The adventure of Tocino

[KebecMaslow]

This is my first complete game, still in spanish, sorry. I will translate it later:

Windows
http://www.mediafire.com/?f1wv3496w4s2l29

Macintosh
http://www.mediafire.com/?2lcmiw2hjyucdpw

Linux
http://www.mediafire.com/?cvg4zweplcnibj2

Yes, is the same I was asking how to sell, but I decided to use it to promote the next works.


****English version****
I did the best I could, so I hope you enjoy it.

Windows
http://www.mediafire.com/?2cl5z9ntqfu76lm

Macintosh
http://www.mediafire.com/?divl66ec2chhm8n

Linux
http://www.mediafire.com/?h4d1gmupken6r3x

[FatUnicornGames]

It looks cute. I don't know Spanish, but good luck!

[Onomatopoeia]

This story was actually adorable,

even for one with such a sad ending

. I thought the names were cute too (Bacon, Mr Ham and Mrs Mortadella).

I'll admit, though, that the Red Monster freaked me out! I was also pretty upset that Tocino couldn't hear me when I kept yelling at him that those were bones and not rocks.

I especially loved the use of music, you had a great use of Habanera that would have made an otherwise scary scene into a light-hearted one.

[KebecMaslow]

English version added, so there are no more excuses XD

[mugenjohncel]

Despite the simplistic almost MS Paint graphics and pretty much short and straightforward... this is surprisingly good...

Font is kinda awkward and the name "Tocino" kinda gives us a hint to what will happen to him... (YUMMY!)

I needed to to re-read and review this later... but good job on this release...

"POOF" (Disappears)

[Pixel_Linked]

This was cute!

I love the font and the custom GUI. Playing the game was almost like reading a children's book. The lighthearted names and the childish art fit the story perfectly. My speakers are broken so I can't comment on the music. One thing that irked me was that the text was hard to read during the CG events.

The ending caught me by surprise! I should have known what was coming because of the name...

Is this based on a folk-tale? The story itself is very familiar.

[KebecMaslow]

Thank you so much.

Well, the visual novel is actually a children's book, that's the reason behind the paint-like drawings and the font.

Also, the story was totally written by me, if there are similarities with other tales then it's only a coincidence (since the story is very generic and simple), I wrote the story for my little cousins since they like little pigs.

[Sheila Sanchez]

I think it's interesting for children.

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"Some guys are the type of people who bring brass knuckle to a fight. I've always thought it prudent to bring some running shoes."

[KebecMaslow]

Working in other two tales: "The cold band" (a comedy) and "Dimitri and Alb" (drama).

It seems that I will need help to make the art in these two.

[KebecMaslow]

(I hope I can say it there)

I'm going to participate in the Nanowrimo. Wish me luck, please.

[Reikun]

I DL'ed and played this earlier today and it was great! It is a very good children's story Even though the English was not 100% native level, it was good enough to understand everything that was being said with ease.
The first image would have been better if the ground level was above the textbox so that we could see all the animals more clearly.
There were also times when the text was centered on an image and it was hard to read. Having a black outline around the white text would have really helped the readability at those parts.
Other than that, very simple and effective story! Even though the graphics are simple I liked them a lot and I think they served their purpose well. The best part for me was

when the red monster shows up at the entrance of the cave. The red monster was my favorite character too!

Looking forward to your future releases! If you want to share/announce your development progress on your other stories, consider making threads about them in the Works In Progress (don't forget to read the sticky) or Ideas forums so you don't have to "update" this thread about them. I think there's also a NaNoWriMo thread floating around somewhere...

[Alex]

That was cute piggy...))
I like the art style, especially the scene where Bacon running around in circles on the field.

[saguaro]

I love this game. Everything about it... the art, the music, the story, it's all awesome. Like any good cautionary tale, we see the inevitable ending long before the protagonist does. What I enjoyed most was the juxtaposition between cute story/grimdark reality, which is

if you go into a strange cave full of bones you'll be eaten.

It's that same dark quality you find in classic fairy tales.

The only technical suggestion I can offer is some kind of drop shadow or outline on the text when it's printed on-screen outside the normal textbox, because it's hard to read. Basic ATL could really add some polish (thinking of that scene where Bacon in running around).

Anyway, I'm a fan. More, please!

[KebecMaslow]

Thank you so much for your words. This was my first VN so I had some problems and didn't know how to outline the text, but I promise that the next one will be better.

[Nutella_Sandwhich]

I know what tocino means...so the pig...