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I feel like it was far too much of a twist, I didn't like the random new character it added at the end, and it really came out of nowhere. I liked Hourai more when she was being cute and ditzy XD And it seemed like it was an attempt to make the whole game seem more serious - but that made the comedy from earlier less funny, in retrospect...? Since you know it wasn't really real.

(the ad-clicking avoiding sigh of relief was my favourite)

When I had to pick a username and a name for the MC, I automatically avoided anything related to my own e-mail and my own name. :'D Also, I thought the end would be a jumpscare, so I was like covering my eyes just to get prepared... XD Thank you for not scaring me.

I was pleased to see that Horai was not a complete doofus, but was playing along to write a story.

Having Horai reveal that she was aware of the scam and just went along with it to get material for a web article not only cheapens the story and its hilarity, it also makes Horai be a completely different character than in the main game. The regular Horai defintely seems like a very naïve teenager with idealized and corny views on love and that is shown in her inner monologue, while the epilogue Horai is more like a mid-twenties adult with a sharper tongue. Even with the excuse of pretending to trust the scammer, there isn't simply any reason why the epilogue Horai would think the way she did in the main game.

The difference was so jarring I first thought the epilogue took place in some sort of 'behind-the-scenes' environment deteached from the main storyline's continuity where Horai knows she is a character and would talk to the audience about her theatrical performance in the main game, or something like that.

The additional character had some alright interactions with Horai, but him being behind the scambot is IMO a case of overexplaining. Sometimes, you don't want to give a bunch of technical reasons why and how your premise was kicked off. Here, the readers wouldn't have felt they missed out on anything if you kept the scammer's identity hidden, because your VN's main appeal comes from the absurd comedy that results from the Nigerian Prince scam and Horai's reactions, not the desire to know who the scammer is.

Also, the scam simply being a harmless prank sanitizes the fact that Horai actually loses a lot of money in the Good Ending and think it would have been better to simply keep going in the direction of Horai's naïveté being exploited by the scammer instead of admitting you wouldn't want to go that far and explore your premise to its fullest extent by saying that it was just a joke from an acquaintance of Horai.