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Hello! I have an unconventional request. I'm looking for an artist who likes to draw objects . Stuff like books, clothes, pots, instruments, machines, etc. The project is a sci-fi/fantasy story about a teenage boy and girl who go to explore some ruins together. The girl is lively and creative while ...

http://i1191.photobucket.com/albums/z464/arachni42/passage_logo1_2.png A demo is up Story Turner and Lun live in a small, ordinary village in a fantasy-like setting. They are childhood acquaintances who were never close, but lately Lun's been pestering Turner to go with her to explore some ancestra...

Hey Nay, thanks for your feedback! I'll check out that book sometime. I'm glad the endings sound solid; I've tried to give them extra attention. Now I just need to make sure the middle turns out okay. ;p It does seem like worldbuilding could be a bottomless pit. I'll take your advice and focus on th...

This is a cool idea, I'd definitely read this VN if you made it. Rgarding your 'dead end,' if it doesn't add anything to the story, I would say don't include it. There are a lot of people who see no point to endings like that, especially when it's pretty predictable that a certain choice will lead ...

That is some very cute artwork! So adorbs. I like the idea of the world, too; it seems compelling so far. I don't know the plot of AA either, but being influenced by things isn't bad as long as you do it your own way. My personal approach at this stage is to brainstorm a lot of possible ideas about ...

I think it could work, for sure. Telling the same story from multiple perspectives is a really great convention, in my opinion. I like your characters, especially the security guard. What seemed interesting about her to you? I know it's a lot to ask with this little information, but any and all opi...

I've been hashing out an idea recently and would be interested in any thoughts, questions, or critique. The working title is The Passage of Ingenuity. I'm planning to do this for NaNoRenO. This is the summary (endings included): The characters are Turner, a 15-year-old boy (the player), and Lun, a 1...

This brings up an interesting point, because eventually along the story I want to demonstrate androids interacting with each other. In what I've written so far, their interactions are only indirectly implied. If an android has been fitted to look human how should an android recognize fellow android...

Sorry for the confusion! The script is halfway along at 19k words, but the passage in the link only the first 7k words of it. I didn't want to link the whole thing for reasons. Ahh, yup, that makes more sense! The idea of "creativity" is the source of the concept behind the "Derringe...

I think your idea has potential. It's a good sign you're paying attention to possible pitfalls in dealing with the subject. I think the greatest difficulty is in keeping it interesting, as it's a popular subject these days. I skimmed your script and did some have thoughts. First, this feels like les...

Essentially it's a story that's mostly just the conversations between these two characters and learning about the fantasy world and the characters. I'm worried that hanging the entire VN on a single character and people liking them is a bad idea. This is a character I've been developing a long time...

My problem comes when I'm giving them depth and development. I know how I want them to grow, but the timing (especially in the beginning chapters) feels off. Since this is a visual novel with free time events like Persona or Dangan Ronpa, I would need to introduce a few of the LI's early so that th...

I don't mind some pointless choices for flavor, but it should be some good flavor! If I feel like the dialog could have been in response to either choice I made, it's a fail. I want it to add something, even if it doesn't change the plot.

I enjoyed your game. It definitely followed some classic sci-fi traditions, including world-building, especially after finding out what was really happening. At the end I felt rather lonely... but in a good "that was a cool story" way. Great job creating the mood! :) I also think the art w...

Thanks for the feedback... I'm glad to hear people are enjoying it! It was definitely tricky to balance references with things that would actually make sense to people who hadn't seen those series... I've also gotten feedback that some of the transitions between scenes are a little sudden, so I'll t...