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PostPosted: Tue Feb 12, 2013 7:54 am 
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Hi guys! This is my first visual novel.
I wish you guys would appreciate it.
Please forgive me that only the story is mine.
I don't own a drawing tablet so, it's really hard to draw.
Please go easy on me.. :(

This game has 6 or 7 ENDINGS.
Sorry, I forgot.. :lol:
This game is short and easy to play.
It's a romance game though. :)

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Characters:
Jun - You. (I shouldn't spoil everything)
Sayako - The young teacher with a tsundere attitude.
Yuu - The very young looking girl.
Miko - Sayako's boyfriend and your classmate/friend.

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PostPosted: Tue Feb 12, 2013 8:11 am 
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This looks nice. The guy reminds me of Natsume Hyuuga. Hahaha. Downloading right now. Shall give an update once I finish playing.

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PostPosted: Tue Feb 12, 2013 8:20 am 
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Thank you, ma'am..


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PostPosted: Tue Feb 12, 2013 8:39 am 
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Friendship Ending!

Haha, It was real quick (as all good first VN's should be) but it was a lot of fun. Will probably play through a couple of the other routes when I have more time. :p

Positive - I liked the easy to read relaxed feel to the writing. Although it was very upfront and to the point, not having to think and remember every little detail made it seem... fun? I guess. Yeah...

BUT YOU CAN'T HAVE AN ENTIRELY POSITIVE CRITIQUE! I always try to give one good and one bad comment.

Negative - The music stopped and started pretty frequently and felt out of place. I feel a smaller amount of music changes and fading the music out (It seemed to just stop and start without any notice) would give the game a more flowing feel.

Awesome first attempt though! :) Look forward to playing through the other routes.

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PostPosted: Tue Feb 12, 2013 8:50 am 
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Kato wrote:
Friendship Ending!

Haha, It was real quick (as all good first VN's should be) but it was a lot of fun. Will probably play through a couple of the other routes when I have more time. :p

Positive - I liked the easy to read relaxed feel to the writing. Although it was very upfront and to the point, not having to think and remember every little detail made it seem... fun? I guess. Yeah...

BUT YOU CAN'T HAVE AN ENTIRELY POSITIVE CRITIQUE! I always try to give one good and one bad comment.

Negative - The music stopped and started pretty frequently and felt out of place. I feel a smaller amount of music changes and fading the music out (It seemed to just stop and start without any notice) would give the game a more flowing feel.

Awesome first attempt though! :) Look forward to playing through the other routes.


Thanks for pointing out those things, sir!
It'll probably help me out in the future. :D


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PostPosted: Tue Feb 12, 2013 8:54 am 
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I don't really like to read visual novel.But,If it's short then I will read them.I want to say that the visual novel is not bad and really fun to play.Good try for your first visual novel.


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PostPosted: Tue Feb 12, 2013 8:54 am 
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Cusko wrote:
I don't really like to read visual novel.But,If it's short then I will read them.I want to say that the visual novel is not bad and really fun to play.Good try for your first visual novel.


Thank you, sir. :)


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PostPosted: Tue Feb 12, 2013 9:43 am 
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I keep having a network error, so maybe I'll just download this tomorrow.
But ohhh, you're from the Philippines! :) Me too. Teehee.
I promise, I'll play this sometime, okay. :D

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PostPosted: Wed Feb 13, 2013 1:42 am 
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Hmm... this OELVN looks interesting...

But uh... the default text speed... you set it   T H I S     S L O W . . .

And there is the music issue...

But other than those good work and congratulations on finishing your first OELVN work... I'll put this in my review query...

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I made my first brush with it... I saw a lot of pro's and con's and places where I could have fun... prepare yourself!... After I'm done with all the routes... I'm so gonna post and review this... THE UNCLE MUGEN WAY!!! :mrgreen:

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PostPosted: Wed Feb 13, 2013 3:49 am 
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Ran08 wrote:
I keep having a network error, so maybe I'll just download this tomorrow.
But ohhh, you're from the Philippines! :) Me too. Teehee.
I promise, I'll play this sometime, okay. :D


Yep. I'm from the Philippines.
And.. we have the same age lol. xD


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PostPosted: Wed Feb 13, 2013 3:50 am 
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mugenjohncel wrote:
Hmm... this OELVN looks interesting...

But uh... the default text speed... you set it   T H I S     S L O W . . .

And there is the music issue...

But other than those good work and congratulations on finishing your first OELVN work... I'll put this in my review query...

Edit:
I made my first brush with it... I saw a lot of pro's and con's and places where I could have fun... prepare yourself!... After I'm done with all the routes... I'm so gonna post and review this... THE UNCLE MUGEN WAY!!! :mrgreen:

(Welcome to the wonderful and painful world of being an OELVN Dev... you'll know soon enough :mrgreen: )

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Sorry po kung mabagal..
Hindi ko po nacheck yung game. xD
Forgive me. :"((

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PostPosted: Sat Feb 16, 2013 8:47 pm 
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i liked it:) it was short and straight to the point but it was intertaining and very sweet ill look forward to any other vn's you make:)

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lilyrose wrote:
i liked it:) it was short and straight to the point but it was intertaining and very sweet ill look forward to any other vn's you make:)


Thank you. :)
I appreciate your feedback, ma'am :D

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MegumiSatou07 wrote:
Thank you. :) I appreciate your feedback, ma'am :D


I just got called ma'am. :shock: don't I feel old XD anyways no prob anytime :D

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PostPosted: Wed Feb 20, 2013 4:46 am 
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I need help! I don't know how to open it what do I press? I wanna play it really bad!!!


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