The Dolls' Stories (REMOVED)

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Re: The Dolls' Stories

#61 Post by ktalkimist » Mon Jul 01, 2013 5:43 pm

How do I select a doll? Clicking and enter don't work.

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#62 Post by Kagura » Tue Jul 02, 2013 8:16 am

1 Thing bbz.

I.C.WHUT.U.DID.DER.XDD

"Your complaining is more annoying than your delayed puberty 8|"
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Re: The Dolls' Stories

#63 Post by ktalkimist » Tue Jul 02, 2013 7:51 pm

Can't play it. Can't get past doll selection screen. :(

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#64 Post by CheeryMoya » Tue Jul 02, 2013 9:50 pm

ktalkimist wrote:Can't play it. Can't get past doll selection screen. :(


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Click on M!Doll's image then hit the confirm button to the right.


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#66 Post by Ota » Sat Jul 06, 2013 5:23 am

The MDoll is so cute <3 <3 I'll try the FDoll some other time :D
Love the happy end and the comic scenes. Your artworks are awesome :D

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#67 Post by Papierstern » Wed Aug 14, 2013 5:40 pm

beautiful artwork
I really liked the comic panels :D in the game
&the mdoll was way too cute <3
but the whole typing to your doll was soöso - it felt a bit more personal but since you couldn't really change the content/reaction - time-consuming

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#68 Post by IchigoChi » Wed Aug 21, 2013 7:08 pm

Merh I can't get passed where Mdoll ask about Town square.

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#69 Post by Cleo-chan » Tue Sep 10, 2013 4:30 pm

I have registered here only for thank you for this novel! : D Sorry for my english, I'm from Russia, but I want to say that this work has touched my heart so much T^T So beautiful arts, so beautiful story... Really great! Pity that so short... By the way, I have never seen novels where you should type your answer and talk with heroes like in real life!
Congratulations on the release and - once again - thank you very much! I hope that we'll see more your works soon!
P.S. And pardon me but I wrote a little fanfic based on "Dolls' stories". However I have put all credits on the description and gave link of this novel >///< Please, don't be angry ._.

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#70 Post by scorlight » Fri Sep 13, 2013 7:17 am

Woah!! This game is so beautiful @@ Thanks

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Re: The Dolls' Stories

#71 Post by Caveat Lector » Fri Sep 13, 2013 5:39 pm

Overall, I'd say I really enjoyed this, so I'll try to get my comments out as best I can: There are quite a few VN's on here that have an "anime feel", but I think yours gets the "anime feel" across the most, in a good way. Or rather, the "manga feel". I liked the manga panels during the fight scenes, and I didn't find them too fast to read (although that might be because I read a bit faster). It felt like a fantasy manga that would inevitably cut off right at the point where I'd have to wait a month for the next volume. I also liked the interactive nature, and I got a bit "creative" with it (I remember comparing love to chocolate when trying to explain to my mdoll, Charles, and giving my dolls a hard time over waking my character up at five in the morning :lol: ).

However, I do also have some concrit to give you, and some of it is very spoiler-ish:
I was wondering why my fdoll (whom I named Melody) got a "this storyline is incomplete" message at the end. Before reading through the responses on this forum, I thought I was supposed to go back and clear the mdoll's route, or say something different, or type up a certain key word over and over, but nothing! I think it would've been better if you had completed the fdoll's route before releasing it. As is, her route feels like an abrupt demo.

Also, I felt that the happy ending for mdoll was a little too Deus Ex Machina-ish. I hope it's cleared up in supplemental materials to follow, but it's better from a storytelling point-of-view if you somehow foreshadow it (like maybe having the protag come across a book in the library) and explain it in the direct story itself (you don't need a lot of heavy detail, just the basics). It's better to use supplemental materials to expand and flesh out the fantasy world you've set up with details you couldn't properly fit into the main story yet weren't 100% essential to the plot itself, not to explain major plot elements that ARE a part of the story.


And on one, final note, I was interested by the world you set up, but it deserved a much longer, larger treatment. I would've loved to see more of this world, and more of the conflict described by
the shadow puppeteer and his daughter. It's also implied by Melinda in the mdoll's epilogue that it's the higher-ups who are responsible for some of the people's misery, isn't it?
And I would've liked to see how the protag, and the dolls, reacted to these conflicts. So if you do continue this into a much larger project, I would definitely check it out!
Reader Beware!


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Re: The Dolls' Stories

#72 Post by Starshine » Fri Sep 13, 2013 7:07 pm

Downloading right away, looks cute and interesting, might take some time to download 94MB.
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Re: The Dolls' Stories

#73 Post by Starshine » Fri Sep 13, 2013 9:34 pm

The story was amazing, the characters were cute, i picked a male doll.

Typing in the actual words was kinda new.


I have never seen it before in any visual game ever (Well the ones i've played).
Although it starts to get annoying... after a while but its very different and makes you feel like your actually speaking to him, although if you write in the words wrong.... the game will not continue onwards until you type the words correctly


Another thing i noticed was the Townsfolk dont seem to have any eyes, i guess it's probably because they are minor characters.
Neverless the backrounds were beautiful and it was fun playing.

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What would make your eyes
Glisten like mine
With loves divine!

Boo-Boo I couldn't aspire....to anything...
Higher...than to fill that one desire to make it
My own....Bop-Bop-a-Dop-Boop-Oop-a-Doop honey?

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Re: The Dolls' Stories

#74 Post by Nutella_Sandwhich » Sun Sep 15, 2013 7:20 am

I just finished the game, and I gotta say, THIS IS AWESOME! It's freaking beautiful! RIGHT IN THE FEELS!! :D :D :D
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YOU CANNOT JUST HAVE ONE BACON RIGHT?! BACON STRIPS & BACON STRIPS AND MOAR!!

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Re: The Dolls' Stories

#75 Post by AlmondFlower » Sun Sep 15, 2013 7:21 am

Awww... that was sweet yet sad. D: I loved the mdoll's story. ;-; I don't want to spoil anything for those who haven't played, but the game play was kind of fun. I liked getting to type our own responses, but the space limit was a bit strange. I liked his story, through the choices and the library too.
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