Alright, so I finished reading this. It's a bit odd you've so few reviews, but then I suppose the lack of artwork is off-putting. Personally, I think the visuals used are just right, leaving enough to the reader's imagination.
I like the opening. It has a certain charm to it, which is sometimes hard to find in amateur writing. The basic interactions at the start were good.
I was less fond of the confusing description of the male. First introduced as a boy, that same scene calls him a man later on - when I read boy, I tend to think under 18. When I read man, I assume over; therefore it became difficult for me to picture the person's age.
I was also less fond of the places you had stops at. Sometimes I'd click just to get the addition of "I say" or "he says"; mostly when you read, you gloss over such descriptions and they make little impact. By requiring a seperate click for that line, and nothing else with it, it calls special attention to them, which worked distracting.
All in all, though, I enjoyed reading it. It feels a little unpolished in certain places, and rough around the edges, but it's nice. If you decide to look back at this and change it, I'd recommend adding an intermission scene to make it more clear what happened, and to expand on the relation between the two protagonists.
The declaration of love certainly came out of nowhere.
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