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I'd scrap the "with a complete change of attitude" line; it's something the reader can infer, likely. I like what I see so far, and it seems you approach the subject matter seriously. I'd like to advise against setting an arbitrary wordcount goal, however. You should write the story as long as it ne...

I love your style, charmwitch.

It all depends on your target group. Who is your target audience?

I think that what you have written is not, by definition, "bad". I have not read the feedback of others and, as a result, my feedback may conflict or repeat what others have said. Please use your own judgment in determining whether the following is useful to you. I will highlight a short snip from y...

I think the problem with WIP threads is that, at some point in time, you will want to finish your project not because you like it, but because you feel obligated to do so. Personally, I would rather not make a WIP thread unless I have come to a point that its release is no longer a question of "if",...

I ran into an error. I botched up the first two (because I'm a rebel), and then the game crashed declaring that NameError: name 'yu_uto4' is not defined.

That'd be interesting. It's a little disheartening to be unsure about your work and see a lot of people going "it looks great!" even though you're still saddled with the feelings of insecurity because you disagree, or don't know what's so great - until someone strolls in from elsewhere and says it s...

I like the picture with the kitty ice vendor. I love brightly smiling faces.

Hi. I wanted to call attention to this screenshot: http://i303.photobucket.com/albums/nn151/soymilkpudding/misc/screen02b.jpg The dialogue says "a guy who looks like he's in college". Disregarding the gender ambiguity I don't think his outfit is particularly college-like. Is there a specific trait t...

Hello! Haha, thanks a lot for your comments! I was beginning to feel a little bloated, so hearing the story was pretty generic does me good. The version that doesn't list my name is the version someone mischievously posted on 4chan - it is an old and outdated version, and the current one in the firs...

I feel that, for the Japanese, if you write with hopes to release there it may be more interesting to read about western culture, and to have different conventions from their tropes. After all, different cultures are more interesting than your own, often. Ha ha! For myself, I could never write in a ...

Hi. eh, just yesterday I have finally readed it I'm glad you enjoyed it! on the speed, or lack of, of the text, I have a bit suffered for it This has been an issue for me for a while now; I have considered doubling the text speed from 30 characters per second to 60 to ameliorate the issue. It makes ...

I think a valuable thing to keep in mind is this, regardless of how you will go about it. Although keep in mind that my knowledge on Visual Novels is extremely limited. "Why is the girl inapproachable?" Reading your initial story, you proposed that she was the daughter of a yakuza. It seems to be a ...

Hi. I believe DrakeNavarone's comments included the suggestion of a ctc indicator to ameliorate the situation. I have included one such a marker, and although there is no commentary regarding it I believe it clearly indicates when you should click to advance the story. Clicking at any point in time ...

Hi. I was interested in this title, but a little put off by the many comments about text speed, so I figured I'd wait until it got fixed and then read it. Please consider another story if you dislike slow stories. I have tried long and hard to think of a way to phrase this nicely, but I feel it is d...