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It's been two years since my first change. In this small span of time I've experienced more excitement than can be found in a lifetime, but I've also uncovered hidden secrets and terrible truths. A flickering light isn't the sign of an electrical failure. Creaking in an old house is due to somethin...

Too banal. "Creaking in an old house is never good news." It lacks all the gravity and drama of the rest of the writing. Way too casual. It makes it sound like your narrator is just chatting with buddies, not starting a story about the dark things of the world. Good point. Hmm... I guess ...

So, as we all know, there are different genres a story can fall under and each one wants a different pacing, writing style, kind of narration, hell, even punctuation. I thought it would be a good idea to make a general topic where to share tips. This topic's genre of choosing: Horror. I must say tha...

It's been two years since my first change. In this small span of time I've experienced more excitement than can be found in a lifetime but I've also uncovered hidden secrets, terrible truths. A flickering light isn't the sign of an electrical failure. Creaking in an old house is due to something wi...

"Others have made me wary of people with poor dental." You SHOULD be uncertain about this bit. It makes no sense. "Dental" is an adjective, not a noun. Not only that, but this sentence doesn't seem to fit with the sentence before or after it. It is a separate thought, and separa...

What Cyanide said. Also, Old Man Voice is a bit strange to read. Just leave it as 'Old Man'. If it's dialogue, the reader will understand on its own that it's a voice.

This kind of thing becomes an issue of gut instincts and practice and is hard or impossible to teach. You've just got to be able to recognize what works and what doesn't and what sounds best. Hmm... Got it. Ok, here's the whole paragraph. It acts as a small introduction, basically. To catch the rea...

A general word of writing advice - avoid the word 'that' when at all possible. Rewriting a sentence to avoid using the word almost always makes for a better sentence. Werewolf protagonist? A minute, writing that down... Hey, that passed through? Good. :D Yeah. I'm writing something based on the NWo...

A general word of writing advice - avoid the word 'that' when at all possible. Rewriting a sentence to avoid using the word almost always makes for a better sentence. Werewolf protagonist? A minute, writing that down... Hey, that passed through? Good. :D Yeah. I'm writing something based on the NWo...

So, I thought I'd follow the example and let the you guys in the forums foam at the mouth at the writing skills of yours truly. :P This first one is a small piece where I'd really like some critique since I don't know if the way I wrote conveyed successfully what I wanted it to convey. The crackling...

Aaaafter a good night of sleep I come back with more golden wisdom delivered upon us unbelievers. That is good, he came and said. :D So many things to learn... Hey! I propose an exercise! Let's make it like this. Each one presents a series of five words that the next poster will have to make a brief...

Mentions Starship Troopers, Lolita, True Love and a headache ... I think we mostly have the same tastes in literature and VN. Did you see the movie? Loved Peter Sellers in Lolita. :D Loved your examples on Narrators. Although, it's hard to find good narrations in movies. They're usually relegated t...

Great Post Really appreciated your post full of movie-given examples and your grandma's wisdom. What about literary examples? Got any? In my humble opinion, the author that really got this the best (also the author of my favourite book) was Oscar Wilde. His writing style in The Portrait of Dorian G...

Browsing through the topics, I noticed people having diverging opinions on writing style, use of long lists of adjectives and so on. What I would like to have an opinion on is, how much writing is too much for you? Visual Novels have their strength in good writing but I think that a good writer shou...

I think there needs to be more than romance and/or smut in Visual Novels. Sometimes the best parts are overlooked to make space for that in case of a fixed game length. The blatant example is the latest VN I've played, Princess Waltz. The best parts of that Eroge were the fighting scenes but they we...