Ehehe, thank you u_u;; You are too kind!Wert568 wrote:I would love something more indepth! I got a few more endings since the last time I posted.Blood Loss, Communication, Promise, Mushrooms, What if?, and Big Smile.and these characters were built from regular cliches? I could almost write books about each one! I really dig your writing!
I almost wishthat the three days Atchan was there was a time loop of sorts. That way he'd remember some of the things the others said and call them out on their behavior. Especially (I hate liars) Noelle. She seems to know Atchan is a certifiable doof who has very low self worth/esteem issues, but is still willing to kill him simply because he avoided her out of sheer nervousness? She either doesn't seem to understand that she's proving his point or she's lying(irony?) to herself about how she feels about Atchan and simply wants to kill him out of spite. She also lied about her bunny habit and being angry in the first place! And while Atchan really is a doof, he's no Makoto. (He actually reminds me more of Shinji and the cowardly lion character archetype, with his fear and later acceptance of change.) He may have messed up, there is no way he is the only one who messed up bad and does not deserved to be judged by someone such as Noelle. Amu is partly to blame as well with her showing off his Atchan's letters knowing full well that Noelle liked him too. She could have encouraged her to write to him too and give her Atchan's address, buuuut I guess she was reading to much of her shojo manga and saw Noelle as a rival so she decided not to help her out of fear of losing Atchan.
and so far, I think Amu isbest girl, out of everybody's psychosis she seemed to be the most well adjusted.(yeah I know she stabbed Atchan with a fork but at least she saved his sorry behind from Noelle in one ending.) She was also crucial in convincing Noelle to not kill herself or anyone else. While I have been critical of Noelle, I don't hate her at all(she needs like at least a sea of friendly support and hugs.) , I just wished she tried to reach out to Amu, since Amu had a direct connection to Atchan. Maybe Noelle and Atchan could have learned their lessons earlier this way. Eri is meh honestly. She should learn sisters before misters
by the way, I couldn't help but notice thatall three leads had some sort of contact with Amu's Shojo manga.(manga is evil?) They all should have been reading Higurashi instead. Maybe then they'd trust their Nakama.I kid I kid.
a guide would be awesome as I'm kinda stuck at 5 endings left.
Thanks again for the good read!
When I write stories, I usually build most of the characters from anime cliches, ahaha XD Like, for this story I wanted a cheerful and tomboy-ish girl and a more quiet, mysterious one to counterbalance her. Eriri was a later edition, who was added mostly because I really, really like himederes xD Her route does not add so much to the story overall, and it's more light-hearted than the other two routes, so I consider it more like a bonus route, or a joke route XD
After I work out which 'cliche' I'm going to base a character on, I start devloping and writing the story, and see how they evolve. I can try to explain how I developed everybody's personality in a bit more depth... though this might get a little rambly. I apologise in advance!
I shape a lot of my stories around conversation. I really like writing dialogue, and I try to use dialogue to get my character's personalities across. Sometimes, I work whole scenes around very certain, specific exchanges of dialogue I like, or think would be funny. So, a lot of the time, I have a clear idea of how I want my characters to 'sound' like, and I try to give them all distinctive speaking patterns/verbal quirks to make them easily identifiable (Amu is kind of casual and chatty, Eri is overly formal but lapses into more casual speech when she gets worked up, and Noelle often doesn't talk very much. I also, initially, wrote her as repeating certain words, like Rena does in Higurashi - 'I wonder, I wonder' - but I tried to curb it, because it felt too much like a rip-off XD)
And I like doing two-character conversations with one character acting as the funny man and the other the straight man. As Atcchan is the narrator and the most 'normal' (or 'bland', I guess XD) of the characters, he often ended up as the 'straight man' (sometimes his retorts and comebacks were a bit too cutting considering he is supposed to be shy and fairly well-mannered, though, so I tried hard to make him a little softer with his comebacks. I scrapped a lot of scenes from Eriri's route because he was too mean to her, and it felt out-of-character).
And this leaves the three main girls as the 'funny men', meaning they all had to have distinct personalities (since they all occupy the same role, pretty much), and they also all had to say fairly weird stuff on a regular basis. That's the main reason I made Noelle act kind of airheaded sometimes - because it made conversations with her easier to write, as without a certain amount of 'odd'ness Atcchan could comment on, writing conversations between her and Atcchan was too hard; especially when she doesn't talk very much.
I am also bad at writing conversations with more than two people, because it makes the funny man/straight man dynamic a lot harder to pull off since more is going on (and I have a habit of forgetting characters in large scenes and not giving them enough lines, oops), so I tried hard to avoid this. And during scenes where I did have a few characters together, I usually stopped Atcchan from talking too much and gave somebody else his role as 'straight man' role for a while (with Eri and Tsuzumi, Eri ends up becoming the straight man).
So, yes. A large part of my characters' personalities come down to how I want to structure my dialogue. And a lot of characteristics they have were deliberately chosen to make conversations easier for me to write XD
I'm sorry if that got too long, ahahaha n_n;;;
And I thought, as I wrote this, people would compare Atcchan to Shinji. Since they are both kind of wimpy, but never really do anything massively wrong (I don't think? I haven't watched Evangelion, but I know people hate Shinji because he's kind of quiet and meek). I think Atcchan is working on a very similar character archetype XD
And I am glad you like Amu n_n; I like her a lot, too. I let a few of my friends play through the VN to help me proof-read and they all hated her XD She is one of the most well-adjusted characters in the story, though, and is far, far less quick to get angry with you. Most people seem to like Noelle more, since the VN does kind of focus on her more, and she has the tragic past XD
And I didn't notice that thing about the shoujo manga XD Of course, if they had read Higurashi, I'm sure they'd be able to get together in a big friendship blob and learn to accept one another, and everything would work out fine! Then they could break fate and play cute club games forever!!!! XDDD
Thank you for your feedback n_n; I hope you don't mind my massive, massive reply, ahahaha n_n;;