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by Writer16
Thu Jul 02, 2015 10:30 pm
Forum: Works in Progress
Topic: No Longer Relevant
Replies: 7
Views: 1376

Re: Of Bloody Roses and Witches (Romance/Slight Fantasy/Free

Celestial_Toast Maybe consider splitting your paragraphs into smaller pieces? That might make it easier to read as well, if we aren't trying to digest large paragraphs at once. Also, I forgot to mention there are a few grammatical errors and such, but I'm assuming you're going to be proofreading af...
by Writer16
Thu Jul 02, 2015 8:46 pm
Forum: Works in Progress
Topic: No Longer Relevant
Replies: 7
Views: 1376

Re: Of Bloody Roses and Witches (Romance/Slight Fantasy/Free

Hey there. So, I just looked at the demo, and here's what I thought. 1. The story seems interesting and Gemma seems like an interesting character. 2. The textbox you've chosen makes the text hard and a bit painful to read, at least for me. Too many colors. Also, consider making the font a bit bigge...
by Writer16
Thu Jul 02, 2015 6:41 pm
Forum: Works in Progress
Topic: No Longer Relevant
Replies: 7
Views: 1376

Re: Of Bloody Roses and Witches (Romance/Slight Fantasy/Free

Decided to do a little demo. I don't know if I want to post this in Demo and Beta's Testing since this is short, as it is going to be a short game. Try it here: http://cloudnovel.net/play?n=ca37fff8849 I'll program Land of Mist in Ren'py. Thoughts? Music choices okay? Backgrounds good? Writing okay?...
by Writer16
Wed Jul 01, 2015 10:11 pm
Forum: Works in Progress
Topic: No Longer Relevant
Replies: 7
Views: 1376

No Longer Relevant

Discontinued.
by Writer16
Wed Jul 01, 2015 9:30 pm
Forum: Completed Games
Topic: Circus of Soaring Dreams[GxB][Romance][ILUJam2015]
Replies: 6
Views: 9293

Re: Circus of Soaring Dreams[GxB][Romance][ILUJam2015]

Finished it. Got all of the routes. The writing: it's like most VN that I've played. I like the simplistic writing, but I do believe, you could have spice it up someway. Ignore this if I'm speaking as someone who writes stories, and not screenplay. The art: absolutely beautiful. I love the CGs'; the...
by Writer16
Wed Jul 01, 2015 8:15 pm
Forum: Completed Games
Topic: Circus of Soaring Dreams[GxB][Romance][ILUJam2015]
Replies: 6
Views: 9293

Re: Circus of Soaring Dreams[GxB][Romance][ILUJam2015]

Ooh, I'll give this a try, and give my feedback ASAP. Congrats on finishing it!
by Writer16
Tue Jun 30, 2015 7:47 pm
Forum: Works in Progress
Topic: Discontinued.
Replies: 6
Views: 2464

Re: Land of Mist (GXB/Fantasy/Romance/Free/Otome Kind of?)

So, I joined Cloudnovel, and it's an easy way to do stuffs. I've no art except for the images posted, so I used silhouettes to add some stuff in. So screenshots from me, and a glimpse on how this is written, and the background. Screen Shot 2015-06-30 at 7.38.32 PM.png Screen Shot 2015-06-30 at 7.38....
by Writer16
Sun Jun 28, 2015 9:59 pm
Forum: Works in Progress
Topic: Circus of Soaring Dreams[GXB][Complete][Romance][ILUjam2015]
Replies: 26
Views: 6242

Re: Circus of Soaring Dreams [GXB][WiP][Romance][ILUjam2015]

The progress you've made is great! I'm very interesting in this.
by Writer16
Thu Jun 25, 2015 3:36 pm
Forum: Works in Progress
Topic: Discontinued.
Replies: 6
Views: 2464

Re: Land of Mist (GXB/Fantasy/Romance/Free/Otome Kind of?)

Finished the first chapter -- actually finished it a couple of weeks ago. For the most part, I already mostly tweaked and edited it, so there will probably be some minor errors when I recheck it. This is for Castiel's route. I haven't really started Arch's route, which is sort of weird, considering ...
by Writer16
Thu Jun 18, 2015 8:38 pm
Forum: Works in Progress
Topic: Discontinued.
Replies: 6
Views: 2464

Re: Land of Mist (GXB/Fantasy/Romance/Free/Otome Kind of?)

So I was trying to figure out how to place the text. I wanted it to be in fullscreen, but I didn't do the coding right or something, because it kept failing. I'll practice that, but right now, I'm just working on the script. Also, I haven't chosen the font or color yet. Screen Shot 2015-06-18 at 8.1...
by Writer16
Tue Jun 16, 2015 7:20 pm
Forum: Works in Progress
Topic: Circus of Soaring Dreams[GXB][Complete][Romance][ILUjam2015]
Replies: 26
Views: 6242

Re: Circus of Soaring Dreams [GXB][WiP][Romance][ILUjam2015]

Great to see some progress. Glad that one route is finished already. I wish you the best of luck!

-- Allison Diamond
by Writer16
Tue Jun 16, 2015 7:18 pm
Forum: Works in Progress
Topic: Discontinued.
Replies: 6
Views: 2464

Re: Land of Mist (GXB/Fantasy/Romance/Free/Otome Kind of?)

fleet wrote:Stories with vampires usually do well. I wish you success.
Thanks for your kind words. I really appreciate it, but it has to do with angels too.

-- Allison Diamond
by Writer16
Tue Jun 16, 2015 12:30 am
Forum: Works in Progress
Topic: Discontinued.
Replies: 6
Views: 2464

Discontinued.

Discontinued.
by Writer16
Thu Jun 11, 2015 7:15 am
Forum: Works in Progress
Topic: Circus of Soaring Dreams[GXB][Complete][Romance][ILUjam2015]
Replies: 26
Views: 6242

Re: Circus of Soaring Dreams [GXB][WiP][Romance][ILUjam2015]

I like the CGs'; they are cute! Great to see some progress on this! I don't know a lot about these characters yet, but I'm looking forward to see how unquie they are. :)

- Allison Diamond
by Writer16
Sat Jun 06, 2015 5:05 pm
Forum: Ideas
Topic: Land of Mist (GXB/Fantasy/Romance/Free/Otome Kind of?)
Replies: 5
Views: 4240

Re: Land of Mist (GXB/Fantasy/Romance/Free/Otome Kind of?)

I like the idea! The plot is good; I feel like this would be more popular if the artwork was digital art instead of pictures of real people, but of course it's just an opinion! Good luck in getting your artist! Oh, you could get some character art from the Creator's Common section if you want! All ...