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by Applegate
Wed Jan 08, 2020 1:49 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Feedback Needed for Game Demo Script (5 pages)
Replies: 2
Views: 492

Re: Feedback Needed for Game Demo Script (5 pages)

On a quick read-through, dialogue reads rather stilted. For example, Didn't you hear? The king is raising the tax again. My family will barely make it through the winter. Even though the man's saying something that makes him find solace at the bottom of a bottle, he's saying it in such a way that it...
by Applegate
Thu Dec 19, 2019 10:30 am
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: How do you write "complex" characters?
Replies: 7
Views: 1842

Re: How do you write "complex" characters?

I feel like the complexity of a given character relies, in part, on the situations surrounding it. But to keep a long story short, I believe complexity is achieved when a character's desire and person are opposed. A boy who hates his dad, and wants his dad to be proud of him. A man who wants to put ...
by Applegate
Sat Oct 05, 2019 12:31 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Handling ace representation in a story that includes sex scenes
Replies: 5
Views: 1721

Re: Handling ace representation in a story that includes sex scenes

My personal recommendation is to avoid using any label. Someone mentioned earlier that labels raise specific expectations which can be disappointed, so if you avoid a label, you don't raise expectations. World of difference between introducing a character as "One day, Jack tells his girlfriend of fo...
by Applegate
Wed Oct 31, 2018 9:37 am
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Prompt Request [Closed]
Replies: 13
Views: 772

Re: Prompt Request for a Community-Driven Visual Novel!

I think this thread is a good exercise in prompting, though I think establishing a good "prompt" would be helpful. In the circles I hang around in, we usually prefer prompts to be vague enough to leave stuff to imagination but specific enough to give handles. Something like, "You're home alone when ...
by Applegate
Tue Oct 30, 2018 12:02 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Prompt Request [Closed]
Replies: 13
Views: 772

Re: Prompt Request for a Community-Driven Visual Novel!

On Valentine's Day, Henry received an anonymous letter asking him out. He hoped for that cute girl from the other class, he got the guy he can't stand.
by Applegate
Thu Sep 13, 2018 8:40 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Enjoy Yourself Read - Destined: Final Script
Replies: 4
Views: 1392

Re: Enjoy Yourself Read - Destined: Final Script

Hey Applegate, Thanks for the in-depth reply. I actually really like those edit examples. I think you're the 2nd person to mention the "tabula rasa" of the MC. Do you feel the MCs thoughts after each scene aren't enough to express his character or should it be bolder throughout the dialogue too? Th...
by Applegate
Sun Sep 09, 2018 7:43 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Enjoy Yourself Read - Destined: Final Script
Replies: 4
Views: 1392

Re: Enjoy Yourself Read - Destined: Final Script

All right, I'll bite. I went back a bit to skim through your previous two scripts, only read this one in full. Lysandra's character feels rather clichéd: a paralysed gymnast who is cheerful, determined to get back into the game and doesn't want to rely on others unless needed isn't a novel concept. ...
by Applegate
Wed Sep 05, 2018 6:45 pm
Forum: Asset Creation: Writing
Topic: Script feedback, please?
Replies: 5
Views: 990

Re: Script feedback, please?

she comes across as too detached and aloof Hello, and welcome to Lemmasoft. I quoted this line in particular as it touches on the feedback I'd give on this piece. However, let's start on a positive note, because there is much to be positive about in the script. The script has a clear direction and ...
by Applegate
Wed Mar 11, 2015 6:09 am
Forum: General Discussion
Topic: Get that thing off your chest... Now...
Replies: 5253
Views: 394065

Re: Get that thing off your chest... Now...

I can't spend more than a few hours in the company of others before wanting to retreat to my room. This is actually quite funny. Many people who I talk to say I'm a pretty outgoing person, because I laugh a lot (funny how that works) and I'm rather talkative. I'm also the sort who'd chat you up ran...
by Applegate
Wed Mar 11, 2015 5:06 am
Forum: General Discussion
Topic: Get that thing off your chest... Now...
Replies: 5253
Views: 394065

Re: Get that thing off your chest... Now...

papillon wrote:Is it bad that my approach to bad people skills has been to find a career where I can hole up in my bedroom with a computer and never have to talk to anyone? :)
It's terrible, you should be ashamed of yourself. :lol:
by Applegate
Tue Mar 10, 2015 8:26 pm
Forum: General Discussion
Topic: Get that thing off your chest... Now...
Replies: 5253
Views: 394065

Re: Get that thing off your chest... Now...

I have a feeling I've lost a few job opportunities because I don't seem to be someone that prospective employers like enough. (It's not as if I behave poorly during interviews, etc.) I don't know what they think is wrong with me, but I'm neither a bad person nor whatever it is that apparently makes...
by Applegate
Mon Mar 09, 2015 6:27 pm
Forum: General Discussion
Topic: Get that thing off your chest... Now...
Replies: 5253
Views: 394065

Re: Get that thing off your chest... Now...

It's kind of amusing how Disney classics turned from loveable classics any kid growing up should see to demonic films furthering the patriarchal system and oppressing women.
by Applegate
Mon Feb 23, 2015 5:56 pm
Forum: Creator Discussion
Topic: Why can't I finish my game?
Replies: 26
Views: 2545

Re: Why can't I finish my game?

Unfortunately this is not always the case. Isn't that more of an issue of hiring the wrong people then, rather than saying it's the hiring party's job to motivate the freelancers/employees to earn their pay? It's kind of absurd to ask someone for pay for your work, and you need them to motivate you...
by Applegate
Mon Feb 23, 2015 4:11 pm
Forum: Creator Discussion
Topic: Why can't I finish my game?
Replies: 26
Views: 2545

Re: Why can't I finish my game?

I'd hazard that if someone's getting paid, it's really part of their job description to be motivated to earn their pay.
by Applegate
Sat Feb 21, 2015 3:20 am
Forum: Ideas
Topic: [BxG] Marry, F*ck, Kill [Drama, Dark, Pyschological Horror]
Replies: 52
Views: 5194

Re: [BxG] Marry, F*ck, Kill [Drama, Dark, Pyschological Horr

I really don't think him knowing the crazy situation and keeping it a secret is a "power fantasy". It's easy to ask somebody to have sex. It's easy to try to have a girl who likes you start a relationship and fall in love. Neither of those are inherently "power fantasies" here. I think what is mean...