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"I'm the kind of guy that looks at the height of the coaster, reads the coaster's miles per hour speed, thinks "hell no," and says yes because I love spending time with her. Have you ever met someone that you look at and you just want them to be happy forever?" THAT JUST KILLED ME. Oh my gosh, Cole is so cute and I just really loved seeing him freak out over Shannon and his possibly ruined plans.

I went for Noir -> Martial Arts -> Sci-fi.

The index cards were a really nice touch. I did think they were a little blurry and out of focus (if you could just improve on that, it'd be great), but the idea was awesome and I loved being able to pick the story genres. It really felt like I was there in the restaurant watching Cole tell this lame--I mean, awesome--story. XD

Things did start to get a little iffy for me after the second part of the story (after picking Martial Arts) mostly because of Cole/London's "nice guy" complex... Like he felt he had the right to tell Rachel/Shannon who she should date and got all jealous even though he'd just told her that hey should "slow down". Even after Rachel dumped Trevor, London was all "BLARRRR" about what she did because she dumped Trevor but *still wouldn't be with him*. That kind of behavior/attitude from guys just really rubs me the wrong way. D: Rachel's wishy-washy attitude was also a little tiring. Like, I wasn't really sure if she was trying to flirt with London or not... And then all of a sudden she dumped her boyfriend. 0_o She would switch between being all "Trevor is annoying/possessive/etc!" and then "Don't speak badly of him, he was just protecting me!"

But at the same time, I know that the index card story is probably not a 100% accurate representation of how their relationship progressed and that certain concepts were probably simplified so that it would all fit in one story, so I pressed on. XD And my objections are mostly personal and it could just be me that has a problem with how those things progressed. Anyway, seeing how Cole treats Shannon outside of the story is still just a huge awwww sort of thing. I loved his inner monologues about her and about their relationship and the actual proposal was adorable.

Having the NVL mode for the real story was great. The switches between the NVL real life part and the regular index card parts were greatly executed and the very first part of the index card story where Shannon nitpicked about her boobs made me laugh out loud. I also really liked the main menu even if it was a little blurry. The only part of this entire package that I had a problem with, really, was the music. I found it distracting and felt like it only fit the mood some of the time.

But still, I think this is an amazing showing considering that you did everything yourself (and in only a month). Hats off to you! I really enjoyed playing, overall. Best of luck with future works!

"He hadn't felt that way since he wrestled a bionic shark with his bare hands" AHAHAHAAH THAT MADE MY DAY! I've only gotten one play through done so far, but that was absolutely hilarious. The notecards definitely added to the humor. Oh god, the London and Rachel action story had me cracking up(: Good work, I really love this game! "So it's like buying a chose-your-own-adventure book that someone ripped out all of the choices and forces you to stick to one path."

Thanks for your long comment! I'm glad it made you laugh! I see what you mean in regards to London during the 2nd part of the story. I should have kept everything more light-hearted and positive throughout. To me, he comes off as the kind of guy that wants to put on a "good face" for everyone. He doesn't want to come off as anything other than a good guy, which is why he behaves that way. Plus, Cole had to tell his story in a certain way to make himself look better - it's very possible that he exaggerated everything, took out details, and forced others in.

Rachel's behaviors also came off as weird because of the whole storytelling thing. He's either telling it in a way to make her seem better, or maybe even a little worse. Shannon doesn't take the time to contradict him, so it's up to us (the audience) to figure out how much of what he's saying is really true or not. So what I'm saying with these paragraphs are that you're right, it's not totally 100% accurate to what went on. I hope I didn't come off as mad - I'm not.

I don't think I'll ever release a second version of this, but if I did, the music would be changed, and I'd actually scan in the index cards. I had to rely on my cellphone for the index card pictures. The truth has been revealed. XD

The whole thing gave off a "Scott Pilgrim" vibe to me. Probably because of the RRR. A good thing.

Really creative use of your index cards. I loved your art. Clever "reuse" of one of the side characters. Heh.

I didn't really have any criticisms. Seems like the main couple have a thing about defenestration? The only issue I had with the characters is that I kept thinking, "You better leave a big fat tip, Cole!" (I guess I have too many bad memories of the food service industry...I could kind of feel myself wanting to shake him.)