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by Widdershins
Tue Jan 08, 2019 2:07 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Need Advice on Developing this Character I'm Making
Replies: 6
Views: 596

Re: Need Advice on Developing this Character I'm Making

What an interesting concept! I definitely read your concern, though. In addition to extra care around the character's change as a whole, it's worth noting the shift to female , specifically, can carry loaded connotations as well. I've some (hopefully helpful!) ideas, but I'll add the caveat that I'm...
by Widdershins
Fri Dec 14, 2018 4:56 pm
Forum: Works in Progress
Topic: Ocean Pearls [GxB] [Fantasy, Romance] Hiatus
Replies: 39
Views: 9180

Re: Ocean Pearls [GxB] [Fantasy, Romance] [Commercial]

Oh, wow-- both look terrific! Now I really can't wait to see further art reveals. :D It's great there is already such distinct visual variety, prior to colors being added in; the characters are incredibly expressive, too, giving a strong sense of each personality. Well done, you and artist both! It ...
by Widdershins
Sat Dec 08, 2018 2:28 am
Forum: Works in Progress
Topic: Ocean Pearls [GxB] [Fantasy, Romance] Hiatus
Replies: 39
Views: 9180

Re: Ocean Pearls [GxB] [Fantasy, Romance] [Commercial]

This sounds terrific! As a fan of both snark and eccentricity, my vote would be for either Isven or "Indi", but it sounds like an engaging cast overall. Looking forward to seeing this develop!
by Widdershins
Thu Sep 20, 2018 7:05 pm
Forum: I am an Artist
Topic: Character Artist {OPEN}
Replies: 14
Views: 4134

Re: Character Artist {OPEN}

I commissioned Remnantation for character sketches and line art, and cannot recommend her enough! Her work is consistently high quality, and almost preternaturally fast; her communication is responsive, knowledgeable, and accommodating. She handles tricky postures and nuanced expressions with aplomb...
by Widdershins
Thu Jul 19, 2018 11:52 pm
Forum: Completed Games
Topic: Because We're Here - Act II is Out Now! [GxB] [War] [History-ish] [Steam] [Commercial]
Replies: 13
Views: 4168

Re: Because We're Here - Act I [GxB] [War] [History-ish] [Steam] [Commercial]

This looks terrific! Like the posters above, I prefer to wait for a whole story rather than play episodes as they release, but I'll definitely be following. Congrats on release!
by Widdershins
Wed Jul 11, 2018 12:45 pm
Forum: Completed Games
Topic: Cardinal Cross [sci-fi][STEAM][Commercial]
Replies: 14
Views: 3701

Re: Cardinal Cross [sci-fi][STEAM][Commercial]

Yay, I've been looking forward to this since seeing it mentioned on RPS back in April. Premise looks interesting, and the art is terrific-- congrats on full release!
by Widdershins
Tue Jun 26, 2018 2:21 am
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Conflict (creating them, and presenting them in a great way)
Replies: 3
Views: 527

Re: Conflict (creating them, and presenting them in a great way)

I'll second Ezmar's advice. It seems possible the trouble you're running into with the topics you mention-- discrimination and death-- is that they are less conflicts, in and of themselves, than thematic elements. And if you're writing about ideas, it's more challenging to shape together a story ins...
by Widdershins
Sun Jun 24, 2018 5:13 pm
Forum: We are offering Paid Work
Topic: Name My Yuri Game ($20) [closed]
Replies: 18
Views: 1568

Re: Name My Yuri Game ($20)

I feel sure there's some iteration of the saying, To Gild the Lily* that would be appropriate, but I can't seem to parse it myself. Simply Gilding the Lily , perhaps. *for fun, I looked up the phrase's origin. It seems to be rooted in the conflation of a line from Shakespeare's King John: To gild re...
by Widdershins
Sun Jun 24, 2018 4:50 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Writing in 2nd Person?
Replies: 13
Views: 1398

Re: Writing in 2nd Person?

For me, it easily feels too personal and like the story is telling "me" what to do: "You find him very interesting and handsome." — What if I, as the reader, don't ? I think you nail the main problem with using second person here: even without intending to, it frequently reads as dictatorial (relat...
by Widdershins
Sat May 26, 2018 5:00 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: How to make a socially awkward character...interesting??
Replies: 13
Views: 1695

Re: How to make a socially awkward character...interesting??

To add to the excellent advice above (Draziya's quote from Night in the Woods-- He is my corner -- is a particularly apt description of a healthy relationship for a shy personality!), I'd recommend you first sort out how his social anxiety can be characterized. You specify the character doesn't disl...
by Widdershins
Thu Apr 19, 2018 4:47 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Fictional Real-World Locations
Replies: 9
Views: 1198

Re: Fictional Real-World Locations

Tagging along with much that's been said: What I'd suggest is to cut to the bone of why you're basing it in Washington: what aspect of the Washington coast feeds your narrative? What does your setting require, in a practical sense? Is there an actual beach you can walk on? Does it involve the busy s...
by Widdershins
Tue Apr 17, 2018 9:10 pm
Forum: Completed Games
Topic: The Rose of Segunda [GxB] [GxG] [Fantasy] [Commercial]
Replies: 17
Views: 6695

Re: The Rose of Segunda [GxB] [GxG] [Fantasy] [Commercial]

Thank you so much for creating such a delightful, well made game! The length is just perfect, and you did a wonderful job giving each character a distinct, clear voice and personality-- I could 'hear' each of them speak with ease as I read. It's also deeply refreshing to play a main character as int...
by Widdershins
Sat Apr 14, 2018 11:22 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Feedback on Space Adventure VN
Replies: 8
Views: 768

Re: Feedback on Space Adventure VN

First of all, I very much enjoy the world you've created! Drawing a parallel between outer space in the prologue, and then an oceanic settlement in the first chapter, is a delightful, unusual choice, and immediately sparked my curiosity about the world your story takes place in. Using two settings c...
by Widdershins
Mon Apr 02, 2018 1:46 am
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Making Stories and Characters Vibrant and Fun?
Replies: 14
Views: 1636

Re: Making Stories and Characters Vibrant and Fun?

I've found studying the mechanics of the stories I like (as well as stories I don't!) is certainly beneficial, both with games and in other mediums, too! I've a couple additional thoughts culled from my own experiences with writing-- hopefully they might help you out, as well. First and foremost, I'...
by Widdershins
Tue Mar 13, 2018 2:46 pm
Forum: WiP: NaNoRenO
Topic: Mistakes Were Made [NaNo18][Modern Slice Of Life][Visual novel][Romance]
Replies: 22
Views: 5077

Re: Mistakes Were Made [NaNo18][Modern Slice Of Life][Visual novel][Romance]

Really digging your style, and intrigued by your characters! Best of luck to you!