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by fortaat
Tue Jul 06, 2010 5:28 pm
Forum: Old Threads (– September 2014)
Topic: NEED ARTISTS & WRITERS (Music Romance VN)
Replies: 67
Views: 5427

Re: Music Romance VN Ideas/Sketches/Story/Anything?

like the great gatsby kind of books? o_O any recommendation would be good Exactly like The Great Gatsby - only not this one in particular, I found it quite dull. I need to know what you like, so I'll know what to recommend. However, you could try either of these two short books, both around 100 pag...
by fortaat
Tue Jul 06, 2010 4:44 pm
Forum: Old Threads (– September 2014)
Topic: NEED ARTISTS & WRITERS (Music Romance VN)
Replies: 67
Views: 5427

Re: Music Romance VN Ideas/Sketches/Story/Anything?

Once again, the neck on the right sketch is too thin. If you'll try to draw her naked, you'll see it's impossible - almost a third of her neck is missing.

I removed some of your lines from the left one, to make my point clear.
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by fortaat
Tue Jul 06, 2010 8:00 am
Forum: Old Threads (– September 2014)
Topic: NEED ARTISTS & WRITERS (Music Romance VN)
Replies: 67
Views: 5427

Re: Music Romance VN Ideas?

Me too. It's very hard to make an idea for short VN. How could you think something up like that? Any tip? Read books. Not fluffy sci-fi or light novels - real books. Otherwise, ask the community, that's why we're here. @ terrydy All your drawing have a flaw with the neck - it's too long. http://i77...
by fortaat
Mon Jul 05, 2010 9:43 pm
Forum: Old Threads (– September 2014)
Topic: NEED ARTISTS & WRITERS (Music Romance VN)
Replies: 67
Views: 5427

Re: Music Romance VN Ideas?

I see you're still in the vague idea stage - so allow me to offer one of my own: Mr. Jazz plays on the corner of the street for some years now, earning just enough to live. he's thirty something, never shaved, and reeks of vodka. But he has a rugged voice, and a charming personalty, attracting MC pr...
by fortaat
Mon Jul 05, 2010 4:17 pm
Forum: Creator Discussion
Topic: another easy question I think
Replies: 5
Views: 560

Re: another easy question I think

Save the game at said scene and load next time you want to check it.
by fortaat
Sat Jul 03, 2010 8:32 am
Forum: General Discussion
Topic: A question for RPG lovers: plot or combat?
Replies: 56
Views: 4051

Re: A question for RPG lovers: plot or combat?

I suspect 99% of RPGs are in a fantasy setting just through a combination of tradition and swords being easier to write battle systems for than guns and magic being more generally accepted than any Sci-Fi excuse for flashy alternative skills. Really? I thought guns are a much easier option. Animati...
by fortaat
Wed Jun 30, 2010 8:32 pm
Forum: General Discussion
Topic: Work in Progress Rules Change?
Replies: 64
Views: 4182

Re: Work in Progress Rules Change?

allow me to summarize: problem: too many premature threads in WIP, coupled by a flood of pointless positive one-liners (aka circle-jerk). solutions: 1. close the old board and/or replace with a new one (original post by pythom. the new one can also be a recruiting board. Ren also suggested a variati...
by fortaat
Thu May 27, 2010 7:09 pm
Forum: Completed Games
Topic: Alone (First VN release!)
Replies: 19
Views: 10163

Re: Alone (First VN release!)

very nice for a first VN. I assume you're over 18, and have past experiences with people criticizing your writing. If I'm wrong, just ignore me: * you have spelling mistakes, some of which could found by Word ("cew"). This insults me as a player and a reviewer. * weird sentences: "we all wanted to j...
by fortaat
Fri May 21, 2010 2:32 pm
Forum: Old Threads (– September 2014)
Topic: [WIP] Recruiting for VN game "Never Once"
Replies: 15
Views: 1637

Re: [WIP] Recruiting for VN game "Never Once"

... yeah, i guess you're right:
10 years pass and the people of Kyrina have become use to the abuse they face from their communist ruler. Famine, murder, and rape have been a part of daily life for the average citizen living in Kyrina as the Romanian army and military police rule with an iron fist.
by fortaat
Fri May 21, 2010 8:03 am
Forum: Old Threads (– September 2014)
Topic: [WIP] Recruiting for VN game "Never Once"
Replies: 15
Views: 1637

Re: [WIP] Recruiting for VN game "Never Once"

If you're fictionalizing the history of the Romania, then why not just set it in an alternative universe all together? It's a lot easier and more engaging to write the story that way, since the player's political preconceptions don't interfere with the story that you're trying to tell as much. it's...
by fortaat
Tue May 18, 2010 2:58 pm
Forum: Old Threads (– September 2014)
Topic: [WIP] Recruiting for VN game "Never Once"
Replies: 15
Views: 1637

Re: [WIP] Recruiting for VN game "Never Once"

1. "I've never been to Romania as said, but I think plenty of VN writers have never been to the places their games take place in (ie; so many take place in Japan, but I doubt many VN writers have actually been)" Which is why many of them look less like novels, and more like silly weebo games. though...
by fortaat
Tue May 18, 2010 1:52 pm
Forum: Old Threads (– September 2014)
Topic: [WIP] Recruiting for VN game "Never Once"
Replies: 15
Views: 1637

Re: [WIP] Recruiting for VN game "Never Once"

keep in mind you said "Questions or comments are welcome", as some of my questions might sound offensive: 1. you said on another thread you never been to Romania. I find the historical background the strongest selling point ( it's unique compared to other VNs). what do you know about that background...