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*Forgot to add a little content warning! There's some strong language here.

Hey everyone. I just finished putting together my first visual novel. I made it as a means to learn the basics of Ren'Py... the very basics.

It's extremely short and the dialogue was written as I went along. But hopefully it's somewhat enjoyable (even if it's in a "laughably bad" kinda way).

I'd love to get some feedback or suggestions for the future. I'm always looking to improve. I'm sure there are some incredibly obvious things I missed in the coding!

Also, I still haven't figured out how to add some nice credits to the end of the game yet. I put the credits on a notepad in the download folder. I'll put them here as well, just in case. I really appreciate the art that was made available for this little beginner's project! I promise I'll learn how to put together some proper credits next!

Sorry if this isn't the correct area for this topic... it's technically a completed game... but it's still my first one.

Download - https://www.mediafire.com/?wyu5ha71haiyys2

Credits -

Made with the Ren'Py visual novel engine!

Art Assets -

http://ppppantsu.blogspot.com/

KONETT'S RESOURCES - http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewto ... 52&t=28840

Antiskill - http://antiskill.newgrounds.com/

gugo78 - http://gugo78.newgrounds.com/



Music, Writing, and Production by Dillon Taylor.

Does the download include the mac version? Also, you may want to upload some pictures, just to show others what the game looks like.

Pretty good for a first attempt! Art is nice, not full of typos - It's just TOO DARNED SHORT!! Hope that you will expand on this, or make a longer game; you have proved that you can do it. Onward and upward!!! (How's that for encouragement?)

philip

philip wrote:Pretty good for a first attempt! Art is nice, not full of typos - It's just TOO DARNED SHORT!! Hope that you will expand on this, or make a longer game; you have proved that you can do it. Onward and upward!!! (How's that for encouragement?)

philip

Haha, thanks for the words of encouragement! This was mainly just to see if I could get the basics down. Branching paths, labeling everything correctly, and even just the transitions. I'm already working on a new project though. It'll be much larger than this one and hopefully of a higher quality as well! =P

@ lunarVN-

I apologize for my poor choice of words in my first response; "pretty good job . . ." is an understatement! "Excellent" and "wonderful" are much more appropriate. I will look forward to your future efforts!

philip