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Elven Relations - v1.1 released!
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My comment was in regards to the poster not making any constructive criticism whatsoever and just downright bashing this game for no reason.Ren wrote:While I understand where you come from with that comment, I don't agree.Glazed Donuts wrote:If you think you can make a better game, then stop criticizing others and do it. Then we can talk.
It doesn't take someone who has some games under their belt to criticise a game, anyone is free to express their opinion. The problem has been summarised very well by Lord Shiranai in his post: the critique wasn't constructive at all, and was based on the poster's disappointment based on their own wrong expectations.
It is fairly dangerous to only suggest that one can't talk unless they can do better, because this excuse may be used on anyone who doesn't agree with you, not just someone who is actually being unreasonable with their expectations.
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Ren, Ok let me put the whole "page" thing to rest, I didn't mean for that to sound like a big deal. I was just surprised that so many people liked it being that it is what it is. I will say though even if I had posted a nicer post the only feedback I'm getting is "the game is free". which is not an excuse to make poor games.
Shiranai, you and I are going to become fast friends if we keep this up but you are a little nit picky. Ah there it is again "free, free free!" It's funny I keep reading that when I've seen others' being blasted on their games and they were free games. I didn't read anything about "free free free!"what do you make of that?
Assahtarsrian, a troll really? I'll have you know that I have read a lot of threads, I've been here for a while now reading post and checking out games. It just seemed to me that there was a lot of brown nosing going on with this one that's all. Landmark games? lmao
Glazed Donuts, there it is again, I don't recall ever bashing the game. Just because I didn't drop to my knees like the rest of you doesn't mean that I'm bashing the game.
You want "constructive" fine let's do it.
The story itself is cute in it's own way but lacks any imagination what's so ever. I could have swore that Disney or loony tones already wrote that story. I liked the romantic dialogue between the characters but it was to easy to get the girls. It was as if the main character was some kind of super hunk and with just a few words he could get any woman he wanted. (sounds like a first grade plot to me)
The characters were all one dimensional and lacked any kind of life-like attributes about them. The art could use a lot of work, some of the characters were a tad off in proportion and their eye-line made them look like the hunchback.
The backgrounds could have matched the characters better, it looked like someone took a photo and then poorly photoshoped it. Like I said, I was just surprised that so many people were behind a game that clearly had little thought behind it.
Constructive enough for you?
Shiranai, you and I are going to become fast friends if we keep this up but you are a little nit picky. Ah there it is again "free, free free!" It's funny I keep reading that when I've seen others' being blasted on their games and they were free games. I didn't read anything about "free free free!"what do you make of that?
Assahtarsrian, a troll really? I'll have you know that I have read a lot of threads, I've been here for a while now reading post and checking out games. It just seemed to me that there was a lot of brown nosing going on with this one that's all. Landmark games? lmao
Glazed Donuts, there it is again, I don't recall ever bashing the game. Just because I didn't drop to my knees like the rest of you doesn't mean that I'm bashing the game.
You want "constructive" fine let's do it.
The story itself is cute in it's own way but lacks any imagination what's so ever. I could have swore that Disney or loony tones already wrote that story. I liked the romantic dialogue between the characters but it was to easy to get the girls. It was as if the main character was some kind of super hunk and with just a few words he could get any woman he wanted. (sounds like a first grade plot to me)
The characters were all one dimensional and lacked any kind of life-like attributes about them. The art could use a lot of work, some of the characters were a tad off in proportion and their eye-line made them look like the hunchback.
The backgrounds could have matched the characters better, it looked like someone took a photo and then poorly photoshoped it. Like I said, I was just surprised that so many people were behind a game that clearly had little thought behind it.
Constructive enough for you?
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No.Mr.L wrote: Constructive enough for you?
Use Examples to strengthen your point.Mr.L wrote: The story itself is cute in it's own way but lacks any imagination what's so ever. I could have swore that Disney or loony tones already wrote that story
Was is too easy to get the girls (Gameplay issue, the choices weren't hard enough), or did you feel that all the girls were "sluts"* (writing issue)?Mr.L wrote:I liked the romantic dialogue between the characters but it was to easy to get the girls. It was as if the main character was some kind of super hunk and with just a few words he could get any woman he wanted.
That's not a plot issue.Mr.L wrote:(sounds like a first grade plot to me)
Again, examples. Were all the characters equally bad? Did they all suffer the same problems?Mr.L wrote: The characters were all one dimensional and lacked any kind of life-like attributes about them.
Which characters in particular?Mr.L wrote:The art could use a lot of work, some of the characters were a tad off in proportion and their eye-line made them look like the hunchback.
Was the mismatch a result of poor BG quality, or was it because each component was made in a different technique?Mr.L wrote:The backgrounds could have matched the characters better, it looked like someone took a photo and then poorly photoshoped it.
