Yandere in 100 Words (creepy romantic short stories)

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Re: Yandere in 100 Words (creepy romantic short stories)

#31 Post by Katta » Sat Aug 31, 2013 11:28 am

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I didn't really like Accident, as there's no feeling in the letter itself, the author loses her boyfriends but all she thinks about is getting a new one. Or am I missing something here?
It's not the Author who's Yandere...
Remember how her 'Friend' was always at the scene when the 'Accident' happen?
Think about it...
Of course, I know that, it's obvious!!! But that doesn't mean she shouldn't have any feelings.
Maybe it was done intentionally for some parody/mocking effect, but it was lost on me then.

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Re: Yandere in 100 Words (creepy romantic short stories)

#32 Post by Amy » Tue Sep 03, 2013 10:42 am

Katta wrote:Thank you so much for the stories, I really enjoyed them, my favourite being Forgive, Spell and Counting. I now so want to add a yandere character to my own project...
I also liked Secret, but the last bit "or I will have to seal your leaps" seems excess, as this part is clear without saying it explicitly, so it only lessens the feeling.
I didn't really like Accident, as there's no feeling in the letter itself, the author loses her boyfriends but all she thinks about is getting a new one. Or am I missing something here?
I think I get the idea of Expressions, but all the minor details like how he organized everything seem to distract.
I liked the beginning of Tainted, though the idea is classic, but then it gets too straightforward with sewing and amputating, I think something more subtle would be more creepy.
^^; The 100-word thing is showing again, isn't it?
Heh, the narrator of Accident is utterly self-absorbed. You know how it is with some people - wanting a boyfriend basically as an accessory, a status symbol... And that was why the addressee has been overlooked as a candidate the entire time. Of course, all this is just my headcanon >.>;; so the product probably doesn't show any signs of it at all. (I've been making stories like this since as early as Bridge, and sometimes it works, but other times it kind of implodes. Whoops.)
Wait, why am I using spoiler tags? =w=
As for the rest, thank you for your comments. I can never seem to keep my quality consistent, so it's useful to know what to keep a closer eye on. (There are the stories on my list that I'm actually embarrassed by, but I won't tell anyone which ones they are ^^;)
...Would anyone believe me if I say that these weren't intended to creep people out?
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Re: Yandere in 100 Words (creepy romantic short stories)

#33 Post by khfan12 » Tue Sep 03, 2013 6:18 pm

Amy wrote:...Would anyone believe me if I say that these weren't intended to creep people out?

*raises hand*
Trust me, I've read creepier things than these.

Oh yeah, I promised a review, didn't I?
Well...I haven't finished reading all of them (I started, then stopped due to work and other personal things) but what I read so far, I liked!
Eh...I'll put a better comment about my favorites and such when I finish reading the entire thing =3=
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Re: Yandere in 100 Words (creepy romantic short stories)

#34 Post by Amy » Mon Sep 09, 2013 10:53 am

khfan12 wrote:*raises hand*
Trust me, I've read creepier things than these.
Good, good. These aren't horror stories, honest! They're just... Yandere.
People keep calling them creepy, though. ^^;
khfan12 wrote:Oh yeah, I promised a review, didn't I?
Well...I haven't finished reading all of them (I started, then stopped due to work and other personal things) but what I read so far, I liked!
Eh...I'll put a better comment about my favorites and such when I finish reading the entire thing =3=
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Re: Yandere in 100 Words (creepy romantic short stories)

#35 Post by Jisei Al » Sun Apr 20, 2014 11:43 am

Awesome stories .. I really enjoyed reading it :D

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Re: Yandere in 100 Words (creepy romantic short stories)

#36 Post by rmt_2011 » Mon Apr 21, 2014 9:14 pm

This was an interesting alternative to what I usually read but I think it was an interesting experiment. You handled this really well - the music suited the stories and the breaks and formatting of text was excellent.

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Re: Yandere in 100 Words (creepy romantic short stories)

#37 Post by trish_vc » Mon Oct 10, 2016 9:38 am

this VN brings back memoriessss <3
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