I did the best I could though. If I had more time, I'd have given it an in-depth going over just to be safe (although I was sure I didn't miss anything).
Sorry for the remaining mistakes, Tiya.
You make it sound like I was being lazy. I had next to no time and everything had to be done while I was already tired (I had a few other obligations at that time, but wanted to keep my mind working). I actually can do a better job, though sometimes I couldn't be sure what the sentence was trying to tell me.Anna wrote: 1. That's right, I just wandering around and.... (grammar)
2. ...unexpectedly come to this place (weird sentence and missing period)
3. How can I forget that moment? (how could)
4. His mind is hard to guess. (weird sentence)
5. I don't know why, I feel so happy when I heard about he is as the same year as me. (many grammar problems here)
6. Maybe because I get new friend from the other faculty, eh? (again grammar)
7. and he is pretty cool guy (grammar, just add "a" between "is" and "pretty")
1: I could have just left out the I.
2: I took the dialogue as more conversational and less formal, but I did miss a period.
3: Yep, I see that.
4: It's not THAT weird. And it's not really an error as "weird sentence" is an OPINION. I had to keep this in context withough changing it too much. Not being able to guess a person's mind can also be said as "I can't/couldn't tell what he's (also was) thinking" but that's almost total sentence rewrite.
5: I spot three at most. "Many" implies it's terrible.
"I don't know why, but I feel so happy when I learn about he is the same age as me." or
"I don't know why, but I feel so happy when I heard about he is in the same year as me." would have been better, I admit.
I'm not going to respond to the other two.
I was certain I sent back the corrected script. However, if you want I can take another crack at it as I now have more time on my hands, and I feel bad enough as it is.