topic: Sprite Maker Design Suggestion?
Replies: 3
Views: 412

Re: Sprite Maker Design Suggestion?

well the only thing I'm seriously tired of seeing is bangs. Most VN characters have bangs while in real life most men have shorter hair than that and most women have longer hair than that covering their foreheads. Also this is just something I personally like but adding a secondary hair color option...
by joakkar
Wed Apr 16, 2014 8:09 am
Forum: Old Threads (– September 2014)
Topic: Free Artist | CLOSED
Replies: 5
Views: 818

Re: Artist Available l FREE

You think you could help me shade some sprites? I have this thing where I'm completely stupid when it comes to knowing how the light source affects stuff.
by joakkar
Tue Apr 15, 2014 12:28 pm
Forum: Demos & Beta Testing
Topic: Biospectre [Suspense,thriller] [Currently seeking artists.]
Replies: 10
Views: 1815

Re: Biospectre [Suspense,thriller] [Currently seeking artist

The second demo is out but not up for review yet. Just in there for organization sake and to show off some of the icons and backgrounds I got. As StellarOrb said, he'll be helping with the writing this time so you can all expect something much better for demo 0.3. See ya /o/
by joakkar
Tue Apr 15, 2014 12:36 am
Forum: Demos & Beta Testing
Topic: Biospectre [Suspense,thriller] [Currently seeking artists.]
Replies: 10
Views: 1815

Re: Biospectre [Suspense,thriller] [Currently seeking artist

I like it, especially the beginning in the bathroom. You definitely set the mood well, although some of the sentence structures and wording could use a bit of revision. I'm planning on rolling out my first VN as well, and I don't know if we're in the same boat, but I haven't written anything apprec...
by joakkar
Sun Apr 13, 2014 6:10 pm
Forum: Demos & Beta Testing
Topic: Death Rule: lost code//Second Stage Demo
Replies: 13
Views: 4479

Re: Death Rule: lost code//Second Stage Demo

I only played the last demo but I really enjoyed the plot. Still, the whole players menu confused me since I'm guessing the double agent ability also affects that (at which point did the "Kill all uneven players" player entry even appear?). Also the part where number one was killed was really weird ...
by joakkar
Sun Apr 06, 2014 10:58 am
Forum: Demos & Beta Testing
Topic: Biospectre [Suspense,thriller] [Currently seeking artists.]
Replies: 10
Views: 1815

Re: Biospectre [Suspense,thriller] [Currently seeking artist

First of all, I'm glad someone was able to hate it right away. This way I don't have to change that much to aim it in a better direction. I think you should aim for a character that's empathetic , not sympathetic . I know what the words mean, but could you elaborate a little? I read an article about...
by joakkar
Sat Apr 05, 2014 9:40 pm
Forum: Demos & Beta Testing
Topic: A Shadow's Reflection [DEMO]
Replies: 14
Views: 3771

Re: A Shadow's Reflection [DEMO]

I really enjoyed the story so far. Both Eli and Derek are really interesting to look at and even when the story is so fantastic, it still seems like the characters reactions are realistic (realistic coming from a cast full of mentally unstable characters but realistic nevertheless). The pacing on th...
by joakkar
Sat Apr 05, 2014 8:22 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Training? Advice?
Replies: 16
Views: 1792

Re: Training? Advice?

The first beta of my first project called Biospectre is already up at http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewto ... 45&t=26009 so anyone who wants to critique my writing is free to go there to do it so we can leave this poor topic rest in peace. Thanks for everyone's help again.
by joakkar
Sat Apr 05, 2014 8:09 pm
Forum: Demos & Beta Testing
Topic: Biospectre [Suspense,thriller] [Currently seeking artists.]
Replies: 10
Views: 1815

Biospectre [Suspense,thriller] [Currently seeking artists.]

Hello everyone. This is my first VN project, which I'm working in parallel with another one I'm not revealing just yet. This one in particular is based on a hypothesis I've had for a while regarding ghosts and I decided to use a story to leave that in the open. As of now, as long as I have enough fe...
by joakkar
Tue Apr 01, 2014 1:06 am
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Training? Advice?
Replies: 16
Views: 1792

Re: Training? Advice?

Writing is also the way to go. The only way to get better is with tons and tons of trial and error, finding out what works and what doesn't, and through a large amount of complete and utter failure. It's also one thing looking at yourself and seeing what's wrong with it, which is a good thing, self...
by joakkar
Mon Mar 31, 2014 10:49 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Training? Advice?
Replies: 16
Views: 1792

Re: Training? Advice?

The "Micro outline" view is where you get down into the nitty-gritty details, and structure each chapter individually. Here you go beyond "What" happens, and you hammer down the "How it happens", "Why it happens", and "How does it effect, challenge, or change the characters". Like the main outline,...
by joakkar
Mon Mar 31, 2014 3:32 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Training? Advice?
Replies: 16
Views: 1792

Re: Training? Advice?

My absolute favorite books on writing are "How Not to Write a Novel" by Howard Mittlemark and Sarah Newman (very funny) and more recently, "The Anatomy of Story: 22 Steps to Becoming a Master Storyteller" by John Truby. One's by experienced novelists and the other's by a screenwriter, but they both...