In general, your critique is hardly constructive. You don't give any specifications which would help us (and the VN maker) see the VN's flaws, nor do you use your experience to say what should be done to fix them. You don't use any examples, which means that when you say "the characters are flat", we can't tell which ones you're referring to.
What you said equals to:
The movie was bad because:
1. The characters were flat.
2. The cinematography was bland.
3. The romance seemed fake.
4. It reminded me of Disney films.
This is hardly enough. All I know is that you hated the film, I don't really know why. As for the
Good luck with the re-writing.
* Sorry, I can't find a better word.
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fortaat ... do you really think you're qualified give advice on critique, hmm?
fortaat wrote:The first paragraph is filled with useless flowery descriptions. Get rid of it.
The second gives detailed descriptions of people we don't know or care about. In addition, since it's a visual novel, we'll see their sprites anyhow. Get rid of it.
The Following chatter made me think it's a children's story, and I lost interest. Skipped to the end.
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Yes.
Just to give some context, that review was for 10 lines of text. I'm not saying I couldn't have done a much better job, but if you know what "flowery descriptions" means (as a technical term), and read the text, it's pretty self explanatory.
Also, it's good to know people (who never participated in the thread) remember my work two months after it was posted
As for my post in this thread - do you think I'm wrong, or your problem is with what I posted two months ago?
Just to give some context, that review was for 10 lines of text. I'm not saying I couldn't have done a much better job, but if you know what "flowery descriptions" means (as a technical term), and read the text, it's pretty self explanatory.
Also, it's good to know people (who never participated in the thread) remember my work two months after it was posted
As for my post in this thread - do you think I'm wrong, or your problem is with what I posted two months ago?
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That was simply the first one I found while searching your history. You're pretty known for your useless critiques, so yes, your reputation does proceed you.
No, I found it ironic, or whatever a good substitute for that word may be. If you're going to pick on someone's critique style, while you're so severely lacking in your own, just seems like you're trying to pick a fight, or, at best, severely biased and will only properly critique things you like (all others get critiques like the one you picked apart).fortaat wrote:As for my post in this thread - do you think I'm wrong, or your problem is with what I posted two months ago?
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So, you basically agree with what I said here, but decided to use my post to air out your views on my critiques?
It's not a very honest thing to do. If you have a personal problem with me, just use a PM. If you have a problem with my critiquing "style", which other people might share, open a thread.
It's not a very honest thing to do. If you have a personal problem with me, just use a PM. If you have a problem with my critiquing "style", which other people might share, open a thread.
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I like my posts right where they are, thanks.
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Sigh... internet drama.
You misunderstood - I'm no admin, you're welcome to post wherever you like. I just pointed out that you are motivated by grudge, and aren't really trying to help anyone.
Hell, I can refute it using the thread you gave as an example.
But regardless, let's assume I'm wrong on all accounts - my critique always sucks - do you really think this the best way to handle it?
If you have a problem with my critique on a certain game, why not discuss it at the appropriate thread?
If you think I'm wrong about a VN/WIP thread, write your own critique on it and we'll have a discussion. If your arguments are good enough, you could prove I'm X/Y/Z, and thus help me improve my critique in the future, which in turn will help the community as a whole.
The makers/artists/writers, as well as other forumites, could only profit from a critical look at the games.
I would love for you to join next time, as I think you're an intelligent person, and I appreciate your opinions. Being so, I'm quite disappointed all you saw fit to contribute are a few sarcastic remarks on an unrelated thread.
You misunderstood - I'm no admin, you're welcome to post wherever you like. I just pointed out that you are motivated by grudge, and aren't really trying to help anyone.
My first post here was a critique, and you agreed with it. Leaving your self contradiction aside, it's pretty easy to refute your claim.Aleema wrote:You're pretty known for your useless critiques, so yes, your reputation does proceed you.
Hell, I can refute it using the thread you gave as an example.
But regardless, let's assume I'm wrong on all accounts - my critique always sucks - do you really think this the best way to handle it?
If you have a problem with my critique on a certain game, why not discuss it at the appropriate thread?
If you think I'm wrong about a VN/WIP thread, write your own critique on it and we'll have a discussion. If your arguments are good enough, you could prove I'm X/Y/Z, and thus help me improve my critique in the future, which in turn will help the community as a whole.
The makers/artists/writers, as well as other forumites, could only profit from a critical look at the games.
I would love for you to join next time, as I think you're an intelligent person, and I appreciate your opinions. Being so, I'm quite disappointed all you saw fit to contribute are a few sarcastic remarks on an unrelated thread.
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Well, it isn't that bad. I played a little, so far it's fun. I didn't finish it yet because currently I'm working on lots of drawings.
It may not be the best thing out there but at least it's amusing and has decent art (even if the backgrounds are photos).
It may not be the best thing out there but at least it's amusing and has decent art (even if the backgrounds are photos).
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All this over a little comment I made? Too funny.
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I have gotten Asilana's ending and found it exciting. For a second, a wondered if the Caller was going to boil Takuya in oil.
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