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I'm glad that you like this one so much more! And yeah, it definitely still needs some more work, but overall it's a vast improvement. Thanks for your kind words!

I think that your concept is good, but your synopsis may benefit a bit from thinking about what tone your novel would have. Sort of like Mutive said, finding a way to incorporate the MC's personality may help the reader know what they're in for (you tell us that she's fiery, but it's always good to...

I didn't do a great job of explaining her premonition, but basically what I was going for is that from her perspective all she saw was a vague vision of a girl at the edge of a volcano, so it looked like she was going to fall or jump in.

Thanks for the input, I'll change it up and see what I like!

I love to write and have written short stories before, and I've been told that I have the potential to be a great author, but I just haven't found the drive necessary to create an entire story until now. I hadn't read visual novels before, but recently I started getting into them and I've absolutely...