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by arisan
Sun Oct 08, 2017 10:37 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Having trouble with world building
Replies: 13
Views: 2184

Re: Having trouble with world building

The story is about a human girl who becomes suspicious of her small town after a series of disappearances happen. Given the setting and the protagonist's objective, this seems like a small-scale story rather than a fate-of-the-world kind of story. So while it'd help to know the big picture, you can...
by arisan
Wed Sep 27, 2017 7:27 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Writing Buddies!
Replies: 15
Views: 3181

Re: Writing Buddies!

Sent request as arisan~ I work according to the Eastern Australian timezone, though, so I don't know how much overlap that will entail @_@ My current project's my first foray into VN writing, but I do also write short stories and run D&D adventures for a few groups, so could trade ideas on those...
by arisan
Tue Sep 26, 2017 9:08 pm
Forum: Works in Progress
Topic: Golden Hour [GxB][Romance][School Life][Mobile]: KICKSTARTER LAST 3 DAYS!
Replies: 53
Views: 15855

Re: Golden Hour [GxB][Romance][School Life][Mobile]: DEMO DISCORD UP!

Halloa! Just to clarify, the alpha demo's still set for release in a few days. We'll be sending it out through our discord channel, though, which is already open. Looking forward to seeing y'all there! ' - ') b
by arisan
Mon Sep 25, 2017 8:09 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: When creating the story...
Replies: 13
Views: 2118

Re: When creating the story...

It seems that a large cast (of heroines?) is one of your key objectives, so let's treat that as a necessity. Given this, I would suggest you start your drafts with the two characters you have. As you write, you'll have other characters that need to crop up along the way. Typically, these would be yo...
by arisan
Mon Sep 04, 2017 7:23 am
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Visual Decision-Tree Software?
Replies: 4
Views: 2726

Re: Visual Decision-Tree Software?

You could also try Yarn, which is what I've been using. Also free.
by arisan
Thu Aug 03, 2017 8:24 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Is my writing good enough?
Replies: 7
Views: 1540

Re: Is my writing good enough?

But I wonder if it even makes any sense for me to continues writing in English. I'd like to respond to this first of all, because I think a lot of what follows hinges on this. If you think your command of of English is limiting what you express, not simply in a technical sense but in terms of subst...
by arisan
Sun Jul 30, 2017 10:08 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Correct punctuation
Replies: 6
Views: 989

Re: Correct punctuation

Abiding by conservative rules of grammar, you would, in fact, use only one of them. Generally, it would be the exclamation point, as a question can be inferred from the context and sentence construction. Conversely, you could simply use the question mark if the sentence structure is ambiguous, but t...
by arisan
Wed Jul 19, 2017 8:39 pm
Forum: Other Story-based Games
Topic: Disability and Chronic Illness in VNs
Replies: 15
Views: 6731

Re: Disability and Chronic Illness in VNs

Well, wasn't expecting this thread to get more responses o: Thanks for all your recommendations! C 14 sounds interesting, what with the blurred lines between chronic illness and disability. Also, I'll admit I hadn't quite thought of Geralt's condition in The Witcher that way, but then my exposure to...
by arisan
Tue Jul 18, 2017 9:34 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Critique pls
Replies: 6
Views: 1101

Re: Critique pls

Overall, I think the script needs refining in terms of the voice and characterization. It hints at a contrast between Rowan's archetypal chivalry and Mirabel and Clarisse's genre-savviness. Making those differences starker would potentially yield better, more consistent humor/irony and also make eac...
by arisan
Sun Jul 16, 2017 8:56 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Transitioning from novel writing to vn writing?
Replies: 7
Views: 1926

Re: Transitioning from novel writing to vn writing?

I'm currently making the rather jarring transition from traditional prose to writing a script for a mobile VN. I've only managed to get through a few scenes that I'd call close to satisfactory, but what I find works for me, in fact, is trying to use standards of poetry (though this might be because ...
by arisan
Tue May 02, 2017 10:22 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Western vs. Eastern Storytelling
Replies: 10
Views: 6842

Re: Western vs. Eastern Storytelling

To add to what's already been said, it's worth considering that beyond "Eastern" and "Western" (terms broad enough to be of questionable merit) storytelling, you also have to consider paradigms or frameworks of criticism or, speaking more broadly, reading. Taking Kuiper's respons...
by arisan
Wed Mar 29, 2017 2:59 am
Forum: Other Story-based Games
Topic: Disability and Chronic Illness in VNs
Replies: 15
Views: 6731

Re: Disability and Chronic Illness in VNs

Well, looks like I have my work cut out for me sorting through these o: Thanks for the recommendations~ Tare you only focusing on the narration from the patient (i.e the firsthand experience of the illness/disability), or do you also write about the people who supports the patient? In the case of Ka...
by arisan
Tue Mar 28, 2017 6:55 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: How to write a VN based off Mythology/Folklore/Fairytale?
Replies: 9
Views: 1647

Re: How to write a VN based off Mythology/Folklore/Fairytale

... is based on the story of the Moon Princess Kaguya. But this story is to take place in basically modern day and it revolves around Princess Kaguya's descendant who is trying to reveal the truth behind a hidden piece of the story that no one really knows...? I'd like to clarify what you mean, the...
by arisan
Tue Mar 28, 2017 6:42 pm
Forum: Other Story-based Games
Topic: Disability and Chronic Illness in VNs
Replies: 15
Views: 6731

Re: Disability and Chronic Illness in VNs

Thanks for that quite extensive answer!
indoneko wrote:Is this limited to medically acknowledged physical illness only? [/size]
Right, that was a bit vague. My scope is limited to physical disability and illness, but not necessarily diagnosed medically.
by arisan
Tue Mar 28, 2017 10:41 am
Forum: Other Story-based Games
Topic: Disability and Chronic Illness in VNs
Replies: 15
Views: 6731

Disability and Chronic Illness in VNs

Hey there, I've recently been working on an essay (the academic sort) that has to do with disability narratives and visual novels. One (potential) obstacle to developing it further is a lack of primary texts. Now, this started, quite predictably with Katawa Shoujo, and I'd like to know: are there ot...