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Heh, your suggestion makes sense. I'll definitely keep that in mind -- yes, it does work better for this story and it doesn't give away things too early. (well, I guess it's better than in some books I've read where the author explicitly states "this would lead to his demise" about 8 chapt...

Ah, I see. You understood it correctly although you did find it confusing. That's good to know. A much longer unreleased piece that I've finished writing has a similar "gimmick" and it's good enough for me if I know that at least someone can understand such things. I personally like being ...

edited with an explanation for the magician part, btw. On another note, I really wanted to explore the sort of one-sided puppy love that Bryan had for Alyssa, but in the end, I decided that it just wouldn't work out without any more gratuitous use of deus ex machina, which Lillet is a personificatio...

Thank you for the review. Jumping tenses is a weakness of mine when I'm deep into writing. I think my editor actually caught those a few times. Those aren't intentional except for the letter chapter. Possible spoilers As for her father rushing in to tell her that she's going to get better, I'd say i...

PRECISION-OF-LANGUAGE, Jonas. Lulz. Just adding another sorta obscure reference. In all seriousness, I don't think it's possible for human language to be truly precise. As for English, I'd say if you can get your point across without your grammatical errors being too glaring, it works. This is, of c...

Well, there are quite a few words that sound exactly the same, but are easy enough to distinguish from each other when used in context or when in written form, e.g. I like to write stories. It is my moral right . Left is not right . I know that I'm right . Your rite of passage. Your name is Wright ....

I believe that classic VN titles are indeed catered towards a male-only audience since even with the strong focus on the story, they are still classified as bishoujo games and some originally had ero content prior to getting an all-ages version. According to Wikipedia: A bishōjo game (美少女ゲーム bishōjo...

http://img265.imageshack.us/img265/6641/teacupvnfest.png Here's something that I've been wanting to post here for a long time but I keep forgetting to. This game was originally released for the third day of last year's Teacup Visual Novel Festival One Week of Eternity is the story of Alyssa Cruz, a...

So I tried it and the story felt totally random and there are typographical errors all over the place. You also make some pretty liberal use of chatspeak shortcuts like "BTW" and "bcos" among others. Furthermore, you should drop the habit of using so many periods on an ellipsis (...

Hmm... just dropped in to say that I don't mind the apparently overwhelming numbers of the GxB WIPs in LSF. I've read a few of them and I genuinely admire the support that the Otome creators provide for each other as opposed to the ego-tripping that I often perceive in your standard BxG perfushenal,...

Niche audience reporting in. (with a new avatar with a hat to boot) I'm enjoying these little releases of yours. For this particular piece, I like how you brought back the mild sexual tension between our protagonist and his girl friend that was present in the first installment. Competent writing and...

I like the flash style character art. I'll give this game a download and come back here with my thoughts on it later.

@yummy: That's a very dead red fox on her head.

Heh, don't make them in the first place? To elaborate, it's a good idea to be conscientious enough to avoid plot holes while writing. I wouldn't say it's nearly impossible to do this in the first draft. There will always be room for improvement in the rough draft and the same can be said of the fin...

About time for an avatar change. Meet Nubbycakes. She likes to play tetris friends although she's still just a nubbycakes Nubbycakes' Tetris Friends profile: http://www.tetrisfriends.com/users/prof ... id=2013972