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by ghostpel
Sun Jul 10, 2016 2:15 am
Forum: Ideas
Topic: Visual Novel Ideas looking for feedback
Replies: 5
Views: 912

Re: Visual Novel Ideas looking for feedback

Reading this threat again have me embarrassed, I could've have use more specific question such as "If protagonist is trapped in the other world, what kind of explanation do you want? brief monologue or full story of 'the first day'?" , Will you hate it if in the end, there's no love involved at all....
by ghostpel
Sun Jul 03, 2016 12:17 pm
Forum: Ideas
Topic: Visual Novel Ideas looking for feedback
Replies: 5
Views: 912

Re: Visual Novel Ideas looking for feedback

English is a problem, yeah, I know it since I am not a native speaker. I suggest you to polish your work a bit and then show it in some writings-oriented communities 'whazzup I am X I'm creating a game right now, if you want to patricipate - find me on Y, you help me polish my text, I put you in th...
by ghostpel
Sun Jul 03, 2016 10:09 am
Forum: Personal Art Threads
Topic: Is my character art passable?
Replies: 10
Views: 1213

Re: Is my character art passable?

About art, I'd be echoing SundownKid by saying you've got a good proportion. What I can't tell from small picture is whatever will it look good on VN screen... to be specifics, when it scaled up. Flash's hard line often come off as unnatural and tend to make everything looks cheap, no matter how goo...
by ghostpel
Sun Jul 03, 2016 5:06 am
Forum: Ideas
Topic: Visual Novel Ideas looking for feedback
Replies: 5
Views: 912

Visual Novel Ideas looking for feedback

After lurking around this site and interacting with creative person for awhile (still 3 times more than I did in my whole life). I'm starting to feel that getting so much help without putting any idea out there is a bit...selfish. So, I will put it here! (<- awkward resolve) Edited : spot a lot of m...
by ghostpel
Fri Jul 01, 2016 3:04 am
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Diverse Character Dilemma
Replies: 29
Views: 3592

Re: Diverse Character Dilemma

I born and live in an Asian country, what I can say in my honest opinion is yes, 'only one black' tend to stand out and I often ended up looking at them more than other 'same color' character. Getting looked more could do both good and bad, good = they got recognized, bad= if there's something wrong...
by ghostpel
Fri Jul 01, 2016 2:13 am
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Character with ambiguous gender or outright deceptive
Replies: 13
Views: 2074

Re: Character with ambiguous gender or outright deceptive

Thank you guys for all comment! Originally, I was going to write a lot in respond but that's better suited for Idea threat or WIP. So all I could say is I'm really glad to see you stand on the same ground (at least, closer) more than I though. (I have been worried that what I perceived as 'respect' ...
by ghostpel
Mon Jun 27, 2016 10:09 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Character with ambiguous gender or outright deceptive
Replies: 13
Views: 2074

Character with ambiguous gender or outright deceptive

Firstly, this is the first time I start a topic on English community. I'm normally sheltered so this is quite and achievement...well, I'll celebrate it alone. Also, as you may guess from my sentence, I'm not a native speaker. (I'll keep telling this until someone says "Enough! I remember your alread...
by ghostpel
Sun Jun 19, 2016 2:43 am
Forum: Demos & Beta Testing
Topic: A Shadow's Reflection [DEMO]
Replies: 14
Views: 3690

Re: A Shadow's Reflection [DEMO]

Sorry for being years late. Finished this a moment ago. Good job! I couldn't comment much on the writing since my English is...less than average. But overall it's very easy to read. ^^' The mystery itself is interesting. I love how each scene conveyed protagonist's uneasiness. (Not having too much f...
by ghostpel
Sat Jun 18, 2016 7:55 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: To info dump or not?
Replies: 9
Views: 1185

Re: To info dump or not?

Have you considered putting it somewhere separate from the main story? Such as the codex, tips, or glossary where the player can access via a menu. Some reader may want to ignore the rule and go along with the flow (+some small hint on the way instead of full-fledged infodump) but will read it when ...
by ghostpel
Wed Jun 08, 2016 3:24 am
Forum: Works in Progress
Topic: Tower Trap [BL, Fantasy, Comedy][YaoiJam]
Replies: 9
Views: 2532

Re: Tower Trap [BL, Fantasy, Comedy][YaoiJam]

Having no experiences with Yaoi game aside from first 20 minutes of Togainu no chi, still interested. I'm easy ^^' 1. Does the premise seem interesting? - As someone with an unhealthy obsession in the dungeon (but sucks at d&d), seeing 'trap' and 'tower' in the title is enough for me to get interest...
by ghostpel
Sat Jun 04, 2016 9:25 am
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Do you doubt your writing?
Replies: 15
Views: 1823

Re: Do you doubt your writing?

Being far from a professional writer, I may sound a bit naive here but..having someone to looks at your draft should solve most problems. A Nice friend is good for your self-esteem. If you're lucky he'll pointed out where the problem is. Recently, I've drawn my draft (yes, I can't write anything dec...
by ghostpel
Fri Jun 03, 2016 11:00 pm
Forum: Works in Progress
Topic: Shadow City [Magical Girl][Noir]
Replies: 10
Views: 2891

Re: Shadow City [Magical Girl][Noir]

This post sleeps in my draft box for a while now. Anyway, after being encouraged(?). I finally have enough guts to post this. Personally, I'll look forward to anything with "The town with the dark secret" tropes...when they're in a format that are easier to read. So, this interests me immediately. M...
by ghostpel
Thu Jun 02, 2016 5:07 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Interestingly structured VNs
Replies: 4
Views: 1057

Re: Interestingly structured VNs

I'm a little more confused as to how the middle one works, though it reminds me a bit of the Mercy Option in Undertale, especially for bosses. (wherein you are mostly just surviving until they've said their piece) Sorry, my vocabularies are limited here. (still working on that, or my project won't ...
by ghostpel
Wed Jun 01, 2016 10:47 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Interestingly structured VNs
Replies: 4
Views: 1057

Re: Interestingly structured VNs

After spends good 10 minutes drawing the scene you describe in the paper to make sense out of it. (Yes, planning that must be fun.) I feel obligated to reply despite my reply have nothing to do with your story...forgive me ^^' Also, English isn't my native language and I didn't post much..okay, on t...
by ghostpel
Mon May 09, 2016 6:56 pm
Forum: General Discussion
Topic: The VN or The KN?
Replies: 30
Views: 3296

Re: The VN or The KN?

I prefer KN. It's easier to pickup for some nice read. (It's definitely different from a book. Unless you ended up making a wall of text on an image background with some music to accompany a reader. hint: sound/visual effects do helps.) VN demands more... mental, prepare to deal with game mechanism,...