Ex Astris 02 [GxB][Light Sci-fi/Supernatural]

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Ex Astris 02 [GxB][Light Sci-fi/Supernatural]

#1 Post by Cera L. Hendry » Mon Feb 17, 2014 8:40 pm

Ex Astris
Chapter 02

Set in a ‘near-future’ on a fictional world, Ex Astris follows the story of Lanis Rosenberg, a newly graduated doctor working in the Loennian military. Doubtful of her abilities to cope in the army and lost with her direction in life, Lanis’ world is suddenly turned upside-down when she is transferred to the secretive, militaristic nation of Xian. There, she is assigned to a subject named A-28 'Ash'. An emotionless, unstable, biologically engineered soldier and her opposite in every way…

Lanis is taken to the secretive nation of Xian to begin the next step in her medical career. What the young woman doesn't expect is to inadvertently stumble upon incidents which already threaten her freedom, and her life. In a country full of oppression, secrets and silence, the power to look through the veil of time comes with steep consequences.

Format: Episodic / Linear Visual Novel
Engine: RenPy
Genre: Light Sci-Fi / Drama / GxB / Supernatural
Platform: PC/Mac/Linux
Duration: Short
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Creator's Note: I've finally plucked up the courage to post the second chapter. XD I always work myself into a state before uploading something that I've invested a lot of hard work, emotion, money and free time into. It feels like putting your heart and soul out for the world to judge, love and criticise. Such is the life of any creative I guess. ^^; It's why we do what we do right?

I don't have much to say on the content itself. This chapter got re-worked completely quite a few times… I also managed to fix my looping music and ambient tracks so they sound smooth now. My professional job got crazy busy for me late last year (I partook in nightly Japanese language courses too.) and I just couldn't devote any time to non-paying projects. But this year looks to be slightly less hectic, and I'm hoping to get another one, possibly (sorta, maybe) even two chapters completed by year's end. We shall see! :D

I'd also love to thank everyone who played through and enjoyed the first chapter! It really means the world to me and propels my enthusiasm for this project. *Hugs for all.*

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#2 Post by Googaboga » Mon Feb 17, 2014 8:56 pm

I remember the first chapter. I liked it a lot. It's nice to see the second one released :3. Do your choices in the previous chapter matter or are chapters separate in that regard?
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#3 Post by Cera L. Hendry » Mon Feb 17, 2014 9:17 pm

I did have a large-ish branch originally but I realised I'd put important and different information in both branches, and that if I mentioned something down the track in a future chapter and a person never took that branch I'd be making a loophole for myself. Any story with 'time' elements is just asking for holes which I'm desperately trying to keep in check. (Trust me to pick awkward story-telling devices.) XD My 'notes' document is so big now so that I can remember things I've mentioned and their future impacts to the story lol.

So in short, yes, there are choices. They open up alternate lines of dialogues and reactions, they also give additional info or insight on a character. Do they impede on the overall experience of the chapter's story? No. ;) So don't feel you have to go back and do it all again if you're happy enough.

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#4 Post by Googaboga » Mon Feb 17, 2014 9:23 pm

I see. That's understandable. I'll be sure to play this when I have a chance :3.
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#5 Post by Chibichann » Tue Feb 18, 2014 2:14 am

Loved the first chapter.really desperate to read the second one,the story and the hero is just....lovely

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#6 Post by Genod » Tue Feb 18, 2014 12:57 pm

Oh sweet, I'd forgotten about this :) I fondly remember the first chapter so I'm bound to get to reading this at some point. Congrats on getting it done!

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#7 Post by Mad Harlequin » Tue Feb 18, 2014 4:53 pm

I remember the first chapter, and it set up an interesting world. So naturally I downloaded and played the new one.

I'll have more detailed feedback once I can go back through it and write down my specific thoughts. (I play through VNs at least once to enjoy them and bring out the fine-toothed comb later.)

One important thing I noticed is that
Lanis's vision of her daughter specified that the girl has "brown eyes like her mother" (I'm paraphrasing a bit), but Lanis has green eyes. So are Lanis's eyes actually brown but hidden under green contacts? Or have I spotted a continuity error?
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#8 Post by Cera L. Hendry » Tue Feb 18, 2014 5:39 pm

Thanks Mad Harlequin. You don't have to go to all that effort ^^; This is just a fun project for me.
About the child's eyes… When Lanis said 'her' mother, she was actually referring to her own mother, Verona, not herself. :) Green eyes are a recessive gene, brown are are dominant. So if Lanis were with someone who also didn't have a green eye recessive gene then the chances of the child having a 'throwback' to the more dominant brown eyes that she carries is possible. This is factoring in that Ash may indeed also carry a brow eye gene. ;) That was the reasoning behind my thinking anyways…
Thanks so much for taking the time to read it through! :D

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#9 Post by Mad Harlequin » Tue Feb 18, 2014 7:19 pm

What you say is true . . . and also, I think I can safely blame my reading comprehension failure on my lack of quality sleep last night. D'oh. I should really make sure I know what the heck I'm talking about before I comment. :oops:

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#10 Post by Rainbow Colors » Wed Feb 19, 2014 8:45 am

Thank you for your efforts~ The first chapter certainly piqued my interest and I'm rather glad it hasn't become vaporware >u> I still have some things to do so I'll just download it now and give my feedback(if any?) after I finish some more important things.

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#11 Post by dasea » Sat Feb 22, 2014 12:56 am

Ash in a casual hoodie was a bit of a shock to me. Like seeing a teacher in pyjamas but in a good way.
I liked this chapter. The ending was a bit of a cliffhanger and left me really wanting to read more.

How many chapters are you planning? I have a feeling this is going to be a long series.

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#12 Post by scorlight » Sat Feb 22, 2014 3:44 am

It's finally out :D Woah, I have been waiting for this the whole time ^^ Great
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#13 Post by Cera L. Hendry » Sun Feb 23, 2014 5:33 pm

@dasea. Bahaha, nicely put regarding Ash's hoodie XD At least it was in a good way.

As for length hmm… that's a tough one! It won't be short. Which is why I stopped the manga version at 3 chapters because it was simply going to waste my lifespan lol. Not that swapping to a Visual Novel format was any less work, as I've now learnt lol. At least the art is consistent. It's what bothered me most about my webmanga. I'm thinking around 20? Could be less, I think it'll depend on my pacing. Some elements further into the story aren't set in stone just yet.

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#14 Post by Rainbow Colors » Wed Feb 26, 2014 2:19 pm

I'm just hoping that the alcoholic content negates the effect of whatever they administered to her. Then she develops an immunity against it, so trying to give her another shot won't work.
But I guess I'm guessing by a long shot.

And oh dear, more or less 20? That's a lot. (But if that's what you wish... well, you're the one making it. I just hope you don't suddenly abandon it in the middle because I would really like to see the whole story :3)

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#15 Post by Lesleigh63 » Mon Mar 17, 2014 3:03 am

I really enjoyed the first chapter of this, and was so glad when I realised this was chapter 2 and not what I'd already played (took me a while).

No disappointments in the second chapter. It has a good pace and the world is getting fleshed out. Also has some interesting concepts coming through. I like the characters of Lanis and Ash (Ash is a fascinating character in my opinion and I definitely want to know more about him). I'm looking forward to chapter three.
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