Can you give any more detail about how it drew you in? What techniques did the writer use to make you curious?AshenhartKrie wrote:The Day I Died
The script was well written, but knowing who was speaking to the MC when it isn't the girl would be helpful. I kinda assumed that it was his mum, but I wasn't sure. I found it interesting and it drew me in. I wanted to know how he/she was going to die, and I liked the ending, even if the MC did get a bit hysterical, IMO.
(Yes, I'm going to be constantly prompting everyone to provide more detail. Don't worry, it's nothing personal. These questions are fun to ask!)
Can you give any examples of how things moved too quickly? That's a hard one to pin down into specifics because it has to do with overall flow, but for the same reason it's a tricky thing to get right and good to talk about.Ariana
Once again, beautifully written (I swear that by the end of this the only feedback I gave would be 'well written' gah!). I loved how Clara and Ariana interacted, although I felt that the romance between the two was rushed, and it kinda didn't feel 'right' for me. If it were to be a proper romantic game, I would feel like it would need longer to get the romance flowing.
How does the author communicate that the world is rigid and controlled?Dhumaketu
I'm not going to say it was well written
even though it was XDBut the way the person who wrote this understood disaster is refreshing. So many people I find these days believe that death and end and change are bad, but the author understood that sometimes changes are needed to bring about something better. I like that about this VN. And the world it's set in, the stiff rigidity of it, almost as if they are controlled.