Haha, agreed on 95% of everything you said!xKairi wrote:Downloaded this earlier and played through Raizen's route only for now lol. I saw the OP
and I thought it was really cheesybut I won't comment on it anymore...
Hmmm, as I was playing, I kept getting the impression that the story was rushed -mainly because it lacked detail.
I thought that not much was put into thinking when developing the story which lead me to believe it was 'rushed'. I don't know how that epic of a "child trainer" the MC is, but why would an almighty powerful company CEO choose to hire her and not some successful and professional businessman? To save bucks? No way. He's filthy rich. Besides, she teaches children... what would she possible know about running a company? And for crying out loud, why does she only have 3 days? Unless the CEO has some kinda disease and he only has a few days to live left lol... Well, I may just be taking things too seriously though. I do tend to do that a lot! XD
But the main thing that made me feel like the story was rushed was that the MC and the character just fell in love too fast. No one finds love in 3 days. If that's possible, just WOW. And other than that, there weren't enough situations that may have lead them to fall in love. I felt that Raizen just kissed the MC out of the blue! Unless he's THAT thankful to her for training him
And, his singing in the bathroom thing. Why'd he started to sing so suddenly? I also felt that him asking what the MC's opinion on her singing went too fast. I imagined he'd act all embarrassed first since he is the quiet/shy-type after all. Then suddenly he says he's going to bed. He was just taking a bathroom break, right? A dialogue like "maybe we should call it a day," but again, I may just be being too critical here.
And then there's Raizen walking-in on the MC taking a shower. Why didn't she lock the door? Any girl would have, right? Some explanation could sure help. I mean, I understand why Raizen just opened the door without knocking. It was unlocked, so you'd think nobody was inside (although there's the case of the shower's sound). The MC didn't react too embarrassed for me... but that may just be because she's mature..? I dunno lol. I'm 14 and I literally would have been red as a tomato and mad as ever LOL.... but most of all, I felt that Raizen kissing the MC was out of the blue. Again, I didn't see quite enough moments for them to fall in love with each other. Though it might be one of those "I'm so happy right now so I'm just gonna go ahead and do this without thinking twice" which might explain why he felt awkward afterwards. Lol he must be really thankful to the MC! XDAlso, the font bothered me a bit (especially when the text displayed is really long!) ...but it may be just me and my bad eyesight. Maybe you can enlarge it or replace it with a better font? I understand it's supposed to look hand-written, though. Another thing is the way "yeah" was spelled. I believe "yea" is incorrect, although I'm not sure myself if there's such a thing as an incorrect spelling for that xD
Some other suggestions for the next release:
- an in-game menu. I noticed there wasn't one like usual otome games where there's a preferences button, back to main menu button, the all-important skip button, and such.
- a CG Art Gallery. Everyone loves this and it looks like some people who tried the game want to see it too
A wish of mine is that the backgrounds would match up to the awesomeness of the sprites. LOL
Nonetheless, thank you for creating the game! Despite those, I still had fun! I especially like the idea of adding voices and I'm so excited for that! I actually stumbled upon this since I knew one of the voice actors! I'm definitely getting the game's next release!
I felt the same about the plot about too rushed, and a lack of character development lol.
Personally, I agree on the whole 3 days thing. Like whatttttt?!
Personally, I would feel that having at least a month to train the guys would be good enough!
3 days to teach them and make them fall in love is... rushed and weird.
And, well yeah... like I said before, each of the guy's routes seem really similar, which is a bit bland. All of their routes felt the same, except they had different mothers and personalities (not really, as they weren't developed enough for me).
I sort of hoping for more scenes unique to each guy. Like maybe Raizen serenading the teacher, or maybe Kyosuke taking her out on a romantic date. Idk, but yeah, I wanted more scenes to flesh out their character lol.
Well, that's what I wish/hope for in the upgraded version, as long as having a CG gallery!